Kate Henderson

Dr. Jizi
UWRT 1102
4 February 2016
Peer Review
From my peers, I only really received two suggestions. They suggested I change one of
the questions in the first paragraph to make it flow better and so there would be less confusion.
They also suggested I add some specific examples to my paper. I did end up changing one of
the questions in the first paragraph to help make the reader be able to better understand what I
meant. I also tried to add some specific memories I had made in the third paragraph to add
some more specific examples of my happiness.
The peers paper I edited did a fairly good job. He had a very strong introductory
paragraph and conclusion but I told him he need to improve on his body paragraphs. They
lacked a little bit of more specific detail. I said that he liked music but didnt describe the way it
actually made him feel or what it truly meant to him. I hope he makes his body paragraphs more
like his first and last paragraphs. He need to add more self-exploration/self-discovery to his
paper. He also needed more connection between self and world. Once he adds those things to
his paper, it will be a fairly strong piece.