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Robert Todd Carroll
Student Success Guide Writing Skills
1990 by Robert T. Carroll. All rights reserved. No part of this book may be reproduced
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Author: Robert Todd Carroll
Website: The Skeptics Dictionary at www.skepdic.com
Other books by Robert T. Carroll
The Common-Sense Philosophy of Religion of Bishop Edward Stillingfleet, 1635-
1699. (1975). (International Archives of the History of Ideas / archives
internationales d'histoire des ides). Martinus Nijhoff, The Hague
Student Success Guide: Study Skills (1990).
www.skepdic.com/refuge/studyskills1.pdf
The Skeptics Dictionary: A Collection of Strange Beliefs, Amusing Deceptions,
and Dangerous Delusions. (2003). Wiley and Sons.
Becoming a Critical Thinker A Guide for the New Millennium. (2005). 2
nd
edition. Pearson Custom Publishing.
Preface
The Student Success Guide: Writing Skills is a companion to the Student Success Guide: Study
Skills book. The purpose of each is to provide a systematic approach to learning the skills needed by every
successful student. The study skills text focuses on vocabulary building, time management, listening and
concentration, reading and studying textbooks, taking notes, reviewing and preparing for tests. The writing skills
text focuses on building those skills needed by the college student to fulfill typical writing assignments.
The Student Success Guides may be used independently by the student who wishes to improve his or
her chances of success in humanities and social science courses. The books could also be used as the sole text
in a College Success course or as an adjunct text in an English or Humanities course.
The driving idea behind the Student Success Guides is that methodical and purposive studying is the
most effective and efficient. I don't claim that my methods are the only ones. In fact, I can't even call them my
methods, since I have taken the work and suggestions of many people and applied them as I saw fit.
To do well in college the student does not have to be an excellent writer, but a certain competence is
expected and is essential. This text is designed to help the student develop sufficient writing competency to
produce papers and exams acceptable in any college level course.
Robert T. Carroll
Sacramento City College
May 1990
Acknowledgment and dedication. For the first half of my teaching career at Sacramento City College I
was fortunate to have had Les Read as my colleague in the philosophy department. Les was one of my
closest friends until his sudden death at age 48. Ed Stupkawho taught college success classesLes,
and I spent many fruitful hours discussing, arguing, and evaluating various teaching techniques and ideas.
Without their insights and criticisms, this guide would not have been written.
The Los Rios Community College Board of Trustees granted me a sabbatical leave in the spring of
1986 to complete this project.
STUDENT SUCCESS GUIDE: WRITING SKILLS
Table of Contents
1. INTRODUCTION 1
1.1 WRITING - BASIC CHECKLIST 2
Exercise 1 - Writing : Checking the Basics 3
2. ELEMENTS OF SATISFACTORY WRITING 4
2.1 CLARITY 4
Exercise 2 - Clarity in Writing 6
2.2 COHERENT AND FOCUSED WRITING 7
2.2.1 TITLES 8
2.2.2 INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPHS 9
Exercise 3 - Checking Titles & Introductions 11
2.2.3 BODY PARAGRAPHS 13
Exercise 4 - Checking Points & Support 15
2.2.4 TRANSITIONS 16
Exercise 5 - Checking Transitions 18
2.2.5 CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH 18
Exercise 6 - Checking Conclusions 18
2.2.6 WRITING ESSAYS - A CHECKLIST 19
2.3 A METHOD FOR WRITING ESSAYS 20
Exercise 7 - Grouping Ideas 25
Exercise 8 - Listing, Grouping & Outlining 30
2.3.1 SUMMARY - USING THE SLOOWER METHOD 32
2.4 WRITING THE IN-CLASS ESSAY 33
2.4.1 PREPARING FOR THE EXAM 33
2.4.2 WRITING THE ESSAY 33
2.4.3 SUMMARY : WRITING THE IN-CLASS ESSAY 35
2.5 GENERAL WRITING TIPS 36
SUGGESTED ANSWERS TO EXERCISES 1-6 38
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1. INTRODUCTION
ithout a doubt, the most
important invention in human
historv is writing. lt provides a
relativelv permanent record of
information, opinions, beliefs,
feelin,s, ar,uments, explanations, theories,
etc. Writin, allows us to share our
communication not onlv with our
contemporaries, but also with future
,enerations. lt permits people from the near
and far-distant past to speak to us. Whv then,
,iven all of the beautv and benefits of writin,,
do so manv students hate it'
Part of the distaste for writin, must be
accounted for bv the associations students
make with it. Writin, is often tau,ht in such a
wav that student failures, rather than
successes, are focused on. 1he writin, process
is learned, bv and lar,e, in an environment of
constant criticism and repeated failure.
