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Twenty years on from the fall of the Berlin Wall and the wave of change in the Eastern Block,
Twenty years ago, two great challenges lay ahead of — 

moving from an entirely centralized system to a market economy, and 2) accommodating
globalization as the foretold international trend immediately after the end of the Cold War

This is the complete essay. Please check it and comment.

As many other graduated high school students, I have to come to the most important decision of
my life: choosing a suitable place to further my education. Through the years, especially my last
three years in high school, I had the opportunity to discover my passions and then came up with
the awareness of my professional goals. My special interest in mathematics and the influence
from my friends, particularly from my brother were the reasons why I decided to pursue finance
as my career. Attending RMIT University will help me to actualize the desire to succeed in my
future life.

The idea of continuing my study in RMIT University dates back to 2004, when my father heard
about the establishment of the first international university in Hanoi. This led to my thought of
being trained in a totally different study environment, where I could enjoy high-level curriculum
system while still being able to stay in my hometown to take care of my parents and especially
my grandmother. With fervent support from my family and my friends, I decided that I would
enroll in RMIT University. Having spent quite a lot of time learning about the university, it could
be assumed that its reputation for teaching qualities and modern facilities are among numerous
reasons for my determination. Obviously, it is an ideal place that satisfies my hope of enjoying
the best studying conditions in my country.

The desire to train in RMIT University was the motivation for me to study so hard on English
during high school time, which led to my 7.5 IELTS band score. This result gives me certainty
that I have no trouble communicating and I could follow the lectures seamlessly. Furthermore, I
have the ability to acquire knowledge quite quickly. Having been working tirelessly on
mathematics since secondary school gives me a logical mind and an independent way of
thinking. These would be advantages for my studying process in the future. I have been studying
really hard during my 12 years in school so I believe that I'm qualified for the scholarship.

Recently, I have paid more attention to learn about my favorite field in order to gain more
academic knowledge as well as to be more certain about choosing it as my future profession. I'm
well aware of what I want and I have confidence that attending RMIT University will give me a
chance to pursue my dream. I hope that after finishing my course, I would be able to apply for a
good job then accumulate wealth. Knowing that finance and commerce have massively
contributed to the society, I eagerly want to be a part of it. I had great time doing my volunteer
work in Vinh Phuc province. Working there helped me partially understand how indigently that
many Vietnamese people have to live. Hopefully, in the future I would have the opportunity to
donate a part of my fortune to help improve the poor's lives.

It is a long way to realize my dream, and it certainly will be another long way to go to actualize
it. I was always anxious that the family's budget would cause me some difficulties carrying out
my determination. That makes the scholarship even more significant to me. If I am given the
scholarship, I can further my education without having to worry about my family financial
problem, and more important, I can stand a better chance to do what I want, which is to take a
step closer to success.

Again, I'm not really satisfied with it. Even myself after reading the complete essay, I can hardly
find something call "original" or "outstanding". Anyways, please read and give me your
comments. I really need your help. Thank you very much.