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Austyn Taylor
Mr. Griffin
Tech Prep 12
18 November 2014
"My Papa's Waltz"
By Theodore Roethke
The whiskey on your breath

Commented [a1]: This word makes me think about

Could make a small boy dizzy;

Commented [AT2]: This word makes me think that the scent is

very strong, which means the other character has been drinking a
lot.

But I hung on like death:

Commented [AT3]: The man has a great influence on him,

which tells me its his father.

Such waltzing was not easy.

Commented [a4]: This word makes me think about

Commented [AT5]: This word makes me think the scene is in a
negative setting.

We romped until the pans

Commented [AT6]: This sentence tells me that theyre not

actually dancing.

Slid from the kitchen shelf;

Commented [AT7]: This sentence makes me think about two

individuals having an altercation.

My mother's countenance

Commented [AT8]: This word tells me that some things are

falling.

Could not unfrown itself.

Commented [AT9]: The characters mother is watching whats

going on.
Commented [AT10]: This sentence leaves me to believe that,
his mother was so upset that she couldnt even attempt to fake
happiness.

The hand that held my wrist

Commented [AT11]: The character is being restrained to some

point.

Was battered on one knuckle;

Commented [AT12]: This specific word makes me think the

mans hand has been through some type of physical action.

At every step you missed

Commented [AT13]: This word makes me think these two

characters are moving together.

My right ear scraped a buckle.

Commented [AT14]: This word lets me know that the other

character has scratched one of the characters.

You beat time on my head

Commented [AT15]: This phrase tells me that there is some

physical discipline going on.

with a palm caked hard by dirt,

Commented [AT16]: This makes me think the other character

has balled up his fist.

Then waltzed me off to bed

Commented [AT17]: This word makes me think that thee man

followed him to bed.

Still clinging to your shirt.

Commented [AT18]: This tells me that despite the recent

mans actions he still is interested in his dad.

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