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Intentionally Lost

My first comments: - Sentence variation - Good imagery - Zoning out part bad

Reading by relight in an oversized leather recliner while drinking warm tea, I

become lost in a book. The books story is a life other than my own because Im taken to a place where none of the dramatic occurrences affect me. Its an imagined reality. The sounds of silence, that is turning pages, crackling embers, and sipping become overshadowed by the speaker in my head. Its the power of being lost and knowing exactly where you are. Its the power of getting lost in a book. ! Have you ever been so enthralled in a book, that when you quit reading and think

about it later you think Awh, I wanted to know how it ends? Then you realize its not a TV show - you can go back to it anytime you want and it will still be there. Itll even be there without commercials. Unlike your real life, a books story is a life that doesnt go on without you. You have all the control because you decide when the story happens, yet you have no control because you dont have any part in how it happens. ! While reading, a human nature rarity occurs - there becomes a moment in time

when its not all about us, not pertaining to us at all, yet we still care. With a friend, they may be telling a story which isnt about us and we listen intently, yet it still involves us because the person speaking expects a response from us. Authors and characters dont expect a response. They just put the words out there. Therefore, novels prohibit selshness. If youre truly lost in the book, its scientically proven that you begin to
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accept the story youre reading as reality. Its a powerful mind trick, getting lost in a book - you think its about you, but its not. !

Depending on the novel, if youre reading intently your worries can go away. The

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stories act as a vacation where you can go absolutely wherever youd like, whether it B eli ef exists or not. Everyone needs to get away at some point, and unlike the hours and b s a

ke days it takes to get ready for trips, getting lost in a book takes on average fteen gre d u re at de p in minutes, the amount of time it takes the brain to fully focus. t
! Theres a difference between getting lost in a book and zoning out. When zoning

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out you dont retain any of the information youre reading, however, when intently reading book, no matter the topic, one is fully aware of each word which is most likely why reading increases intellect.

Page by page your emotions uctuate nearing the books end. Youre excited

about nding out what happens in the end, yet there are fewer and fewer pages of what has become surreally your story. The last word. Your heart drops. They say when you
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lose something to just be happy that you had it. So when Ive lost the joy of my story, I just remember theres another book out there to get lost in. I believe its the power of getting lost in a book.

I like the balance here between the order in your essays layout and the freeflowing diction you use. My second comments: 1. Transitions! 2. Does getting lost in a book resound in all paragraphs? 3. Sentence variation? 4. Is my content good? How do I make it better