Iman Torabian

5/15/15

College Essay
I selected this artifact because it gives a glimpse on how my life and
interests took place. In this piece of work I show many strengths. I explain
the challenges Ive taken and overcome throughout time. What I would
improve in this writing would be the outline of the plot. It is still clear but I
feel that I could have done a better job but also used a bit more vocabulary.
This reflects to me because it shows have I can keep on improving aspects
physically and mentally. Without this piece I wouldnt have a view of what I
have actually been influenced from also how I have been influencing others,
but also now I know what areas to practice in writing.