: i h student to compare and js in the sixth grade. His teacher asked eac! ee, two planets’ ability to support life. Jorge chose to compare and contrast Earth and Mars. He took notes at the library, made an outline, and wrote his rough draft. Now he needs your help editing and revising it. Here is Jorge’s rough draft. Read it and then answer questions 1-10. (1) Earth and Mars are both planets in our solar system. (2) Earth is the third planet from the sun, and Mars is the fourth. (3) Earth is a much better place to live than Mars. (4) Mars is much colder than Earth. (5) Its average temperature is —80 degrees Fahrenheit. (6) The only place where it gets warm is near its equator in the middle of the day. (7) Then it might get up to 70 degrees Fahrenheit. (8) The problem is that it can’t stay that warm. (9) At night, the temperature drops to extremely cold temperatures. (10) That is because Mars is like a big desert. (11) Mars has days that are very similar to Earth days. (12) It takes Mars twenty-four hours and thirty-seven minutes to rotate one time. (13) That means that a day on Mars are only thirty-seven minutes longer than a day on Earth. (14) I think I could get used to the length of a day on Mars. (15) Who couldn't use an extra thirty-seven minutes a day? (16) Earth has a very dense atmosphere. (17) Our atmosphere is one hundred times denser than Mars’s atmosphere. (18) There is a very thin atmosphere on Mars. (19) We would not be able to breathe on Mars the Martian atmosphere has much less oxygen than ours. (20) It also had a much higher percentage of carbon dioxide. (21) Mars does have some clouds and some wind. (22) Sometimes dust storms cover the whole planet. (23) Earth is a much denser planet than Mars, so gravity here is much stronger. (24) If you weighed one hundred pounds on Earth, you would weigh only thirty-eight pounds on Mars. (25) The surface of Mars is similar to Earths. (26) There are canyons and mountains just like on Earth, but they are much bigger. (27) There are smooth Places that used to be covered with water. (28) There are old riverbeds, (29) Water once flowed there. (30) Scientists say that there could have been life on Mars at one time because water was plentyfull. (81) Earth and Mars are very di ¢ different as ch other (82) Life as we know it could not exist on Mars. ** rom each 8 _1. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 25. The surface of Mars is similar to Earths, a. mars is similar to earths. b. Mars is similar to Earth’s. c. Mars are similar to Earths. d. No change is needed. 2, Choose the best way to combine the ideas in sentences 28 and 29 into one sentence. There are old riverbeds. Water once flowed there. a, There were old riverbeds with water, they once flowed there. b. There are old riverbeds, water once flowed there. c. There are old riverbeds full of water at once. d. There are old riverbeds where water once flowed. 3. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 5. Its average temperature is -80 degrees Fahrenheit. temperture is -80 degrees Fahrenheit. temperature is —80 degrees fahrenheit. temperature were —80 degrees Fahrenheit. No change is needed. Boop 4. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 13. That means that a day on Mars are only thirty-seven minutes longer than a day on Earth. an day on Mars are only thirty-seven minutes longer than a day on Mars are only thirty-seven minutes longer then a day on Mars is only thirty-seven minutes longer than No change is needed. Be op5. Read sentence 19, which is poorly written. We would not be able to breathe on Mai much less oxygen than ours. i i tence. Choose the best way to rewrite this sen’ a. We would not be able to breathe on Mars because the Martian atmosphere hi th less oxygen than ours. - b. We would not be ‘able to breathe on Mars, the Martian atmosphere has much less oxygen than ours. We would not be able to breathe on the Mars atmosphere has much less oxygen than ours. ; ; We would not be able to breathe on Mars. The Martian atmosphere with much less oxygen than ours. rs the Martian atmosphere has 6. Choose the sentence that could best be added right after sentence 10. a. A Mars year is longer than an Earth year. b. Its very thin atmosphere cannot hold the warmth. ¢. There are many differences between these two planets. d. Some scientists think there used to be life on Mars. 7. Jorge wants to change sentence 26 so that it is more specific. There are canyons and mountains just like on Earth, but they are much bigger. Choose the best way to rewrite the underlined part of the sentence. a. deeper and taller. b. greater. ce. larger. d. more sizeable.8. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 20. It also had a much higher percentage of carbon dioxide. a. had a much higher percentege b. had a higherer percentage c. has a much higher percentage d. No change is needed. 9. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 30. Scientists say that there could have been life on Mars at one time because water was plentyfull. a. Mars at one time because water was plentiful. b. mars at one time because water was plentyfull. c. Mars at one time because water was plentyfull! d. No change is needed. 10. Read sentence 31, which is poorly written. Earth and Mars are very different as you can see from each other. Choose the best way to rewrite this sentence. a. Earth and Mars being very different from each other you can see. b. Very different from each other, you can see Earth and Mars. c. Itis very different as you can see, Earth and Mars, from each other. d. As you can see, Earth and Mars are very different from each other.