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Revised essay's outline
‘The essay is based on love story of The Great Gatsby” , where Jay lose his love Daisy
‘because of the superior power of money that takes over the purest relationship of love. This
pursuits reader to relate the love story of wo people with money throughout the essay.
‘Thesis of essay
Inthe book named “ The Great Gatsby" money played a superior role getting above the love
of Jay and Daisy because Daisy loved money more than Gatsby.
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Money makes a person powerful and changes their life, After get
to get Daisy back he lose his honesty under the mobbing business.
to get Daisy back
9 Gatsby after seoing his lavishing life and his popularity
ded towards money and rot for Jay's love.
«different manner. Gatsby needed money for geting his love Daisy back and Daisy needed
money because she loved money mare than Gatsby,