You are on page 1of 15

What kinds of examples can I use?

How do I incorporate them into my essay?

EXAMPL ES

Storytelling in your diagnostic Finally, over the years many innocent people have been killed due to gun test
violence, be it due to massacres or being caught in the crossfire due to gang fights. For example, in the recent Sandy Hooks Elementary School shootings, twenty innocent children and six adults died, making it the second worst mass shooting ever since the Virginia Tech shootings. The perpetrator, Adamn Lanza, was armed with a rifle and entered the elementary school where he began to gun down children as well as teachers who were present at that point in time before committing suicide by shooting himself in the head. Investigations show that he had a personality disorder, which they claimed led to the shooting

Citing website addresses in your reading task

Introducing the example:

For example, a total of twenty six innocent lives were lost when Adam Lanza opened fire in Sandy Hooks Elementary school.

Practise presenting examples and evidence as you would write them in your essay.
You will work with the same question as per the QA lesson What you will receive: - News articles/ Statisitics/ Study findings - Stand and point has already been completed for you - Synthesize information and present it as you would in your essay - Evaluation and elaboration of evidence is not required

TASK: WRITE ONE OR TWO SENTENCES TO INTRODUCE THE EXAMPLE IN YOUR ESSAY

WHAT ARE EXAMPLES AND HOW DO WE INCORPORATE THEM?

Examples help to support your point, and so strengthen your argument and stand. (A) Statistics/ Study/ Survey (B) Expert opinion (C) Quotations (D) **Examples taken from credible sources: news sources/ online articles/ websites/ publications (E) **General knowledge

WHAT KINDS OF EXAMPLES?

Good examples usually are: - Relevant - Recent - Not clich - Not anecdotal: may not be representative

EXAMPL ES

Statistics/ Study/ Survey


DONT According to statistics, . DO Provide year Provide name of organisation/ individuals

Based on data released by the Singapore Department of Statistics in 2011, it can be observed that In a 1997 Harvard University study, researchers found that One of the findings in a 2010 survey conducted by local organisation Action for Aids reveals that

HOW TO INCORPORATE

Statistics/ Study/ Survey


DONT Overwhelm readers with data In particular, the number of university graduates in the Singapore resident population more than doubled from 266,600 in 2000 to 634,100 in 2010. Among the resident university graduates in 2010, 326,400 were males and 307,700 were females. DO Highlight key findings or trends relevant to the question More Singaporeans are receiving higher education than before, as evident from latest figures released by the Singapore Department of Statistics. The figures show that the number of Singaporean university graduates has more than doubled in the last decade.

HOW TO INCORPORATE

Expert Opinion
DONT Quote people whose words carry little weight DO Say who and designation Explain relevance

According to Daniel Willingham, a cognitive psychologist at the University of Virginia, an excessive reliance on tests in the education system impedes the intellectual growth of children

HOW TO INCORPORATE

Quotation
DONT DO Quote people whose words Explain relevance of quote carry little weight Interpret the quote and Quote without any explanation expand on what it says

if criminals were forced to confront their victims, this could act as catharsis for the victim and would simultaneously force the criminal to face the victim of his crime. In fact Cherie Blair, the wife of ex UK Prime Minister Tony Blair, said in 2005: If criminals were forced to apologize to their victims, society would be giving more attention to the needs of the victim, especially for a sense of closure. This intervention of Mrs Blair in the law-and-order debate was based on the ten years that she has spent sitting in courts as a recorder when she has had to sentence offenders and suggests that such interaction could at least go some way towards healing the sense of injustice currently being felt by many victims

HOW TO INCORPORATE

General Knowledge/ News Article

Assume that your readers have familiarity with the example.


Allude to it and draw out from your example the point that you are trying to make.
For example, a total of twenty six innocent lives were lost when Adam Lanza opened fire in Sandy Hooks Elementary school. The ease with which individuals suspected of mental disorders can acquire arms, like in Lanzas case, highlights the need for tighter legislation rather than freedom when it comes to firearm ownership Synthesize when presenting the example and evidence

HOW TO INCORPORATE

NEXT: LINK BETWEEN POINT, EXAMPLES AND STAND (EVALUATION AND EXPLANATION)

Which point do you want to emphasise?


Should the State limit freedom? Point: Yes, freedom needs to be limited for people who cannot exercise it in a rational and responsible manner. For example, a total of twenty six innocent lives were lost when Adam Lanza opened fire in Sandy Hooks Elementary school. The ease with which individuals suspected of mental disorders can acquire arms, like in Lanzas case, highlights the need for tighter legislation rather than freedom when it comes to firearm ownership

Emphasis is on identity- since point is that certain groups of people cannot have access to arms.

HOW TO INCORPORATE

Which point do you want to emphasise?


Should the State limit freedom?

Point: Yes, freedom for some people may lead to catastrophe for others.
A total of twenty six innocent lives were lost when Adam Lanza opened fire in Sandy Hooks Elementary school. This terrible loss of lives, made even more poignant by the fact that many of the victims were helpless first-graders, has renewed the call for tighter legislation over firearms

Emphasis is on effects- since point has to do with the implications of freedom

HOW TO INCORPORATE