Rhetorical Analysis Essay Revision Strategy

Introduction
Input more scholarly sources to attract the audience.
Add the importance of the deduction method convention.
Make a transition of the deduction method from Victorian Era to modern-day.
The introductory sentence needs to be more captivating.

Body paragraphs
The topic sentences need to be clearer on what I will be presenting in this essay.
Include some more scene analysis, such as background sound.
Add a transition sentence at the end of the paragraph.
Eliminate any scene analysis that is irrelevant to my topic sentence.
Add more details for the summaries so the reader knows I am an expert of the scene.
Delete any sentences that do not pertain to my thesis.


Conclusion
Delete any sources that do not pertain to my thesis.

Priorities
Correct grammar and punctuation, such as combining sentences and cutting repetition.
Creating a flow throughout the whole essay
Keep my essay relevant to my thesis, or consistency.
Include transition sentences at the end of each paragraph.
Use a formal tone.
Have the sources be relevant to my thesis.
Include more scene analysis when necessary.
Have a better structure, such as introducing the films before my thesis statement.
Edit the summary of the scenes to be concise and relevant to the scene analysis, such as
Holmes and Moriarty playing chess in one scene while Watson finds the assassin.