Achieving Clarity

1-We need this information no later on April 25th, 2016 at noon.

2-The machinery will replace the AC system in conference room 109 or our building.
2-Failure to purchase this rooter will have negative impact on our IT infrastructure system.
4-Weaher problems in the Charlotte area resulted in damage to our computer systems.
5-Insufficient people in Accounting department caused the most recent profit loss.
Using the Active voice versus the passive voice
1-The accounting department will carry out implementation of this procedure
2-Attending the conference derived twofold benefits.
3-The training supervisor demonstrated and explained the information in great detail.
4-Representative from Allied, who supplied analytical equipment for long automatic upgrade held
discussions.
5-Many people attended the symposium on polymerization.
Limiting paragraph length to Achieve Conciseness
We as company who uses electronic process freight and documentation, are in the process of placing
terminals in the export departments of some of our major customers around the country. If you place a
terminal in your home office, you can monitor and keep track all of your shipments with in our system.
Furthermore, you could generate and export invoice easily, trace your shipments more readily with
accurate ratings and additionally it benefits your accounting department.
Reduces Word Length to Achieve Conciseness
1-Advice-Tip
2-Anticipate-await
3-Ascertain-confirm
4-Cooperate-help
5-Determine-resolve
6-Endeavor-effort
7-Inconvenience- trouble
8-Indicate-hint
9-Initially-first
10-Presently-now
Reduce Sentence Length to Achieve Conciseness
1- Progress reports should be complete by the fifteenth of the month.
2- Would you answer some question about your proposal?
3- Since you only have worked here for a month, your request for a pay increase through email does
not have merit.
4- Based on investigation I made on two different occasions, your sump pump might result in a
damage to your adjacent neighbor`s property. You must take action or your neighbor might sue
you.
5- For any questions please call me.