Name: Hannah Song Date: 10/21/13 Block: A6 TOOLS FOR EN L!SH S"HOLARS: S#$$AT!%E ASSESS$ENT &ART 1: ANAL'S!S OF A &ROFESS!

ONAL (R!T!N SA$&LE

Carey, Mike. "Cautionary tale about kids and sports." Press Democratic Media Company. September 27, 2012. Web. October 7, 2013. The te t, !Cautionary tale about kids and sports" by Mike Carey, is a non#$iction editorial. The purpose o$ this editorial is to in$or% the audience about the e$$ect o$ sports on a child. The audience o$ this editorial &ould 'enerally be anyone &ho &ould read it, but speci$ically people &ho play sports or a parent o$ so%eone &ho does. The %ain idea o$ this editorial &ould be about ho& sports can be an e perience that can a$$ect anyone(s li$e. The )le%ents o$ *iterature that %ake this editorial a 'ood read is that there are %any di$$erent allusions that support the author(s %ain idea, such as an )+,- docu%entary, a book about youth basketball, and se.eral other sources. The diction used in this article is pro$essional/ it is a %atter#$act article that is si%plistic and opinionated. 0n a short story or so%ethin' si%ilar, there are e.ol.in' characters and an intricate plot, that is not the case $or an editorial. The synta is %ade up o$ si%ple short para'raphs. The topic para'raph, slo&ly eases you in and then 'i.es a contradictory sentence to the $irst one, &hich 'ets the reader interested. The synta is .ery or'ani1ed and strai'ht$or&ard. The structure o$ the te t relates to the purpose o$ the article because as the author continues to 'i.e out details, the reader understands the thesis %ore clearly. The thesis is presented in the end o$ the article, &hich is a pretty s%art %o.e because i$ the author did clearly state the thesis in the be'innin' o$ the article, it &ould 2uickly %ake the article borin'. The editorial lacks in i%a'ery as it does not 'i.e the reader any descriptions that appeal to their senses, the synta o$ an editorial isn(t constructed $or i%a'ery. The %ood o$ the editorial is .ery strai'ht#$or&ard, it doesn(t ha.e any color$ul %oods, because the editorial pro.ides the %ain idea and %ultiple supportin' $acts. The &riter uses the .oice to %ake the article sound like it is an i%portant topic to be heard, so the author used the in$or%ation to be or'ani1ed in a .ery unco%plicated &ay $or the %ain idea to be easily understood. The &riter %ade sure to support the %ain idea &ith %any details and elaborations, but o.erlooks the other perspecti.es o$ the %atter, &hich %akes the article an editorial. The attitude that the &riter e udes &ithin his &ritin' is si%ilar to the .oice o$ the article. The author %akes the %ain idea an essential thin' to kno&, he acts desperate as i$ it is crucial to ha.e this kno&led'e tucked a&ay into the brain. 3nd 0 'uess it is crucial, this could a$$ect any child4s %ental and e%otional 'ro&th. )ditorials are told in the $irst person, but rarely use phrases like, "0 kno&," or "0 belie.e," e cept $or &hen the article starts to co%e to a close. &ART 2: OALS

5ecause 0 &ant to &rite an editorial that &ould be thou'ht thorou'hly about, 0 &ill or'ani1e %y &ritin' in a &ell#de.eloped, easily understood para'raphs that are %ostly in third person, &ith snippets o$ $irst person. 5ecause %y diction should establish a $eelin' o$ $ascination and inspiration, 0 &ill use &ords that are intelli'ent and strai'ht#$or&ard.

0 &ill use %ultiple allusions in order to $ully support %y &ritin' because i$ 0 6ust said that scientists can create or'ans in a lab, they &ould e pect a reliable e planation , as %ost people &ould think that &ould be a .ery $ar#$etched idea $ro% a +tar Trek Mo.ie.

