Here I only

made small
changes to
the opening
paragraph of
our double
page spread
copy; the
main change I
made was
highlighting
the fact that
we as
producers and
subjects have
a personal

Here the only

changes which
have been made
are surrounding
the obsession of
mobile phones
with celebrities.

In this part of our copy I have inserted,

edited and changed a number of things.
I have included ourselves into the copy
and talked about how we are obsessed I
also corrected grammatical mistakes
and I changed the end part as it didnt
make sense.

Here I have had to

change the tense
the copy was
written in, it had
been written as if
we, the filmmakers
wrote it whereas it
needs to be
written from the
magazines point of
view.

Here I inserted a quote from

one of our experts as it gives
the copy for our double page
spread more variety and
engages more with the
documentary.