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of
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My
friends
found that this
sentence
is
repetitive.

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Changes
Although the three
I rewrite this
titles
have
the
sentence.
same
format-Although the
black-and-bold font
three titles are
and all capitalized,
in the same
they have different
format,
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meanings.
imply
differently.
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wants
to and the tutor representation
emphasize
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into
truth of this event, difference
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the
total
and
representation
of representative
formal.
.
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friends I delete who is
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favorite
favorite
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is among
these
these three writers biased to some three writers
uses a quote from extent.
because
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Clintons
academic
announcement--It'
papers should
s not about me, it's
not contain any
about you--to be
biased opinion.
the title.
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title
is
perfect my paper, I sentence.
because
the found that this
specific content of sentence is my
the fact is more own opinion.
persuasive
than
how formal the fact
is. It is the quote
from
Hillary
Clintons
announcement that
not only proves this
news is formal but
also
attracts
readers to read the
news.
If the political news I went to the I delete of no

How to impact
my paper
Make
my
paper
more
clear.

Correct
the
use of the two
words.

Cut out my
own
opinion
and make my
paper
more
academic.

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tutor
there
would be of no taught me not
academic
value or at least far papers should
not be involved
less value.
extreme
points.
Hillary used thirtyone uses of the
word I, more than
twice the use of the
word we.
Although the three
titles are in the
same format, they
imply
differently.
'The
words
you
choose
for
an
argument
help
define its style"
(Lunsford 311)

My
friends
found
this
grammar
mistake while
reading
my
paper.
According
to
the comments
of
WP1,
I
selected
a
quote from the
course reading.

Change it to Correct
Hillary
used grammar
the word I mistake.
thirty-one
times
Add a citation
from
the
course reading
The words you
choose for an
argument help
define
its
style".

Make
my
paper
more
persuasive by
using quotes
from
the
course
reading.