Model Answer - Paper 1!

Text C and Ds subjects are centralised around Mount Everest and allowing people to
experience what Mount Everest is like, suited for their own persuasive purposes in accordance to
their text type. Text C features an excerpt from the non-fiction autobiography, Into Thin Air, which
was written by Jon Krakauer. Since this is an autobiography, the purpose of this text is to share
experience to interested readers about the authors accounts climbing to the top of Mount Everest.
It also includes his realisations and disappointing realities to his expectations in his expedition.
Whereas Text D is an online itinerary and plan on a Travel Website, which allows booking trips to
see Mount Everest while trekking the Himalayas, therefore using techniques suited to persuade
potential tourists to visit the Himalayas. Both texts feature Mount Everest for their individual
purposes directed to generally to the same audience. The commonalities in audience and
difference in purpose can be shown through both texts use of statistics and syntax. While they
contrast in techniques of bias and unbiasedness, as well as the individual use of descriptive
language and visual imagery. !

Text C and Text D are targeted at interested readers and buyers focused on Mount Everest and
its glory, and thus their audiences are very similar, however they serve to their respective purpose.
Within Text C, numerical facts about Everest is used to appeal to logos of the audience, such as
Twenty-nine thousand twentyeight feet up in the troposphere and a blanket of clouds now hid
Pumori, Ama Dablam, and the other lesser peaks . This specific height and accounts, rather
than using the authors estimation, shows his knowledge when climbing the mountain. As a result
he can be considered a credible source to the audience, appealing to the logos and ethos. His
mentioning of the $65,000 paid by the so-called amateurs wanting to climb the mountain, shows
his blas attitude towards the inclusion of these numbers in his personal accounts, continuing to
add more details and evidence to his story, captivating the audiences attention to his story of
climbing the impressive feat of climbing the mountain. Meanwhile in Text D, the information given
on the website has a lot of information for tourists to understand, as this is what an itinerary is
supposed to do. Information, like the Total Price being USD $1,060 pp single rate, gives specific
costs for tourists to understand the price, suiting its advertising travel plan to see the Himalayas
and Everest. It gives other less relevant information, such as emergency information of Altitude
Sickness or Lukla (2840m), which gives customers a sense of assurance that everything is under
consideration, so that these Everest enthusiasts can be satisfied with knowing that the trip to see
the mountains is planned to enhance their experience when they looking at Everest in real life.
Overall, the content of information in the written language is just as important as the look and
length of the sentences the content is written in.!

Another common technique both texts use is Syntax, which allows each text to diverge further
into their own specific purpose. Text C takes advantage of syntax to change into various emotional
tones throughout the text. Phrases like I need to get down, fast. shows the sense of urgency
through the separation of the adverb, fast. However it ends with a full stop, that the situationallyappropriate exclamation mark. This changes the tone of the paragraph at that instance, while
remaining the semi-formal nature of the autobiography. This keeps the audience interest and
suspense about what comes next. While text D utilises appropriate syntax for the type of
information. For example, accommodation details only provide a word long, Teahouse, and
notices to know before the trip are average-length sentences. Both information are suited properly

for their information types, giving the audience sufficient information to travel to the Himalayas,
where the next set of information is given to them to experience the real-life sight of Mount Everest.!

In contrast, the techniques that they differ in is the effect of Pathos and their individual efforts
as to how they achieve the appeal in the audience. Text C uses descriptive language to conjure
negatively connotations of fear. Details such as Weeks of violent coughing had left me with two
separated ribs, making it excruciating painful to breathe., give us a disturbing image of deformity.
To which the enthusiastss spirit is taken on a fluctuating ride of positivity in the first paragraph and
an ongoing downhill from then on. This affects the pathos of humans, alerting them of the negative
consequence of climbing the mountain, enhancing the authors purpose of publishing this book. On
the other hand, text D uses large visual imagery to grab the tourists attention by triggering their
emotional response in other humans. Their main banner image on their front page is of a native
Nepalese woman (in the foreground) trekking on the Himalayas (shown in the background) with a
basket on her back, smiling at the audience. The genuine smile of the woman shows a caring and
inviting aura to where she lives, as deduced from her clothing and headgear. This switches on the
emphatic feelings within the viewer, which draws the tourists into finding out more about what is
featured on the website. !

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Another contrasting point is the use of bias and unbiasedness in each text to provide more
strength within their own underlying purposes. Text C contains the personal accounts from Jon
Krakauer, thereby being undoubtedly biased towards himself. The use of first-person pronouns in
his thoughts, for example Id been fantasying about this moment, and the real ease of emotion
that would accompany it. In his bias, he is able to feature his vulnerabilities and the
overwhelming change of emotions, like hope to disappointment, that the readers follow to through
his written accounts. Although Text Ds purpose makes the text unbiased, as they have to state all
information needed on the trip (both positive and negative), as shown in their day by day itinerary
details like We trek to Namche Bazaar - up to half-way point Jorsale is relatively undemanding.
However they have to include the professional and consensus opinions of the trekkers, answering
whether each activity is difficult or inform of any other details they should be aware of. Therefore,
they can create a balance of bias and unbiasedness towards an informative travel webpage.!

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Overall, both Jon Krakauer and the Travel Agency have crafted texts to suit their different
intentions, both addressed to the same target population. Which uses the effects of informational
content and sentence structure in unison, as well as utilising the opposite areas of bias and types
of descriptions. Given the information in Text C and D, Text C is meant to change the views of
readers about the glory of Everest, while Text D is created to convince people to buy their travelling
packages to the Himalayas, using Everest as the main attractive point. Although Text C is more
effective in communicating its purpose than Text D, as it has a more dramatic effect on the readers.
Through the analysis of both texts, it brings up the question of the perspectives, and whether
adding more perspectives to Text C, would make serve the purpose more or less effectively?!

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