Unit Four Storytelling Online Greenlight Review By Meg Leslie

Treatment
A middle-aged man is tending a space station alone, keeping watch over the delicate equipment therein. He looks over the equipment in the engine room, then returns to his quarters. In his quarters there is a photograph of a young girl - presumably his daughter ± wearing a butterfly-print tshirt while skipping, and coiled around it is a skipping rope. The man looks at the photograph wistfully when the power goes out. He leaves his quarters to investigate. He turns to go to the engine room when a slight glow catches his eye. A butterfly flutters at the end of the corridor, and he pursues it through the maze of corridors. The butterfly periodically stops to let him catch up, as though leading him somewhere. The butterfly stops at the door to the shuttle hangar, and the man hesitantly enters. The butterfly flies in and directs his gaze to the shuttle, and, by extension, the planet below. The man hesitates again, but looks back at the butterfly, which bobs as though nodding, and he strides over to the shuttle. As he is about to enter it he looks back, only to see the butterfly has vanished. He is astonished for a moment, then turns and heads back out of the hangar. For a few seconds it seems as though he has given up, but he returns with his daughter¶s photograph and skipping rope, and he gets into the shuttle with a determined look on his face.

Step Outline
Man looks over engine room Returns to quarters Looks at daughter¶s photograph Lights go out Man goes to investigate Turns to head to engine room but stops Sees butterfly Gives chase Butterfly leads him to hangar Man enters Regards shuttle Butterfly µnods¶ Man approaches shuttle Looks back Butterfly is gone Man leaves hangar Returns with his daughter¶s photograph and skipping rope Enters shuttle

Premise
A man driven to total isolation by his daughter¶s death is prompted to return home by an unusual source.

Logline
A bereaved father has secluded himself from the rest of the world by taking over care of a space station. A butterfly, perhaps the manifestation of his dead daughter, or of his own loneliness, appears and leads him to the shuttle as though to say µgo home, keep living¶.

Script
EXT. SPACE STATION Space station shown orbiting Earth. Camera zooms in through small porthole. INT. ENGINE ROOM PROTAGONIST-WHO-HAS-NO-NAME tends to the engines. He stares at them for a few moments, then turns and leaves.

INT. CORRIDOR. Protagonist walks listlessly through corridors. He is very clearly alone - there are no other noises but his footsteps and the ever-present hum of the machines.

INT. PROTAGONIST¶S QUARTERS Protagonist opens door into his quarters and walks in. He rolls his shoulders and stretches, and heads over to his bed. He stops just before getting to it and regards his bedside table, on which is a photograph of a young girl, with a butterfly on her t-shirt, skipping. He looks at the photograph for a while, then slumps down onto the bed. The lights flicker and go out, to be replaced by blue emergency lighting. The protagonist rolls his eyes and hauls himself to his feet and leaves.

INT. CORRIDORS The protagonist begins to head back to the engine room, but something catches his eye. A butterfly flutters at the opposite end of the corridor. The protagonist tilts his head and goes to investigate. The butterfly flies away, and the protagonist gives chase. The butterfly leads him through the corridors in a wild chase until it stops at the doors to the launch bay. It waits for the protagonist, who hesitantly goes through.

INT. LAUNCH BAY The protagonist looks at the shuttle, then back to the butterfly. The butterfly tilts forward, as if nodding, and the protagonist looks back at the shuttle. He takes a step towards it, then looks back to the butterfly, only to see that it has vanished. He stares, then steels himself and steps onto the shuttle.

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