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An observation or
How this change
question I received
The change(s) I
impacts my paper:
from De Piero or a
made to what I
classmate
initially wrote:
The public and the
Im not quite sure what
Overall, the CNN
I felt that what the
authors should
youre arguing here.
and Huffingtion Post
thesis I initially had
equally be aware of
Remember: your reader articles were the most
didnt have a clear
the use of genres,
is most likely going to
effective in
argument at all. In
such as scientific
be expecting a thesis
conveying the
this thesis I am much
journalism, to convey statement at the end of
discovery of the
more specific, and I
information as it can
your Intro (or
Olinguito to the
argued that the CNN
affect expression of
occasionally 2nd
general public
and Huffington Post
such topics and in
paragraph) that clearly
because of the
articles were much
turn affect the
detail what
authors use of casual
more effective in
publics reception to point/argument/stance
tone, common
grabbing the
the authors writing
theyre taking and what language, and general audiences attention,
evidence theyre basing
organization in the
and therefore
that on. Right now, I
article.
accomplishing their
dont know where
goal. I was also much
youre taking me. I
more clear on HOW
know youre looking at
they did this (
CNN, BBC, and Huff
through tone,
pieces, but what
language etc.) This
(specifically) about
the focus of my paper
them?
much more clear and
also made it so I was
actually arguing
something instead of
simply stating things.
because according to
1, you need a p# for
According to Janet
I explained that Boyd
Boyd, jargon -when
direct citations
Boyd, author of
was an author, which
used in the wrong
Murder!
gives her credibility.
genre - can exclude
2, Who is this person?
(Rhetorically
This is important
those outside of the
Why is it worth
Speaking), jargon because it validates
community who do
listening to their ideas?
when used in the
some of my analysis
not understand the
wrong genre - can
and therefore makes
meanings of the
It makes for stronger
exclude those
my paper more
words.
writing, I think, if you
outside of the
convincing to my
can key your reader into community who do
audience.
why youre bringing
not understand the
this person into the
meanings of the
discussion.
words (89)
The addition of this
This transition isnt
Mentioning her gives
I changed topic
interview only adds
doing it for me, Neph.
substance and
sentence of the next
Paragraph 4 ( hope
this is okay I didnt
want to copy the
whole paragraph)
This comment is in
reference to the whole
paragraph:
When I see thiseven
before I start readingI
think, Ahhhhhhh!
Attack of the pageAND-A-HALF-long
paragraph!
Helllllllllllllllllp!
See if you like this
metaphor:
Pretend your whole
paper is a big, juicy
steak. Do you want
your reader to enjoy that
steak in easy-to-chew,
digestable bites? Or do
you want them to start
eating the whole thing
in one piece (think:
zombie).
Paragraphs are like
those bites. Give your
reader your argument in
little, digestable, oneidea-at-a-time bits.
Readers need to be able
to see the different
parts/pieces/bites of the
argument that theyre
chewing on.