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Antony Parada Porron

Professor Batty
English 114A
10 December 2014
Reflection for Progression A
I have fixed a lot of grammar issues that were located on the second body paragraph and
replaced some sentences or rephrase them to make the reading more understandable. For
example I changed the sentence My dad looked as us crazy... to My dad looked at us and
laugh, because it is awkward to know you dad looked at you in a crazy way. I also added more
to the conclusion to describe again how the events change the way I look at animals. I also added
more description details about how the guinea pig looks, feel, and sound. I also added another
statement when my father is telling me about how I would feel if someone came in our home and
try to take me. For describing the guinea pig I added how she looked mostly for example I add
how small she was when she first came into my home. And also I compared her fur to a carpet
feeling to let the reader gets an understanding of how the guinea pig would have felt if they
would hold her. According to my professor and my peers I needed to add more details about the
guinea pig and also fix a lot of grammar issues that would throw the reader off. And focus more
on how I would present the events to the reader so they can farther have an understanding.

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