Instructor

Cassandra,
You have a clear thesis statement, and you have some great supporting points. I think bringing in
your personal anecdote was very useful. In the thesis, your counterargument doesnt sound like
its really contrasting your argument; I think it should say something about how people with
autism SHOULD be cured. You could work on the organization a bit more. You have two
paragraphs that discuss the way autistic people are viewed and bullied. These paragraphs could
be combined, and you could cut the repetition. Make sure you have clear and concise topic
sentences that match with your supporting sentences. Article titles should be in quotes. Make
sure you edit carefully; avoid sentence fragments.
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