Writing Correction

Classification Essay
 Introductions
• Purpose:
• * Hook the reader's interest.
• * Introduce the topic and provide context.
• * Present a clear thesis statement that outlines the
main argument or focus of the essay.
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• A thought-provoking question: "Have you ever
wondered why some people learn more
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effectively
Essay)
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A surprising fact or statistic: "The COVID-19
pandemic forced over a billion students worldwide
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to transition
Learning Essay)
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A relevant quote: "As Marshall McLuhan famously
said, 'The medium is the message.'" (Social Media
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Users
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Context: Briefly introduce the topic and explain
why it's important or relevant.
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Strong Thesis Statement: Ensure the thesis
statement is clear, concise, and specific. It should
preview the main points that will be discussed in
the essay.
Example of
Introductio
• In the digital age, social media platforms have
n deeply ingrained in our daily routines,
become
revolutionizing how we connect, communicate,
and consume information. With billions of users
worldwide, these platforms have fostered diverse
patterns of engagement, leading to the
emergence of distinct user types. Understanding
these types – frequent users,infrequent users,
celebrities, and those who abstain – offers
valuable insights into the multifaceted nature of
social media interaction and its implications for
individuals and society.
Conclusion
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• Purpose:
• Summarize the main points of the essay.
• Restate the thesis statement (in different words).
• Offer a final thought, reflection, or call to action.
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• Avoid Repetition: Summarize the main ideas
without simply repeating the same phrases from
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the body paragraphs.
• Provide Closure: Offer a concluding thought that
leaves a lasting impression on the reader. This
could be a reflection on the broader implications
of the topic or a call to action.
• Look to the Future: If appropriate, suggest
potential directions for future research or
discussion on the topic.
Sample of
conclusion
• In conclusion, recognizing and understanding one's
preferred learning style is a valuable tool for academic
and personal success. Visual, auditory, reading/writing,
and kinesthetic learners each have distinct ways of
processing information, and tailoring study strategies to
these preferences can significantly enhance the learning
experience. However, it's important to remember that
learning styles are not rigid categories; many individuals
exhibit a combination of styles. By remaining adaptable
and open to different approaches, learners can unlock
their full potential and embark on a lifelong journey of
growth and discovery.
Content
• Depth and Analysis • Critical thinking
Coherence
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Clear Thesis Statement: Ensure the thesis
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statement is specific, focused, and clearly
conveys the main argument of the essay.
• Topic Sentences: Each paragraph should
begin with a topic sentence that introduces the
main idea of that paragraph.
Coherence
•
&Transitions: Use transitional phrases (e.g.,
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"however," "in addition," "therefore") to connect
ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
• Logical Flow: Ensure the ideas presented
follow a logical progression, building upon each
other and supporting the overall thesis.
Grammar
• Sentence Structure: Vary sentence length
and structure to avoid monotony and create a
more engaging writing style.
• Verb Tense Consistency: Ensure verb tenses
are consistent within sentences and
paragraphs.
• Subject-Verb Agreement: Make sure the
subject and verb in each sentence agree in
number.
• Punctuation: Use correct punctuation,
including commas, semicolons, and periods, to
Grammar
• Incorrect verb tense
• Original: "Nowadays, water transportation is
often chosen for freight, individual travel or
tourism."
• Revised: "In contemporary times, water
transportation is frequently utilized for freight,
individual travel, and tourism."
Grammar
• Subject-Verb Agreement:
• Original: "Methods of learning has a variety
forms of learning..."
• Revised: "Learning methods encompass a
variety of forms..."
Grammar
• Preposition Errors:
• Original: "Social media is very useful to help
people can upgrade their relatives’s
information..."
• Revised: "Social media is very useful in
helping people update their relatives'
information..."
Vocabulary
• Precise Word Choice: Encourage students to
use specific and accurate words to convey their
meaning.
• Academic Language: Promote the use of
academic vocabulary appropriate for the subject
matter.
• Variety: Avoid excessive repetition by using
synonyms and different sentence structures.
Vocabulary
• Repetitive Language:
• Original: "...different types of learning
methods are available to everyone to gain new
knowledge."
• Revised: "...diverse learning approaches are
accessible to all individuals seeking to acquire
new knowledge."
Vocabulary
• Vague Language:
• Original: "...it sounds very new with us..."
• Revised: "...it may be a less familiar
concept..."
Vocabulary
• Informal Language:
• Original: "...you just need to search it on
Facebook, YouTube, or Tik Tok and they show
you a lot of those."
• Revised: "...you can easily access a plethora
of such content on platforms like Facebook,
YouTube, or TikTok."
Vocabulary
• Informal Language:
• Original: "...you just need to search it on
Facebook, YouTube, or Tik Tok and they show
you a lot of those."
• Revised: "...you can easily access a plethora
of such content on platforms like Facebook,
YouTube, or TikTok."
Vocabulary
• Original Sentences • Revised Sentences (with
improved vocabulary and
(with issues): academic tone):
• 1. "The spread of the • 1. "The emergence of the
Coronavirus at the end novel coronavirus in late 2019
rapidly escalated into a global
of 2019 quickly spread pandemic, drastically altering
throughout the world..." human behavior across
(Repetition) various domains, including
education."
• 2. "...it is easy to travel
• 2. "...individuals now have a
by any transportation plethora of transportation
route." (Imprecise options at their disposal."
language)
Vocabulary
• 3. "They tend to make • 3. "These individuals
different things and are often create unique
sought after by brands as content and are
brand ambassadors." frequently recruited by
(Colloquial language) companies to serve as
• 4. "They only read and brand representatives."
view post content without • 4. "They primarily
actively participating in consume content
liking, sharing, and passively, refraining from
commenting activities." engaging in interactions
(Wordiness) such as liking, sharing, or
commenting."
Vocabulary
• Replace "good" with • Substitute "a lot of"
more specific with quantitative
adjectives: terms:
"Beneficial," • "Numerous," "a
"advantageous," significant number of,"
"valuable," "effective," "a multitude of," "a
"productive" considerable amount
of"
Vocabulary
• Use academic verbs • Incorporate
instead of generic transitional phrases:
ones: • "In contrast,"
• "Analyze," "furthermore,"
"examine," "moreover,"
"investigate," "nevertheless,"
"evaluate," "assess," "consequently," "as a
"demonstrate," result"
"illustrate," "elucidate"