Creative use of lan,ua,e, inventive thinkin,,
and critical reasonin, often evoke not praise
but hostilitv. Some teachers even use writin,
as a form of punishment. ln addition, manv
students remember their earliest writin,
experiences as involvin, dull or irrelevant
topics (similar to their first readin,
experiences).
lurthermore, manv students were never
required to learn proper spellin, or ,rammar.
1hese poor students come to think that
"ln,lish" and "writin," are nothin, but spellin,
and ,rammar. 1o them, writin, means
inevitable failure. Oood writin, is somethin,
thev believe thev will never be able to achieve,
because thev not onlv identifv ,ood writin,
with proper spellin, and ,rammar, but thev are
,overned bv the self-servin, and false notion
that thev can't learn how to spell correctlv or
how to construct ,rammaticallv correct
sentences.
However, ,ood writin, is not equivalent to
,ood spellin, and ,rammar. ln fact, there will
be no advice or instruction in those areas here.
1his text presupposes that the student knows
both that correct spellin, is expected and how
to find the correct spellin, of anv word. lt also
presupposes that knowled,e of a lan,ua,e's
,rammar and correct word usa,e are necessarv
conditions for ,ood writin, in that lan,ua,e.
ln short, this text assumes that the student
knows:
(1) how to properlv construct a sentence,
(2) that subjects and verbs must a,ree in
number (sin,ular subjects require sin,ular
verbs, plural subjects require plural verbs),
(3) that the reference of pronouns should
not be ambi,uous,
(1) that there should be consistencv of
person and tense in writin, (no shifts from first
to third person writin, or from present tense
to past tense writin,, unless there is a verv
,ood reason to do so), and
(5) that correct spellin,, punctuation,
capitalization and word usa,e are required.
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WRITING - BASIC CHECKLIST
Before turning in a writing assignment, go through this basic checklist.
1. Is every sentence complete, not a fragment?
2. Do the subject and predicate agree in number in each sentence?
3. Is every word spelled correctly?
4. Are sentences punctuated correctly?
5. Are words capitalized properly?
6. Does each pronoun unambiguously refer to its antecedent?
7. Do you stay in the same tense and person throughout?
8. Are all words used correctly?
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XRCIS 1. CHCKINC TH BASICS
Use the WRl1lNO - BASlC CHlCKllS1 to check the followin, essav. Correct anv errors.
Check vour corrections a,ainst the corrected version printed in the ANSWlRS 1
lXlRClSlS, pa,es 3o-39.
CAPl1Al PUNlSHMlN1
1hrou,hout historv the question of capitol punishment has been a cause of much
controversv. l believe that capital punishent is not moralv justifvable on the ,rounds that it is
immoral to kill a human bein,. And, the affect of killin, criminals is too encoura,e violence.
1hose in favor of capital punishment claim that it is a deterant to crime. 1hev also lo,icallv
claim that it help to alleviate the over-crowded situation in most fedral and state institutions.
Another often heard defense is that executin, criminals could of saved the taxpavers manv
dollars that could of been spent on food, shelter and clothin, durin, a lifetime sentence.
1heir has actuallv been little to substantiate the deterant theorv because few criminals
consider ,ettin, cau,ht when plannin, an ille,al action. 1he theorv is, for the most part, archaic
and irrevalent to the question of capital punishment. lt is, in fact, another question in it's self.
While it is true that are penal institution our over-crowded, this is not a reason to kill people.
lf this lo,ic is excepted, it would be permissible to kill three quarters of New York citv. Crowded
conditions and criminal punishment should not be confused with each other. 1hevr'e seperate
problems whose existance indicates that there is to much confusion.
