Andre Roddy

Ms. Lindsay Hastings

3-7-16

Comp 1

After receiving the comments from my study abroad essay I learned how to improve my
writing. I am satisfied about my grade and I have any reasons to complain about receiving and
eighty out of one-hundred. I have also learned what my teacher expects out of her composition
one students for the final draft of our essays. I believe my only problem was that I rushed
through the essay and waited until the last minute to complete an interview. The study abroad
essay was an interesting topic to write about. For the most reason, it help to improve my writing
for any other scholarship essays. My essay included a lot of sentences that were wordy and for
my introduction paragraph I never explained to audience my purpose for writing. But, one thing I
did include in the essay was the information I learned from the interview. This information was
interesting to share to my audience because I felt like I could relate to the Latino culture by the
number of family members living in a household. And the food, sports, and music was
interesting to learn about as well. As a writer, I would like to increase my vocabulary because my
vocabulary would show my audience that I am a great writer. Also, the increase of vocabulary
will make my essays sound interesting to read. I believe these comments from Ms. Hastings will
encourage me to do very well on my research paper. These comments were understandable and
can make me a great composition writer. I thought that telling my audience about my high school
history was wordy, but turns out Ms. Hastings was proud to hear about my high school history.
This comment showed me that I am good at explaining my purpose to the audience.