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Melissa Thornton
Dr. Holt
AP English Literature3
9 November 2015
Paper Revisions Reflection
After reading my paper to Kaitlyn, she understood half of my central idea for the paper,
but the connection to interiority and phenomenology was not super clear. She suggested that I
explain more of the concepts the paper discussed, such as reader agency, free indirect discourse,
and phenomenology to better explain that part of my argument. Kaitlyn helped me come up with
the idea to wait and introduce the idea of Pride and Prejudice purposefully having a plurality of
arguments after Ive started to talk about Lost in Austen. By bringing in the idea later, I will make
my paper have the same experience for readers where only after learning how their perspective
was initially limited while reading Pride and Prejudice will they see an even broader message
about perception through my discussion of Lost in Austen.
To change the aspects of my paper Kaitlyn and I talked about, I plan to make the impact
of free indirect discourse on agency more clear by discussing what the term itself means when
talking about the book. In the first and second paragraph, I will discuss how free indirect
discourse works by moving between consciousnesses. In order to explain interiority and
phenomenology, I am going to better tie in the ideas with my discussion of reader agency so my
discussion of Lost and Austen makes more sense. After leading readers through their experience
when reading Pride and Prejudice, I will explain how it was interior and impacted by reader
agency. I hope that by walking readers through their experiences with both novels, my papers
use of phenomenology will make the argument more clear.

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