Definition Essay #3 English 111 / Mrs. Manugo The occasion of your third essay assignment is that of definition, An essay of definition ‘ovides your reader with a long, detailed explanation that thoroughly defines a subject. Your essay may be objective or subjective and may define either an abstract or concrete topic. This essay must be 500 words in length. Your essay will be graded on the following information: ORGANIZATION © Order: select an order that suits your purpose and topic...stick to it! © Clear Progression © Paragraph Development a. Topic Sentence c. Details b. Supporting Sentences d, Concluding Sentence ¢ Coherence/Unity: adequate transitions are used © Adequate Conclusion © Logizal Development CONTENT © Subject is narrowed to a manageable size, and the purpose is clear to the reader. © if the definition is objective, the language is as neutral as possible. «If the definition is subjective, the point of view is obvious to the readers. All of the words and parts of the definition itself are clear to the essay’s particular audience © At least two different methods of definition are used to make the essay clear and informative. © Thesis statement is clear and focused Specific details make the definition clear and distinct rather than vague or circular. © Pick one tense and stick to it! ¢ Avoid mistakes in grammar and spelling (USE YOUR HANDBOOK!) a. spelling £. apostrophe b. punctuation g. incorrect abbreviations h. agreement (subject-verb & noun-pronoun) comma splice i, accurate word choice @. numbers (digits or words) Use words precisely, eliminate unnecessary words, avoid diluted verbs, avoid clichés and inflated phrases, and understand the roles of denotation and connotation. a COPIES OF ROUGH DRAFT ARE DUE OCTOBER 22nd (A) & OCTOBER 23rd (B) FINAL DRAFT OF ESSAY #2 or #3 is due OCTOBER 28" (A) & OCTOBER 29" (B) =vTOPIC PROPOSAL, DEFINITION ESSAY Answer the following questions completely as you prepare to write your definition essay, This proposal is due at the beginning of the next class. 1.) What subject will your essay define? What type of definition do you plan to write? rue Friendsiie =. A Personol definition, 2.) What is your purpose? Does your definition seek to provide a common language to prevent confiusion, or does it seek to persuade readers by altering their perceptions? sual MYp PUMPORR FS FO KEYES What OAVUL Syaendeme s, My detintiim seekrn provide a Common i LancrAnge so grevene eomfasvon 3.) Will you describe this subject objectively or subjectively? Why? Will this essay be written in first, second, or third person? Define your role. Suloyechvely. LEIS my pesnat opmrons. Srirdk person. Litt be dehning ayes: SO VS oa twue Erendswip. ’ 4.) Why ate Your interested in this topic? Do you have a personal or professional conhection to the subject? State at least one reason for your choice of topic. A 1 preked +H toere vandewly. No (don't have A penal ov grofessional connection torre SUlogee n V nought Te would be eosyrowvitd 5.) 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Te Do specific details make the definition clear and distinct rather than vague and circular? x ITRODUCTION: Yes: No. Maybe es it arouse interest/grab your attention? Does it include a clear thesis statement? CONCLUSION, ‘Yes No Maybe | Is the conclusion pleasing? Does it reference some aspect of the introduction? Does the conclusion tie up all loose ends? STYLE a No Is the writer's diction appropriate and accurate? Does the writer avoid diluted verbs (and overuse of be verbs)? Does the writer avoid using clichés and inflated phrases? Is the writer's tone appropriate? What is the writer's tone? Does the writer eliminate unnecessary words and use words precisely? “Are the sentences varied, concise, and active? AIA | «| [sp ‘GRAMMAR, USAGE, & MECHANICS yi & Maybe | Is the essay free from misspelled words? the essay free from sentence fragments? Is the essay free from comma errors? 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Under no circumstances will they ever stab you in the back. They are the ones that don’t care about how rich or poor, short or tall, black or white you are. Many people say that “true friends are the ones that stay with you forever.” Many people will agree with that statement but not my aunt. To her, a true friend is someone who has touched your heart and will stay there. No, they don’t physically touch your heart and stay in that position. In other words, they are the ones you have produced feelings of affection for and the feelings stay with vopPtprever. My dad once told me, “Our true friends appear when good things happen. They cheer us on and are pleased by our accomplishments, Our false fiends appear during our difficult times with their fake, sad, supportive faces to cover up the evidence of them laughing at our suffering.” ‘True friends are the ones that will be honest with you. You may not like to hear their honesty but they will tell you anyways, They will point out all your flaws but never judge you.Pant sani Youste doing the most ebarasing thing inthe worl they wl tnd ight beside ou WN et conrge they will be laughing hysterically at you. Like your wedding ring, diary, or parents true friendship is very precious. It is something that you will hold onto forever. True friendship is just like memories; itis something you could hold onto, just not physically. Your true friend is someone that you will remember even if you haven't contacted them for the past ten years. Its like there is an imaginary string between the two of you, holding and keeping the friendship together. To me, true friends treat you like their sibling. They will argue with you on every single topic ever brought up. Hmm, sounds like me and