As to the third claim, that much monev would be saved, l ask vou to value the worth of a
dead man. While it is true that the criminal who has been executed will no lon,er commit
crimes, a person who is helped to become a useful citizen can become quite viable.
lt is true, that there mav be incori,able people, who manv people will think should be killed:
but that person has the same ri,ht as evervone else. He need, perhaps, more help than
others--but l do not believe that its reallv a sound reason to kill him--or havin, him killed. 1he
hole of societv is effected in a bad wav when we start killin, in the name of law and order. 1he
countries attitude better start chan,in, or we'll all be in a mess.
lf it is wron, to kill one man, its twice as wron, to kill two.
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2. LMNTS OI SATISIACTORY
WRITINC
o one likes to be reminded of
their shortcomin,s or failures.
Constant criticism isn't ,ood for
the e,o or self-confidence.
Checkin, vour writin, for
correct sentence structure, mechanics, word
usa,e, spellin,, punctuation and
capitalization--and makin, the needed
corrections--will reduce the amount of adverse
criticism vou'll receive on vour writin,
assi,nments. lverv writin, assi,nment done at
home ou,ht to be nearlv error-free.
Writin, in class, without the benefit of
surplus time, dictionaries, writin, texts, and
the like poses special problems for some
students. Some teachers allow students to use
dictionaries durin, exams. lf vour teacher
allows this, make sure vou brin, vour
dictionarv to school on the dav of the test. (lt
is a ,ood idea to carrv a small dictionarv with
vou while at school.)
lf, however, vou are unable to write
basicallv proper and correct in-class
assi,nments, then vou should not enroll in a
course which requires a si,nificant amount of
in-class writin,. You will need to work on vour
basic writin, skills before vou attempt such a
course. (Most likelv, vou will need to enroll in
a developmental writin, course.)
Assumin, that vou are able to write
basicallv proper and correct in-class
assi,nments, there are still three elements vou
should check before turnin, in anv written
assi,nment: CLARlTY, COHLRLNCL anJ
IOCLS.
Most student writing failures in
mainstream (i.e., non-developmental)
courses are due to lack of clarit,, coherence
and/or focus.
You do not need to become an excellent
writer in order to do well on writin,
assi,nments in vour non-ln,lish courses. But
vou must be able to write well enou,h to
communicate to vour teachers that vou
understand vour assi,nments and have learned
the material. However, vou can't demonstrate
what vou know if vou can't focus on a subject
and write clearlv and coherentlv about it.
2.1 CLARITY
Insufficient clarit, ma, be due to
vagueness, ambiguit, or obscurit,.
Va,ueness is usuallv a matter of usin, a word
or expression whose meanin, is not precise or
definite enou,h. Referrin, to a philosophical
ar,ument as 'stupid', without explainin, in
what wav the ar,ument fails, would be an
example of va,ue writin,. ften, qualitative
terms are va,ue. lor example, we all want to
,et rid of 'ncompetent' teachers, but just what
is meant bv 'incompetent teacher'' r, we
want to ,et rid of the 'jat' in ,overnment, but
just what is meant bv 'fat''
ften, too, quantitative expressions
re,ardin, amounts, dates, times, etc. are
va,ue, e.,., 'not very much monev will be
needed to build a new national defense
svstem'. (Just how much is 'not verv much'')
ften, a ,ood example or illustration will
reduce or eliminate va,ueness. With
quanttatve terms, however, the best wav to
reduce or eliminate va,ueness is to substitute
the va,ue expression with one which is more
precise. With qualitative terms it will usuallv
be necessarv to provide a precsng Jejnton,
i.e., a list of conditions which an item must
fulfill to have the term correctlv applied to it.
Ambiguit, occurs when a word or
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expression is used in such a wa, that it can
be understood in more than one wa,.
Ambi,uitv is usuallv a matter of carelessness
and often involves usin, a pronoun whose
referent is unclear. lor example, "laws involve
commands, duties and sanctions. 1hev are
interrelated." lt is not clear what 'thev' refers
to. ften, the onlv wav to eliminate pronoun
reference ambi,uitv is to not use the pronoun.
l.,. "laws involve the interrelated concepts of
commands, duties and sanctions" (rather than
the two sentences used in the previous
example).
