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HI Binguni!
Your piece is amazing, and I really enjoyed that, what makes it special is how y
ou potray Kamala's character because she dominates the story all along.
When it comes to the characters, you defined them very well. I really enjoyed ho
w you relates to the reader what is going on. But I felt Ramu's character can be
crafted even more clearly, what is his backround? Is there any possiblity to be
linked with arm struggle? As Naduni pointed out readers don't know what caused
his death, If you touch that part slightly, It could be a more realistic.
Dialogue
Kamala's inner thoughts are reflected here accurately. I like the part of how sh
e made up her mind of her husband, A typical wife thoughts exposed with care(con
vince herself). I like it throughly.
PoV
Third person fits perfectly, and you handled it carefully. we travel through Kam
al's eyes and how she sees the things gives the reader a idea to understand her
struggle.
plot
You have constructed this piece with a linear pace. I realized that she was hopi
ng for good news, but in her mind corner a fear is disturbing her, you could hav
e reflected that state of mind even more clearly. No body is expecting for bad
news, but they are doubtful sometimes, their thoughts vary time to time. not sta
ble always.
thats my opinion Binguni, apart from that I really enjoyed this piece.I should m
ention how the title fits with the story . Amazing