Shirley Ramos

Professor Batty
English 113A
3 December, 2015
Dear High School Reflection
For my Dear High School essay I went back and read all the feedback I received from
my Professor and peers. First what I did was fix my heading, instead of ENGL 113A, I changed
it to English 113A. I corrected a few spelling errors at the introduction and switched a couple of
words around; I took two sentences away. I also took away the people I had previously
mentioned that were not important to my essay and tried to keep to the topic. Also for the second
essay I made sure that I left a good transition to my grad night that would be my third paragraph.
I added clearer sentences that would help the flow of my story and kept my dialogue the same
although I only took off the last part of it. What helped me edit my essay was going over all the
feedback and easily going back taking off and adding sentences that would improve my essay.
Over reading it now I can be sure that it is now better than how I had turned it in before. My
essay turned out to be shorter but informative at the same time. I also noticed that the way I
wrote my essay was in a way I had expected the reader to know what I was saying. Im glad that
I went back and fixed the structure and the storyline of my essay so it could be easier for the
reader to understand at the end.