Sometimes it is not what a word refers to
that is unclear, but what sense the word has in
a particular context. lor example, if a si,n bv a
lake said IIN IOR IISHINC would it mean
that the fishin, is ,ood or that it is lawful to
fish or that it is not lawful to fish' Usuallv the
context makes it clear what sense of a word is
intended. lf it doesn't, then the ambi,uous
expression ou,ht to be exchan,ed for one that
is clear. (l.,., "$2O line for lishin," or "lawful
to lish Here" or "lxcellent lishin, Here",
dependin, on what meanin, is intended bv the
ambi,uous expression.)
Sometimes the grammatical structure of
a sentence makes it ambiguous. When this is
the case, the writer often ends up savin, one
thin, but meanin, another. lor example,
"Walkin, down the street, her house seemed
to ,et bi,,er." (1he house is walkin,,
accordin, to this sentence. lt should read
somethin, like "As she walked down the
street, her house appeared to ,et bi,,er."
What if she had written, "As she walked down
the street, it seemed to ,et bi,,er"' How
would vou correct that sentence') 1he onlv
wav to eliminate ,rammatical ambi,uitv is to
correct the ,rammatical structure of the
sentence so that it is clear what vou mean to
sav and vou sav what vou mean.
Obscurit, in student writing is usuall,
due to incorrect word usage or convoluted
sentence structure. 1he former can be
reduced bv onlv usin, words vou know the
meanin, of. 1he latter can often be reduced
bv simplv reducin, the len,th of a sentence.
ften, however, obscure writin, is due to lack
of clear connection between ideas, such as
between a ,eneral claim and its application. ln
such cases, a ,ood example or illustration can
clarifv matters substantiallv. lor example,
"Oood reasonin, should be clear. 1hat is,
there should be no doubt as to what vour point
is and what vour supports for that point are."
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XRCIS 2 - CLARITY IN WRITINC (Answers on pages 39-40.)
Ior each of the following paragraphs: a. Circle an, vague or ambiguous expressions. (Suggest wa,s to clarif,
or rewrite the material so that it is clearer.)
b. Mark obscure sentences or passages with a marginal, vertical line next to the obscurit,. (Tr, to rewrite
the passage in clear nglish.)
c. Indicate places where examples or illustrations are needed.
1. I had a terrible time driving last week. On Monda,, coming home I drove into the wrong house and collided
with a tree I don't have. On Tuesda,, a pedestrian hit me and went under m, car. The gu, was all over the road.
I had to swerve a number of times before I hit him. On Wednesda,, as I approached the intersection, a stop sign
suddenl, appeared in a place where no stop sign had ever appeared before. So, when I saw that I couldn't avoid
the collision, I stepped on the gas and crashed into another car. But the worst was ,et to come. On Thursda,,
an invisible car came out of nowhere, struck m, vehicle and vanished!
2. Walking in the rain, the house got dimmer and dimmer. I saw Mar, and asked her how her mother was.
Mar, hated her mother. She was ver, cruel. She told me that Carol and her mother did not see e,e to e,e on
her friendship with ]onathan. She's a sociologist who makes her living b, showing the degrading effects of
povert, and ignorance. She once had severe pains when she laid on her side for over a ,ear.
3. Objective considerations of contemporar, phenomena compels the conclusion that success or failure in
competitive activities exhibits no tendenc, to be commensurate with innate capacit,, but that a considerable
element of the unpredictable must invariabl, be taken into account.
4. Toda, there was an event at the Three Mile Island nuclear power plant in Penns,lvania. There was some
slight energetic disassembl, and rapid oxidation. We consider these events, however, to be normal aberrations.
There was some infiltration as plutonium took up residence in a restricted area. Those communities with
similar nuclear reactors need not worr, as this event is clearl, within an acceptable flat band of risk.
5. We must not allow police brutalit,. Too much violence b, a policeman should lead to automatic suspension
from the force while the incident is being investigated. xcessive brutalit, should not be tolerated in a free
societ,. Libert, and police terrorism do not mix well in a democrac,. Let's stop this brutalit, now, before it is
too late.
6. Cenerall, speaking, abortion should not be allowed. But there are some situations where it should be up to
the woman and her ph,sician, not the state or the communit,. These situations should be clear to ever,one
with even half a brain, so I won't go into an, detail.