my brother. Back to talking about true friends, they will eomplain about you all the time. Occasionally they might even ask themselves why they are friends with you, but deep down they know the answer to that. The one thing that true fiends will never do is trade you for someone else, No matter how much money is being offered to them, your spot will never be replaced. Unfortunately, true friendship is not being offered at the market for sale. You may say you're willing to pay millions or billions for someone to be your true fiat in the engyou will come to find yourself sitting alone at home.Pan 1 Tina Pan English Dual Enrollment Definition Essay October 20, 2015 Is Yours True or Fake? In this world there df@a lot of things that you can buy with money. But, one of the things that you can’t buy is true friendship. Youlté probably disagreeing with me right now but let me explain, Friendship that you buy'is’basically saying the person that becomes friends with you is) because of the benefits. Which will most likely bélyour money or in some other cases, popularity. 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Our false friends appear during our difficult times with their fake, sad, supportive faces to cover up the evidence of them laughing at our suffering.” ‘True friends at the ones that will be honest you. You may not like to hear their honesty but they will tell you anyways. They will point out all your flaws but never judge you.Pan ‘When you ae doing the most embarrassing thing in the world, they will stand right beside you. But of course they will be laughing hysterically at you. Like your wedding ring, diary, or parents, true ftiendship|is very precious. Iti something that you wll hold onto forever. True friendship jus ike memories it something you could hold onto, just not physically. Your true friend i$ someone that you will remember even if you haven't contacted them for the past ten years. IO like there i§ an imaginary string between the two of you, holding and keeping the friendship together. To me, true friends treat you like their sibling. They will argue with you on every single topic ever brought up. Hmm, sounds like me and my brother. Back to talking about true friends, they will complain about you all the time. Occasionally they might even ask themselves why they até'friends with you, but deep down they know the answer to that. The one thing that true ids will never do is'trade you for someone else. No matter how much money being offered to them, your spot will never be replaced. Unfortunately, true friendshipyis not being offered at the market for sale. You may say you’té willing to pay millions or billions for someone tojbe} your true friend but in the end you will come to find yourself sitting alone at home.Pan 1 Tina Pan English Dual Enrollment Definition Essay October 20, 2015 Is Yours True or Fake? In this world there are a lot of things that you can buy with money. But, one of the things that you can’t buy is true friendship. You're probably disagreeing with me right now but let me explain, Friendship that you buy is basically saying the person that becomes friends with you is because of the benefits. Which will most likely be your money or in some other cases, popularity. Alright, what I'm trying to say is true friends are the ones that care for you, share with you, and protects you. Under no circumstances will they ever stab you in the back. They are the ones that don’t care about how rich or poor, short or tall, black or white you are. Many people say that “true friends are the ones that stay with you forever.” Many people will agree with that statement but not my aunt, To her, a true friend is someone who has touched your heart and will stay there. No, they don’t physically touch your heart and stay in that position. in other words, they are the ones you have produced feelings of affection for and the feelings stay with you, forever. My dad once told me, “Our true friends appear when good things happen. They cheer us on and are pleased by our accomplishments. Our false friends appear during our difficult times with their fake, sad, supportive faces to cover up the evidence of them laughing at our suffering,” ‘True friends are the ones that will be honest with you. You may not like to hear their honesty but they will tell you anyways. They will point out all your flaws but never judge you.Pan ‘When you are doing the most embarrassing thing in the world, they will stand right beside you. But of course they will be laughing hysterically at you, Like your wedding ring, diary, or parents, true friendship is very precious. It is something that you will hold onto forever. True friendship is just like memories; itis something you could hold onto, just not physically. Your true friend is someone that you will remember even if you hhaven’t contacted them for the past ten years. It’s like there is an imaginary string between the two of you, holding and keeping the friendship together. To me, true friends treat you like their sibling. They will argue with you on every single topic ever brought up. Hmm, sounds like me and my brother. Back to talking about true friends, they will complain about you all the time. Occasionally they might even ask themselves why they are friends with you, but deep down they know the answer to that. The one thing that true friends will never do is trade you for someone else. No matter how much money is being offered to them, your spot will never be replaced. Unfortunately, true friendship is not being offered at the market for sale. You may say you're willing to pay millions or billions for someone to be ‘your true friend but in the end you will come to find yourself sitting alone at home.