Dramatic Environment Essay

1. The paper is about how humans cannot bare different extreme climates so they build houses to accommodate what they need. The thesis states that we need to start taking care of the environment or we will become our own enemy. 2. Some good things that are happening are stating the cause and effect for homosapiens building homes for themselves while wrecking others. 3. The language could use some work along with grammar. The exaggeration of moving to a different planet and running out of oxygen could be toned down. 4. Use more facts than strong opinions because obviously this student is forceful with her opinion on this topic. 5. I give this essay a 64% D because of weak grammar, misspelled words and also dramatic beyond anything.