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Truit 1 - Ideus

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The ideos ore fhe heorf of fhe messoge, fhe confenf of fhe piece, fhe moin fheme, fogefher
wifh oII fhe defoiIs fhof enrich ond deveIop fhof fheme. The ideos ore sfrong when fhe messoge
is cIeor, nof gorbIed. The wrifer chooses defoiIs fhof ore inferesfing, imporfonf, ond
informofive-offen fhe kinds of defoiIs fhe reoder wouId nof normoIIy onficipofe or predicf.

SuccessfuI wrifers do nof feII reoders fhings fhey oIreody
know, e.g., "If wos o sunny doy, ond fhe sky wos bIue, fhe cIouds
were fIuffy whife ," They nofice whof ofhers overIook, seek
ouf fhe exfroordinory, fhe unusuoI, fhe bifs ond pieces of Iife
fhof ofhers mighf nof see.

Eoch fime you compIefe o poper, if wiII be groded wifh fhe
rubric on fhe bock. Toke o CLOSE Iook of fhe rubric.



When o poper is being groded on ideos, fhe focus is on:


______Using o boIonce of showing ond feIIing.
______Using defoiIs fry fo poinf o picfure in fhe reoder's heod.
______Toking o unique opprooch when wrifing obouf fhis fopic.
______ Sfoying on fopic fhroughouf fhe enfire wrifing.
______ Using o cIeor fheme/messoge.



irections:

I. In your groups, evoIuofe ALL of fhe pieces of sfudenf wrifing for fhe froif of IDEAS onIy.
Z. Use fhe checkIisf fo heIp you decide how weII fhe sfudenf hos done. Then, seIecf o score (I
- b) for fhe piece bosed on fhe use of ideos. (Use fhe rubric os o guidelll)
3. AFTEP everyone hos scored eoch poper, scon fhe QP codes fo reveoI fhe ocfuoI score fhe
poper received.
4. Then scon fhe Find Ouf Why code which reveoIs fhe expIonofion for fhe score.
id You know?

The word rubric comes
from fhe Iofin word
"ruby". If dofes bock fo
medievoI fimes when
imporfonf secfions of
fexf were morked in red.
IDEAS PU8PIC
This puper is cIeur und focused, It hoIds the reuder's uttention,
ReIevunt unecdotes und detuiIs enrich the centruI theme,

A, The fopic is nurrow ond munugeubIe,
, ReIevunt teIIing quuIity detuiIs give fhe reoder imporfonf informofion fhof goes beyond the obvious
or predicfobIe.
C, PeosonobIy uccurute detuiIs ore presenf fo supporf fhe moin ideos.
, The wrifer seems fo be wrifing from knowIedge or eperience; fhe ideos ore fresh ond originuI,
E, The reoder's quesfions ore unticiputed und unswered,
F, Insighton undersfonding of Iife ond o knock for picking ouf whof is significonfis on indicofor of
high IeveI performonce, fhough nof required.

3The writer is beginning to define the topic even though deveIopment is
stiII busic or generuI,
A, The fopic is foirIy brood, however, you con see where fhe wrifer is heoded.
, Supporf is offempfed, buf doesnf go for enough yef in fIeshing ouf fhe key issues or sfory Iine.
C, Ideos ore reosonobIy cIeor, fhough fhey moy nof be defoiIed, personoIi;ed, occurofe, or exponded
enough fo show indepfh undersfonding or o sfrong sense of purpose.
, The wrifer seems fo be drowing on knowIedge or experience, buf hos difficuIfy going from generoI
observofions fo specifics.
E, The reoder is Ieff wifh quesfions. More informofion is needed fo "fiII in fhe bIonks."
F, The wrifer generoIIy sfoys on fhe fopic buf does nof deveIop o cIeor fheme. The wrifer hos nof yef
focused fhe fopic posf fhe obvious.

1As yet the puper hus no cIeur sense of purpose or centruI theme, To
etruct meuning from the tet the reuder must muke inferences bused on
sketchy or missing detuiIs, The writing refIects more thun one of these
probIems:
A, The wrifer is stiII in seurch of u topic, broinsforming, or hos nof yef decided whof fhe moin ideo of fhe
piece wiII be.
, Informofion is Iimited or uncIeur or fhe Iength is not udequute for deveIopmenf.
C, The ideo is o simpIe restutement of fhe fopic or on unswer fo fhe quesfion wifh IiffIe or no offenfion fo
defoiI.
, The wrifer hos not begun to define the topic in o meoningfuI, personoI woy.
E, Everything seems us importunt us everything eIse, fhe reoder hos o hord fime siffing ouf whof is
imporfonf.
F, The fexf moy be repetitious, or moy reod Iike o coIIecfion of disconnected rundom thoughts wifh no
discernobIe poinf,
riting Piece 1

