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Zachary Moran
Commentary
Firstly, to edit my bibliography, I learned how to do a hanging indent. I
have used this technique before but I have totally forgotten how. It is a huge
step and I need to remember how to do hanging indents for every paper
from this point onward. Secondly, I added the periods where I put my links to
my sources. I then went through the commented version of this paper and
edited all of marks you have made. After that, I read though the paper one
more time to polish up any imperfections.
While reading, I decided to use the look-up function to change every think, thought and
thing to better words.

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Zachary Moran
UWRIT 1103-015
Professor Rothwell
10 April 2016
College Roommate Correction

Brioso, Tess Masero. OCD- Obsessive Compulsive Disorder. Youtube. 29

Mar. 2016.
< https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KOami82xKec.>
What: This source is a YouTube video. It is on a website that allows anyone
to post videos to show the general public. This specific video was used as a
video project.
Who: The director is Tess Masero Brioso. There is not much on him, but one
could assume he is a college student. The audience was probably originally
his/her professor, but is now anyone who wishes to learn the realities of OCD.
Why: The purpose of this video was to obviously obtain a good grade, but
more importantly the video is now to show everyone the realities of OCD
through an actor, but with seemingly true stories. It helps people to better
understand OCD
How: An actor portrayal of a real person with OCD as well as interviews of
people suffering from OCD. I will collaborate this source with another for
credibility.
Summary:
The video opens up with an actor, the video is narrated by someone
sharing their experience with OCD. The video continues to go through the life
of this specific person with OCD. The person must blink 3 times, open and
close each door 3 times, and do everything pretty much in increments of
three. He also goes into detail how everything he does has to be precise to
the minute or his whole day is ruined. The video is interrupted by other
people with OCD, most less serious. These people share their need for
cleanliness and exactness. The video also shows the narrators fear of using
public bathrooms. The video concludes with a look into how OCD (Obsessive
Compulsive Disorder) impacts the victims life. The narrator explains that it
has gotten to the point that he avoids leaving his house at all costs. It is
then suggested that someone with this serious of a case should seek
psychiatric help.
Evaluation: I chose this article to have a broader sense of direction. I
wanted to have a source that was completely different to give me a feeling
of broadness in my subject. I chose this specific video on OCD because I feel

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as if I need to distinguish the extremes of cleanliness and messiness. I need
to find these extremes to I can gauge where I am and where my roommate is
and possibly find a common ground. I can use the common ground to help
out others with similar problems.
Reaction: I really enjoyed this article more than the others. While I was
watching I drew a crowd. My roommate joked that I had OCD but my desire
for cleanliness was no where near the need of these people in the video. I
found the extreme of cleanliness on my behalf, and can use this to guess of
the extreme on the other end. I wish the video would have gone into more
detail about what causes OCD, but I can discover that for myself.

Erb, Sarah E., Keith D. Renshaw, Jerome L. Short, and Jeffrey W. Pollard. "The
Importance of College Roommate Relationships: A Review and
Systemic Conceptualization." Journal of Student Affairs Research and
Practice 51.1 (2014): 43-55. Print.
< http://mason.gmu.edu/~jshort/Erb%20Roommate%20Relationships.pdf.>
What: I found this article online, but it is from a Journal called Journal of
Student Affairs Research and Practice from George Mason University.
Who: There are many authors to this article. All of them are psychology
professors at George Mason University. I believe the audience are students at
GMU, but the audience could also be considered everyone.
Why: This article is definitely to inform. It is a scholarly article and has no
entertaining value. It stresses the importance of good relationships between
roommates in college.
How: Words, headers, and charts.
Summary: This article begins by stating all of its research of important
college roommates and friendships. They state that the quality of new
college friendships can predict how well students adjust to interpersonal
experiences at college, their feelings of attachment to a
university, and their coping with academic demands. It later focuses on
roommate relationships exclusively. It is explained that it is such a widely
common relationship amongst college students and is also extremely unique.
The college students may not have chosen one another and they live
together in close quarters. This article examines the previous findings about
roommates, then they apply a family model to really examine the
importance of college roommate relationships. Lastly they describe practical
implications for student affairs to highlight key concepts. The article
addresses 4 major questions that go into detail of why roommate relations
are important, how to resolve conflict between roommates, and look into
what future research will be helpful to suggest practices for roommate
relations that work properly.
Evaluation: I chose this article in specific because I believed it would be an
excellent scholarly article. I believed I needed an article to focus on conflict
resolution (especially in the roommate field) so I can better diagnose the

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problem. Also, in case conflict arises between my roommate and I while
doing this project, I will be able to solve it.
Reaction: I could not ask for a better article. It is simply amazing for what I
needed. Its like the Walmart of sources. Not only did it answer every question
about conflict resolution but it gave me further insight into roommate
relationships. It also listed all of its sources for me to visit and explore
further. Mostly it gave me suggestions and inspiration on where to go next. I
wish they didnt drag it out as far as they did. The authors managed to keep
it remotely interesting but I feel as if it was played out a bit too long. Perhaps
I would have liked some graphics or change of color.
Martin, Ryan. Why We Get Mad. 19 Oct. 2011. Psychology Today. 25 Mar.
2016.
< https://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/all-the-rage/201110/why-weget-mad.>
What: This is a web article, it is on a website used for information. The
website is a psychology website where experts of psychology write about
common problems and new findings.
Who: The author is Dr. Ryan Martin. Dr. Martin is an expert in anger and is
the chair of psychology at the University of Wisconsin- Green Bay. The
audience is people studying anger.
Why: The purpose is to inform as well as entertain. It is a fact-filled article,
but one could find the website entertaining if they are interested in
psychology. The audience is all those interested in anger and psychology.
How: Straight words, no videos or charts.
Summary:
Dr. Martin opens up by stating that he will be referring to Dr. Jerry
Deffenbacher's 1996 model of anger. In the article, Dr. Martin decomposes
and examines each part of the model. The first part of the model is the
Trigger Event. There is a common misconception about trigger events,
people believe they are mad solely based off of the event. Dr. Martin says
this is not true, because if it were we would all respond to the same
situations with the same anger. He states that though the trigger event can
help, there always has to be more mitigating events to cause anger. Dr.
Martin elaborates that individual characteristics help cause our anger. He
says this can be broken down into two parts: personality traits and the preanger state. For example, a completive person may believe everything is a
competition, so when they are cut off in traffic they see themselves losing
the competition of driving. The pre-anger state deals with how people were
emotionally prior to the trigger event. If they were previously tired, anxious
or even angry, they will respond with more anger than usual. However, Dr.
Martin says the main factor in anger is how we appraise the situation. He
uses the example of his over-17 year old friend being carded at a movie
theatre. This is called cognitive appraisal. He states that when we see a

