Rhetorical Analysis Revision Strategy

Introduction
Fix second sentence regarding the introduction of Joan Watson, in order to make it more clear
Provide a better explanation for when she met Holmes.
Fix sentence that talks about readers seeing through Watsons eyes.
Include the season in thesis to be specific on where we see Watsons progress.
Body Paragraphs
Expand upon the reason why Joan Watsons reason for following Sherlock
Include topic about Joans switch from sidekick to partner
Add analysis for why Joan Watson is a more complex character, and include the difference
between John Watson and Joan Watson.
Conclusion
Include that Watson is written to be complex, in order to flesh out the character development.
Top 3 Revisions
Add more specifics
Include better explanation for why Joan is considered a partner and not a sidekick
Remove redundant words