Sociology Reflection After reading threw the first paragraph the only thing I noticed was that two

of the sentences should have ended with a question mark instead of a period, but besides that I think I did a decent job on it. The first sentence of the second paragraph is a run on sentence and easily could have been broken up into two separate sentences. Why little bit later, I use the word far instead of fair. I could have made the second paragraph flow a little better than I did in the essay. The third paragraph has a ton of good of good facts to back up what Im talking about. The ending of the third paragraph transitions I believe very well into the fourth paragraph. The only thing I think that is wrong with the fourth paragraph is that it is super long. The paragraph is over a paper nut I really dont know where I would divide the paragraph into two. But once again we get to the conclusion paragraph and once again it is super short. The final sentence is good but I just need to recap a little more on what I wrote about without introducing any new ideas.