augments are and remember this is formal essay, so you can't use “I”, “we”, “our” and “me” in the essay. Also you need change “it’s” to “it is”. It is a good thing that you mention the author, Erick Darby, and his poem in the first paragraph. The title that you have is not catching my attention, so I think you need change you title more deeply. For the body paragraphs of you essay, it is really good. You wrote lots of idea that need us to think about and I very like an idea that you have “word can be and can use as a weapon”. It really shows that People shape the other people’s opinion very easily. For the conclusion, you need re-write your augments. I really agree your opinion about you live for yourself not for the other. Overall, the essay is very well. If you change the problem that you have, your essay will be better.