Professional Documents
Culture Documents
• Analytical Report
• Slides
• Exercise 5.3
• Letter Writing (20 Minutes)
• Cluster Diagramming vs Outlining
• Proofreading
• Analytical Report
Chapter 5
Preparing to Write
Business Messages
• Phase 2: Writing
Researching, organizing, composing
• Phase 3: Revising
Revising, proofreading, evaluating
Analyzing and Anticipating
• Analyze the task
Identify the purpose
Sender-focused Receiver-focused
“We are requiring all “Please complete these
staffers to complete these forms so that you will be
forms in compliance with eligible for health and
company policy.” dental benefits.”
Developing Reader Benefits
Sender-focused
Receiver-focused
“Because we need more
space for our new “You can buy a year’s
inventory, we’re staging a supply of paper and pay
two-for-one sale.” for only six months’
worth during our two-
for-one sale.”
Hidden Negative Meanings
You are wrong . . . .
(I am right.)
You do not understand . . . .
(You are not very bright.)
Your delay . . . .
(You are at fault.)
You forgot to . . . .
(You are not only inefficient but also stupid
and careless.)
Use Bias-Free Language
Gender-Biased Improved
female attorney attorney
waitress server
man hours working hours
workman worker
Biased
Each employee has his ID card.
Improved
Each employee has an ID card.
All employees have ID cards.
Use Courteous Language
Less Courteous
Everyone must return these forms by January 1.
More Courteous
Please return the forms by January 1.
Less Courteous
This is the second time I’ve had to write!
Why can’t you get my account straight?
More Courteous
Attached is my previous letter.
Please help me straighten out this account.
Use Simple, Familiar Language
Unfamiliar
We need to effectuate improvement of our
manuals to better elucidate our training goals.
Familiar
We need to improve our manuals to clarify
our training goals.
Unfamiliar
Sales reps generally conjecture when making
sales projections for homogeneous territories.
Familiar
Sales reps generally guess when projecting
sales in similar territories.
Adapting to Legal
Responsibilities
• Avoid litigation by using especially
careful language in four areas:
• Investment information
• Safety information
• Marketing information
• Human resources information
Chapter 6
DIRECT PATTERN
Good News or
Main Idea
Audience Response Determines
Pattern of Organization
If unwilling or If displeased or If hostile
uninterested disappointed
INDIRECT PATTERN
Bad News or
Main Idea
Using a Cluster Diagram to
Generate Ideas
1. In the center of a clean sheet of paper, write
your topic name and circle it.
2. Around the circle, record any topic ideas that
pop into your mind.
3. Circle each separate area.
4. Avoid censoring ideas.
5. If ideas seem related, join them with lines;
don’t spend time on organization just yet.
Organizing Cluster Diagram
Ideas Into Subclusters
Tips
• Analyze the idea generated in the original
cluster diagram.
• Cross out ideas that are obviously irrelevant;
simplify and clarify.
• Add new ideas that seem appropriate.
• Study the ideas for similarities.
Organizing Cluster Diagram
Ideas Into Subclusters
Tips
• Group similar ideas into classifications (such as
Purpose, Content, Development, and Form).
• If the organization seems clear at this point,
prepare an outline.
• For further visualization, make subcluster circles
around each classification.
Creating Effective Sentences
• Recognize phrases and clauses.
• Use short sentences.
• Emphasize important ideas.
• Use the active voice for most sentences.
• Use the passive voice to deemphasize
the performer and/or to be tactful.
• Avoid dangling and misplaced modifiers.
Recognizing Phrases and
Clauses
• Clauses have subjects and verbs;
phrases do not.
• Independent clauses are complete;
dependent clauses are not.
• Phrases and dependent clauses cannot
function as sentences.
• Independent Clause: They were eating cold pizza.
• Dependent Clause: that they want to return for a refund
• Phrase: to return for a refund
Using Short Sentences
Sentence Length Comprehension Rate
8 words 100%
15 words 90%
19 words 80%
28 words 50%
Revising Business
Messages
1.
1. Prewriting
Prewriting
Analyze
Analyze
Anticipate
Anticipate
Adapt
Adapt
The Complete Process
1.
1. Prewriting
Prewriting 2.
2. Writing
Writing
Analyze
Analyze Research
Research
Anticipate
Anticipate Organize
Organize
Adapt
Adapt Compose
Compose
The Complete Process
1.
1. Prewriting
Prewriting 2.
2. Writing
Writing 3.
3.Revising
Revising
Analyze
Analyze Research
Research Revise
Revise
Anticipate
Anticipate Organize
Organize Proofread
Proofread
Adapt
Adapt Compose
Compose Evaluate
Evaluate
1. Prewriting
• Analyze: Define your purpose. Select
the most appropriate form (channel).
Visualize the audience.
• Anticipate: Put yourself in the reader’s
position and predict his or her reaction
to this message.
• Adapt: Consider ways to shape the
message to benefit the reader, using his
or her language.
2. Writing
• Research: Collect data formally and
informally. Generate ideas by
brainstorming and clustering.
• Organize: Group ideas into a list or an
outline. Select the direct or indirect
strategy.
• Compose: Write first draft, preferably on
a computer.
3. Revising
• Revise: Revise for clarity, tone,
conciseness, and vigor. Revise to
improve readability.
• Proofread: Proofread to verify spelling,
grammar, punctuation, and format.
Check for overall appearance.
• Evaluate: Ask yourself whether the final
product will achieve its purpose.
Try This
• Read the following sentence counting the
F’s as you go: