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Period 9 12 Lyrics CFG Notes
Period 9 12 Lyrics CFG Notes
Ariana
Melissa
Casey
Brittaney
Daisy G.
Hilario
Kaitlin
Jose
David
Jackie
Ana
Cathy
Diana
Cristina
Samantha
Fernando
CFG
9/12
Rhyme
need
with
succeed.
Develop
your
rhyme
scheme.
AABB.
Last
line.
Showing.
Flowing.
Knowing.
Sewing.
Maybe
use
for
a
later
Verse/Bridge/Chorus,
because
it
is
so
strong.
Rap?
Imagery
of
gold
inside.
Gets
attention.
Strong
beat
through
rhyme.
Verse
too
long?
9
lines
in
each
verse
is
a
lot,
but
you
can
do
it!
--
Add
a
story
line
of
some
sort.
Simplifying
the
verses
with
a
story
could
be
helpful.
Gonna
be
the
show,
the
life
of
the
party.
Inspiring,
upbeat
feel.
Did
someone
die
or
leave.
Clear
message
of
hopelessness
through
the
imagery.
Does
the
message
turn
hopeful
later
(positively
affect
the
music
industry?)
Maybe
the
chorus
or
bridge
brings
a
sense
of
hope,
new,
fresh?
Things
do
turn
around.
Imagery
of
the
clouds
crying
gives
detailed
image
and
original.
Dont
overuse.
What
do
you
mean
I
cant
hold
back?
Why
walking
up
and
down
the
street?
Change
imagery
to
resemble
confusion:
pacing,
random
images
or
colors
flying
by.
Choice
of
words
is
good
but
make
us
think
that
you
are
both
happy
and
confused.
Maybe
save
each
verse
for
a
different
emotion.
--
--
Is
it
based
on
the
song?
(Yes,
so
it
goes
to
the
beat).
Like
the
beat.
Whats
the
message
that
is
being
sent?
Drive
it
home
in
the
chorus.
Where
does
it
turn
inspiring
or
hopeful
or
empowering?
Lot
of
syllables
for
2
lines.
Do
you
have
enough
time
to
actually
write
that
many.
Rhyme
is
still
meaningful
still!
Great
job!
Chorus
will
need
to
be
simple,
but
strong.
Deep!
Is
this
about
missing
someone?
Heartbreak
but
search
for
more.
Love
imagery
shimmering
and
gold.
Rhymes
are
subtle
but
present.
Tune
in
and
listen
more.
Do
you
want
to
let
them
go?
Clarify?
Hope
comes
at
the
bridge!!!
Beginning
is
clear
and
then
we
lose
you
at
imagination.
Caged
and
left
to
yourself
with
imagination/feelings
thoughts.
Use
as
a
middle
verse.
Verse
before
that
uses
the
imagery
of
silencing:
stitched
mouth.
Like
the
imagery
(sound).
Marked
on
the
floor.
Harsh
breakup.
Where
is
the
turn?
But
now
I
realize
I
am
better
off
without
you.
Why
better
off?
She
needs
to
realize
that
they
are
addicted
(addition
imagery:
alcoholism,
drug)
and
need
to
be
clear
minded.
--
Love
fireworks
and
lighting
up
the
sky
(imagery).
Express
your
feelings.
You
are
not
alone.
Verse
in
between
Verse
1
and
Chorus:
add
imagery
of
being
trapped
(bottle,
box
w/
suffocation,
poison
coursing
your
veins).
Need
to
build
up
to
the
chorus.
Think
about
the
2
questions
back
to
back
in
your
chorus.
May
need
to
add
more
feet
to
line
4
of
chorus.
--
Keep
your
head
up
during
the
good
and
the
bad.
Stay
encouraged.
Chorus
Jannelli C
Valerie M.
Daisy V.
Jacob
Valerie
G.
Joselyne
Danitza
Moises
Jannely
H.
Jasmin
Kimberly