Dear Shakeena,

Your introduction sounds great! You give a good background on the topic. Maybe include
what the review wont include (just so you can be sure you wont get points taken off)! But I
think its great in general. You also did a good job explaining in more detail each main topic. No
revisions needed here! Your gap includes why it should be researched which is great! All you
need is your project proposal and youll be set. Great job!
Sincerely,
Angela Clayborne

4/6/15
Dear Shakeena,
Great framing and defining of topic. The introduction is heavy with author citations so it
showed that you understood synthesizing and conjoining authors ideas. The further you get in
your writing your points are broken down by subtopics which are also really good, but can be
misconstrued as a research paper if theres not as many authors backing the subject as you had
in the introduction. Learned a lot by reading your paper! Just needed research gap and extension
on project proposal! Great job!
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Tatiyana Smallwood