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situation as unjustified, blameworthy ect. We respond with anger. However, it
is bold to say that ones interpretation of a scenario is right or wrong.
Evaluation: I chose this article to look into my own reasons for believing my
roommate has a problem. Perhaps he is perfectly normal and I am the one
with the problem. This article was to tell me why I respond to my roommate
with anger when he is messy.
Reaction: I believe this was an excellent article. It helped me realize why I
get angry and that I am not the problem. My roommate and I simply have
different ways that we respond to messiness. This can go deeper but as the
common norm is to be clean, we must explore why he responds to
messiness the way that he does. I have no questions for the article as I
believe it was clear and concise.

Sirota, Marcia. "Understanding Messiness And Hoarding." 15 Dec. 2010.

EzineArticles. 25
Mar. 2016.
< http://ezinearticles.com/?Understanding-Messiness-andHoarding&id=5560149.>
What: This is a web article, it is on a website used for information. Most of
the articles on this website are written by experts in their respective fields.
Who: The author is Marcia Sirota. Marcia Sirota is a doctor, practicing in the
fields of a psychiatrist and a psychotherapist. She is from Canada. The
audience is everyone.
Why: The purpose of this article is to inform. She goes into detail of
messiness related to mental illness in the article.
How: Straight words, no pictures or charts ect.
Summary:
Dr. Sirota splits people who are messy into two separate groups. Those
who are simply disorganized and those who have actual mental illness that
prevent them from keeping their locations clean. She claims that these
people know they have a problem, but cannot overcome the problem and
require assistance. When assistance does not help, she suggests looking into
disabilities such as ADD. She claims that there are three different kinds of
people with mental disabilities that causes messiness. Those who simply do
not clean, the ones we see on TV shows, these people can be diagnosed with
a simple mental illness. Those who mildly dont clean; these people leave
dishes in the sink for a week, dont change their bed sheets and actions
similar to that nature. These people are claimed to have low self esteem, and

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are overwhelmed by life and are just giving up. The last category are the
Hoarders. Dr. Sirota uses a great example of her roommate to finish up the
article and relate everything back to a whole.
Evaluation: I chose this article because upon first look, I believed it may
help me figure out the source problem of my roommates messiness. Perhaps
there is a deeper reason than him just not caring.
Reaction: This was a better article than I could have imagined. It opened my
eyes to all of the possibilities of messiness. I do not believe my roommate
has a serious mental illness, but he could be overcome by life as he has a
very hard major and is constantly busy. Maybe his messiness is a form of him
giving up. I do wish Dr. Sirota would have elaborated on people who just
simply do not care about messiness or are under the assumption that
someone else will pick up for them, which I still believe is the main factor in
my roommates sloppiness.

Soukup, Ruth. Why I Make My Bed: 10 Reasons I Keep My House Clean.

Living Well Spending Less. 28 Mar. 2016
< http://www.livingwellspendingless.com/2012/02/15/why-i-make-mybed-10-reasons-i-keep-my-house-clean/.>
What: This is another web article, however it is very different. This article is
on a trendy website by a woman with a similar purpose to Martha Stewart.
She wants to help out women just like herself.
Who: The author is Ruth Soukup. Ruth is a mother and a wife. She is an
author, a blogger, and a speaker. The audience is targeted at people just like
her.
Why: I am under the impression that the sole purpose of this article is to
entertain. It seems too fun to be an informative article. It could serve as help
to some (like me!)
How: Colorful words, pictures, different fonts, very entertaining.
Summary:
Ruth Soukup opens up this article with a little story. She references
another article where she talked about how she suggests making her bed
everyday. This led her to believe the importance of cleaning and our list
begins. Her first item on the list: It just looks better. This is obviously an
opinion, but one a lot of us share. She then uses the example of productivity.
Studies show that most people are more productive when their environment
is clean, but I know some people who are the exact opposite of that. She
continues with reasons that may not be for everyone; example: I am not
embarrassed to have people over. One item on her list that I believed was
amazing was that it generally costs less. When everything is in its place, she
does not need to worry about replacing items that may have gotten lost, or
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Evaluation: I chose this article because I was getting bored with the long
and wordy ones. I believed this one would be an easy source, and helpful to
me. This article was to tell my why cleaning is important.
Reaction: Great article. Not only was it fun to read, some of the items in
Soukups list really spoke to me. I will definitely be using the fact that having
a clean environment is cheaper to build my case against messiness. I would
have liked to see some more examples that arent completely opinion based.
However, for what it is; I believe this was a nice source.