&ART 3: OR! !NAL "O$&OS!T!ON Future of Medicine: Bio Printin! ,erhaps in the $uture, printers &ill re.olutioni1e the &orld o$ %edicine, churnin' out hearts, kidneys and other .ital or'ans to relie.e the lack o$ transplantations. 5ut printin' a li.er or another or'an %ay sound like so%ethin' out o$ a science $iction no.el, but &ith the de.elop%ents in 37 printin', the idea doesn(t sound too %ind#bo''lin'. While 37 printin' has been e$$ecti.ely used in the %edical di.ision to produce prosthetic li%bs, dental $i tures, or custo% hearin' aids, no& it is ready to start printin' %ore intricate structures, speci$ically the hu%an tissue. -o& you %ay be &onderin', ho& e actly can &e do this8 Well, 37 printin' or additi.e %anu$acturin' is a process o$ creatin' 37 solid ob6ects o$ practically any shape $ro% a di'ital %odel. 37 printin' is success$ul by usin' additi.e processes, in &hich the ite% is %ade by %ultiple layers o$ di$$erent shapes &ith %aterials such as plastics, 'lass, %etal, and in this case, li.in' cells. 9irtually anythin' could be %ade &ith 37 printin'. 0n a C5+ -e&s article, the !bionic" ear is introduced by researchers at ,rinceton :ni.ersity. The !bionic" ear is an operati.e de.ice that can hear at $re2uencies $ar out o$ the ran'e than a nor%al hu%an ear. The researchers printed cells and nanoparticles, $ollo&ed by a cell culture to e%bed a s%all coil antenna &ith cartila'e. +o to put it short, they ha.e %ade an ear that %ay be %ore e$$ecti.e than our hu%an ones, as it intert&ined tissue &ith electronics, &hich is re.olutionary, as people only thou'ht that that could only happen in the %o.ies. 0n a T)7 talk, 3nthony 3tala, director o$ the Wake ;orest 0nstitute $or <e'enerati.e Medicine in Winston#+ale%, -.C., addresses ho& there is a %a6or health crisis in ter%s o$ the lack o$ or'ans, and ho& bio#printin' can re%edy this. 3s &e a'e, our or'ans tend to $ail %ore, and there aren(t enou'h or'ans to 'o around. 0n the last 10 years, the nu%ber o$ patients re2uirin' a ne& or'an has doubled, &hile the nu%ber o$ transplants has barely 'one up. =is tea% used a desktop ink6et printer, but instead o$ usin' ink, they used cells. 5ut they are also constructin' a %ore sophisticated printer, &here the printer scans the patient(s &ound, then prints the layers o$ cells that the patient re2uire on the patient(s the%sel.es. 3nd that is pretty e traordinary. :n$ortunately, !5io#printin' or'ans $or hu%an uses &on(t happen anyti%e soon," says 3nthony 3tala. 0n the talk, there &as a brie$ clip o$ a patient &ho actually recei.ed an en'ineered or'an.. and this &as 12 years a'o. This 6ust sho&s ho& lon' &e ha.e been obli.ious to bio#printin'. 0n a di$$erent inter.ie&, 3tala states that the di$$iculty o$ buildin' or'ans &ith 37 printin' $alls into about $our le.els o$ co%ple ity. ;lat structures, like hu%an skin &ith %ostly one type o$ cell, is one o$ the easiest or'ans to create. Then the tubular structures &ith t&o

