Robinson 1

Brianna Robinson
Ms. Woelke
ERWC
22 April 2015
Reflective Paragraph
To make a stronger model of the ICE Eleven by Cisneros, I kept my writing focused on
the prompt, while increasing my vocabulary and varying my sentence structure. Rather than
attempting to use all of the forms of symbolism that I found in the short story, I only used one
concept and branched off from that central idea. In my original writing, I used examples that
ranged from a jacket to a balloon, which lost focus in addressing my main arguments. By only
writing about the jacket, the reader isnt distracted or confused by the shift in introducing new
styles of symbolism. My vocabulary from 9th grade wasnt as strong as it is now, which makes
the flow of my writing more coherent and developed. By improving word choice, the piece
makes more sense and the writer sounds more affluent and knowledgeable on the discussion.
Varying the sentence structure from complex to simple sentences also added more style to my
original writing. Without variation, my response would be dull and uninteresting to read. With
simple changes to the way I wrote my essay, I was able to make improvements that better reflect
my writing today.