Evaluative Notes: Synopsis Draft One

Built tension well Characterisation is strong Unity of time, place and action is good. Interesting dynamic. Phone call: what is it trying to say/ what do we need to know? Dont know who the protagonist is. This has to be someones story. If we dont, we dont learn anything about those characters. There must be a change. Within this focus on a character, the stakes are raised. Cant identify an inner problem. Could possibly be that the older sibling has a responsibility that he doesnt want. Identify what the character is doing on the computer.