%a6or cell types, such as blood .essels, $alls into the second le.el. 3 third le.el o$ co%ple ity co%es to the sto%ach or bladder, &hich ha.e %ore co%plicated $unctions and interactions &ith other or'ans. -o&, the hi'hest le.el o$ co%ple ity includes or'ans such as the heart, li.er and kidney. Or'ano.o, a bio#printin' co%pany, has already started de.elopin' a 37#printed li.er %odel $or testin' the sa$ety and e$$icacy o$ dru's, and is also creatin' cancerous .ersions o$ li.in' tissue %odels $or testin' cancer dru's. Continuin' &ith the idea o$ curin' cancer, &ith this ne& technolo'y ,ro$essor <osalie +ears and her tea% are printin' identical breast cancer tu%ors, and each tu%or &ill be treated &ith a di$$erent cure, &hich &ill allo& us to 'et a bio y $ro% a patient(s tu%or, load the printer &ith di$$erent cell types and then reprint the tissue. 3nd &ithin a &eek they &ould be able to test the tu%or and see &hich cure it best responds to. 0n a year(s ti%e the printer could be used to help $i'ure out &hich dru' can best tar'et an indi.idual(s cancer, leadin' to a custo%i1ed, success$ul cancer treat%ent. 5io#printin' is the ne t re.olution $or the &orld. We(.e 6ust seen the tip o$ the iceber'. 0t &ill be'in to distribute or'ans &ithin the ne t 10 to 1> years. 0t %ay not e ecute the &ildest o$ bio#printin' drea%s, but $or nu%erous patients, it %ay pro.e li$e#chan'in' enou'h. &ART ): REFLE"T!ON oal One Re*lect+on: 0 belie.e that 0 did acco%plish %y 'oal, because %y para'raphs &ere si%ple and e plicit. 0 $ollo&ed the pro$essional &ritin' sa%ple, and %y tone re%ained .ery $actual and third person, until the .ery end &here 0 'a.e %y opinion and the 'ist o$ the editorial in $irst person. oal T,o Re*lect+on: 0 a% al%ost sure that %y editorial established a $eelin' o$ $ascination, but %aybe not the inspiration part. 0 tried %y best to include (>0#cent( &ords to support %y editorial to its $ullest. My peers ha.e told %e that the editorial &as a .ery interestin' topic as they had ne.er heard o$ bio#printin' be$ore. =ope$ully, they responded &ith a&e and &onder%ent. oal Th-ee Re*lect+on: 0 acco%plished %y 'oal o$ includin' %ultiple allusions/ because o$ the allusions the editorial could be co%prehended %uch %ore easily than i$ there &eren(t any. 0 persisted throu'h $indin' the allusions to the best o$ %y ability. 3nd 0 inno.ated the best &ays to introduce the allusions. $. (-+t+ng &-oce//: 3t the be'innin' o$ %y ori'inal co%position, 0 had di$$iculty in $indin' a speci$ic topic to &rite about, as editorial topics are .ery broad and could be on practically anythin'. +o 0 be'an searchin' throu'h the -? Ti%es, si$tin' throu'h T)7 talks, and intently listenin' to interestin' podcasts, until 0 had a %ini#breakthrou'h o$ &here 0 read an article in the -? Ti%es about printin' tissue. -o& that topic really struck %y interest, so 0 be'an a'ain readin' articles, &atchin' .ideos, and listenin' to podcasts, but 0 had the purpose o$ researchin' a sin'le idea@ 5io#,rintin'.

One o$ %y 'oals $or the ori'inal co%position &as to include %ultiple allusions, but once 0 had typed up a $e& allusions, it beca%e tricky to $ind others. ?ou(d think there &ould be an in$inite a%ount o$ use$ul in$or%ation about bio#printin', but un$ortunately there &as not. 0 repeatedly be'an $indin' the sa%e in$or%ation $ro% di$$erent sources &hich %ade %e sli'htly annoyed. 5ut a$ter a&hile o$ researchin', 0 care$ully read %y editorial a'ain, and reali1ed that %y article &as per$ectly $ine, and 0 took the responsible risk o$ the acceptance that $urther scrutiny o$ %y &ritin' &ould only %ake it &orse. 3$ter 0 ca%e to this, 0 had a certain $eelin' o$ relie$ and satis$action &ith %ysel$. 3s 0 &as stri.in' $or accuracy, 0 used %etaco'nition to $inali1e the polishin' o$ %y editorial.