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Whether we get our pizza from Ratsies or our chicken from Nandos Peri-Peri,
have our parents stay in the Quality Inn or Route 1 or The Hotel, the College Park
community will continue to flourish.
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Original
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Rewrite
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Contribute
I added a bit about the logistics of the interviews, including how many students
answered interview questions and why this research was conducted.
I added a few words to the SEO to fit the character requirement
Clean up
I added an L in the word all in the box quote because I left one out.
Collaborate
My TA, Adalie, advised that I pay attention to the appearance and content inmy
box quotes. It is easy to make the text too big and make silly spelling errors since
AutoCorrect sometimes does not pick up on them.
Professor Toth recommended that I break into new paragraphs more often because
they sometimes become too long.
Professor Toth advocated using more subheads to break up the storys points.
Professor Toth recommended that I avoid an opinionated ending; however, Adalie
said that she loved my ending. Because of this controversy, I left the original
ending because that was my favorite part of the story.