This is something you might want to read if you are babysitting for the first time.
When your first arrive, you led the kids play games. Play with them for a little while. Let them play any
game they want. But do not let them play games with gore.
f you order dinner, order pizza, if they can eat it. Order two pizzas. Let each child have two slices
except the baby who you give half a slice. Let each child have some milk if they can drink it!
After supper you need to change the baby's diaper. Ask the kids where the diapers are. Get
something damp to wipe the baby with. Then you change the diaper. Put the diaper in a plastic bag,
tie the bag and throw it away.
Now let the kids watch videos for the rest of the night. Let them pick what movies to watch. To
prevent fighting, vote on which movies to watch first. f they can eat it, let them eat popcorn. Now turn
out the lights and start the movie!
After the first movie get some blankets and pillows to get ready for bed. Put on the last movie. Right
before they go to sleep tell the kids to go to the bathroom.
Before you go to sleep, clean up the house. First vacuum up all spilled popcorn. Clean up pizza if you
have not done that. Wipe off all of the tables. Sweep all the floors. The final thing to do is to vacuum
all the floors.
This is something to remember if you ever babysit again, bye!
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riting Piece Z
A lot of computers are selling in stores today. Many people have one. They are very popular in
schools, home's and office's and many other places. They help you with your keyboarding practice.
Some disks let you have fun. They can do neat and amazing things. They can also help you learn.
Computers are nice to have around the house house for a lot of stuff. One very good thing adout it is
that it will not harm the earth. They are infact very helpfull to our earth. Many peoples lives have been
saved by little divices around their necks. Litt computerized divices. Some little robots help mentally
challenged, deth or blind people. Some robots can be just to play with. Talking robots' moving rodots.
Some rodots can even get you things.
When you go to fairs you can see robots on display. Robots can do jus adout. think they will do
more in the future. People are gettin fired from their jods because rodots can do the job better. But
still think computers are fun.
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riting Piece 3


o well in School yes. love to read and Rainier View.
School is a Beast Beast teacheris.
Ms: grimm
Ms: grimm is my Beast teacher.
Ms. grimm Loves to read With The Kibs




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riting Piece 4

When you're having a bad day don't you sometimes feel like you don't have any friends. 'm sure it
would cheer you up to get a card of kindness from a friend or potential friend. When you see
someone who looks really sad, send them a card of kindness and maybe you'll get one back.
Other good people to send them to are teachers; they deserve some credit for helping out with
student's educations. Wouldn't you love to get a card from a student, saying, "Thank you for helpeng
out with my education." Or, teachers could write them to students for staying in and helping.
Cards of kindness can go to anyone, not just people at your school. t doesn't even have to be
someone you know very well. People everywhere deserve credit, or at least a thank you, for helping
out.
Seeing other people get cards of kindness could also encourage people to help out and be kind.
Everyone deserves for people to thank them when they do something nice. Or tell them you like them
and you're their friend when they're having a bad day. Sometimes people forget what a good friend
you are, and you have to remind them.
hope the next time someone does something nice for you, you send them a card of kindness. also
hope you get one the next time you do something nice.
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riting Piece

Rise of the Raptors, Roar! Raptors are my favorite kind of dinosaur. a raptor usee's it's claw's for
defense and to catch it's prey like Saurapods This is a drawing of the hand claws and tae claws
The claws had a karitin sheath on the bones. The teeth were used to bite and tear off meat of the
prey. on the next page will show the teeth normal and up close.
These are the teeth
The riges on the theeth were used to make it easyer to bite and chew the meat of the prey. The skull
was skiny and big. Here is a drawing of the skin
On the next page will show the whole skeliton
Here is the whole skeliton.
Here is a raptar with it's skin on.
My favarite raptar is utah raptar, the second largest raptar.
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Wrifing Piece # ______


______ Used o boIonce of showing ond feIIing.
______ Used defoiIs fry fo poinf o picfure in fhe reoder's heod.
______ Took o unique opprooch when wrifing obouf fhis fopic.
______ Sfoyed on fopic fhroughouf fhe enfire wrifing.
______ Used o cIeor fheme/messoge.

OveroII Score: _______/b











Wrifing Piece # ______


______ Used o boIonce of showing ond feIIing.
______ Used defoiIs fry fo poinf o picfure in fhe reoder's heod.
______ Took o unique opprooch when wrifing obouf fhis fopic.
______ Sfoyed on fopic fhroughouf fhe enfire wrifing.
______ Used o cIeor fheme/messoge.

OveroII Score: ______/b



Wrifing Piece # ______


______ Used o boIonce of showing ond feIIing.
______ Used defoiIs fry fo poinf o picfure in fhe reoder's heod.
______ Took o unique opprooch when wrifing obouf fhis fopic.
______ Sfoyed on fopic fhroughouf fhe enfire wrifing.
______ Used o cIeor fheme/messoge.

OveroII Score: _______/b











Wrifing Piece # ______


______ Used o boIonce of showing ond feIIing.
______ Used defoiIs fry fo poinf o picfure in fhe reoder's heod.
______ Took o unique opprooch when wrifing obouf fhis fopic.
______ Sfoyed on fopic fhroughouf fhe enfire wrifing.
______ Used o cIeor fheme/messoge.

OveroII Score: ______/b
Wrifing Piece # ______


______ Used o boIonce of showing ond feIIing.
______ Used defoiIs fry fo poinf o picfure in fhe reoder's heod.
______ Took o unique opprooch when wrifing obouf fhis fopic.
______ Sfoyed on fopic fhroughouf fhe enfire wrifing.
______ Used o cIeor fheme/messoge.

OveroII Score: _______/b