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She works a a computer software company aa janitor, but she only gets paid e small amount of money. One moming Lindsey got 2 knock at her apartment door from ihe su ay her reat or else she would get of her belongings outside on the sidewalk of the 10 realized the money she had been saving up ws stolen. The next day jcking Ariel up from school. As Ariel waited for her mother, her (eacher convinced her to talk about her living situation. After Ariel told her teacher that she dig not have «home it caused the teacher to be concerned, When Lindsey arrived athe schoo! the teacherconfronted her about being homeless. The teacher then threatened to call Child Well Lindsey, The confrontation with the tacher led to Aric being taken away from her. Lindsey did no: have enough money to provide for her daugater, so the authorities had {aken her 1 awey from her. Her life changed because of her financial situation. Lindsey «id not have a place to live so she tied to stay ins homeless sheer. A man in the homeless shelter tried to rob her, 90 she left the shelter and never retumed. Aflerthat incident, she begen sleeping in her car, She started working a double shift at night to make more money. When Lindsey he to work her daughter went with hee because she could not afford a babysitter. Lindsey was independent when it came to er and her daughter, She dl rot ike to depend on 5. But when she lost er child she got emotional and became Hu son who she loved unconditionally was taken away and if was nothing anyone else for her responsi depender The only she could do about it, She had done everything she could to support her daughter, but it was not enough, Sho he bes ah ot tte a tnt Th sf) 9 be ai gt tat a fais bana sf le ve, Wesey Ded te ome fie eee yi company where Lindsey worked met Lindsey. Wesley go to know her, and saw her struggle and 290 live inthe get beck on her feet, He helped her by giving ber a place company's parent builing. 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