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Abdulla Al Remeithi
Professor Koning
English 113B
30 March 2014
Education: Crossing Class Boundaries
Education is the most powerful weapon, which you can use to change the world. -
Nelson Mandela
Education plays a big role in ones life. Without education, most people would not be
where they are today. Although not many have the opportunity to be well educated, their
families work hard and risk a lot to provide them with that chance. In the text, Where We
Stand: Class Matters by bell hooks, she talks about the risks her family have taken so she
could be provided with the education she deserved. Although it is not the deciding factor,
education still helps people move up their current social class, and opens up more doors to
their future.



Peer Review Checklist







Please respond to each of the following questions in the corresponding text box.
Note that the boxes expand with your responses and detailed, specific, constructive
and thoughtful feedback is of the most help to the writer (and will also help you to
earn the fullest credit on this assignment). Once you are finished, save and either
copy and paste or upload and post this completed document as a response in your
groups peer review forum.

Your name: Glenda
Name of writer being reviewed: Abdulla
Title of paper being reviewed: Education: Crossing Class Boundaries

What is the greatest strength
of this paper?
I really like your title and quote!



Does the introduction grab
your interest and make you
want to read on? Explain
your answer.

The introduction is really good!


Does the conclusion end
with a bang, not a whimper?
Why or why not? If not, what
suggestions for revision can
you offer?
No conclusion yet.
Is the organization of the
paragraphs effective? Are
there particular paragraphs
that might be rearranged for
best effect?
Only the intro.
Is the argument clear? Is it
sustained throughout the
paper? If not, what
suggestions for revision do
you have to offer?
The argument is clear. Is going to talk about education.
Does the essay meet the
assignment requirements
(Review prompte.g.,
respond to the prompt,
follow formatting
requirements, include
quotations and a works
cited)? Is there anything that
needs to be corrected prior to
submitting for grading?
Meets MLA so far.
Are there particular grammar
and style issues that need to
be addressed (e.g., run-ons,
transition issues, etc.)? If so,
please share them.
Just a few grammar issues noted in comments
Where should the author add
more details or examples?
Explain your answer.
Give examples on real life stories.


What is your favorite part of
this piece of writing?
The intro grabs my attention.



What other comments might
you provide for the writer?
Hope your paper ends up really good! I really like where your paper is
going!




*Adapted from Reinking, J. A., Hart, A. W., & Von der Osten, R. (2001). Strategies for successful
writing: A rhetoric, research guide, reader, and handbook (6th ed.). Upper Saddle River, NJ: Prentice-
Hall.
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