7. In respect to abortion, this phenomenon exists with relation to the premise that the unborn person is in fact a
person in ever, sense of the word, due all rights which accompan, the state of personhood. Most importantl,,
the fetus is due its right to life. I shall assume that ever,one is well aware that argumentation on this particular
premise is still being conducted and no true conclusion is realisticall, foreseen upcoming in the near future.
Nonetheless, such is the foundation of much anti-abortion argumentation, and since no clear conclusion
appears to be forthcoming, I shall for the breath of the paper accept the premise that the fetus is a person and
examine the development of the argument from there.
S. The first amendment to the federal constitution states that "Congress shall make no laws respecting an
establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof." This amendment requires the separation of
church and state, and since public schools are run b, the government at some level, religious activit, in public
schools has been closel, watched.
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2.2 COHRNT AND IOCUSD
WRITINC
Coherent writing has clear connections
between ideas, between sentences, and
between paragraphs. locused writin, has a
clear purpose and a clear topic. Connections
establish relations and make transitions. |See
mv Student Success Cuide - Part I, Stud,
Skills, especiallv the material on transitional
expressions, relations, and the lan,ua,e of
questions, viz., sections 1.3, 1.1 and 1.5.]
Iocus establishes what ,ou are writing
about and wh,. Without focus, writing
cannot be coherent.
Manv students confuse writing about an
issue with focusin,. 1hev are not identical.
IOCUSD WRITINC STABLISHS IN
TH BCINNINC PARACRAPH A
PRCIS TOPIC AND PURPOS. 1he
remainin, para,raphs must then be related to
the established topic and purpose. An essav on
the harmful effects of porno,raphv, for
example, would not necessarilv be focused
simplv because everv sentence in the essav had
somethin, to do with porno,raphv. 1o be
focused, the sentences would have to be
relevant to the purpose of the essav.
Student writing often fails because it
does not have a clear focus or purpose. lt
rambles or wanders from point to point,
without anv clear direction. lt is, in short,
incoherent. Much adverse criticism on written
assi,nments can be avoided bv learnin, to
write coherentlv. 1he first step is to learn how
to focus vour writin,. lor this, we will return
to some sli,htlv modified material on focused
readin, which was introduced in the Student
Success Cuide - Stud, Skills book.
Coherent essa, writing has four parts: title,
introduction, main bod,, and conclusion.
1hese parts must be clearlv related to each
other, as indicated bv the followin, outline of
the structure of a well-formed essav.
S1RUC1URl l AN lSSAY
l. 1itle
ll. lntroduction (to the essav)
lll. Bodv (of the essav)
A. Para,raph
a. Main or subsidiarv point
b. Support for main or subsidiarv point
i. Back,round material
ii. lllustrations or examples
iii. Reasons
aa. Su,,estin, purposes
bb. Supportin, conclusions
cc. Oivin, explanations
c. 1ransitions
B. Para,raph
. . . .(same as above, lll.A). . . .
lV. Conclusion (of essav)
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2.2.1 TITLS
The title of an essa, should reveal its topic. Since a title should be short, it usuallv should
not reveal in detail what the writer plans to do with that topic. 1itles of student essavs often
reveal the presence or lack of focus. Oenerallv speakin,, the more specific a title is, the more
focused the writin, tends to be.
Below are four lists of titles, each descendin, from more ,eneral titles to more specific ones.
Note how the more specific the title is, the clearer the idea is as to what the essav will focus on.
XAMPLS OI SSAY TITLS
l. Oreece
Oreek 1ra,edv
Sophocles and 1ra,edv
"Anti,one"
1he Concept of Dutv in "Anti,one"
Would Anti,one Have Been a Draftdod,er'
ll. Ood
1he lxistence of Ood
Proofs for the lxistence of Ood
1he lmpossibilitv of Provin, Ood lxists
lll. Oreece and l,vpt
Reli,ion and Art in Oreece and l,vpt
1he Social and Political lunction of Reli,ious Art in Ancient Oreece and l,vpt
lV. Abortion
Ar,uments for and a,ainst Abortion
Reason and lmotion in Abortion-Ar,uments
Reasonable Ar,uments in the Abortion Controversv
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2.2.2 INTRODUCTORY PARACRAPHS
Titles and introductor, paragraphs
should be closel, related. 1he introductorv
para,raph must contain an openin, statement
and a thesis statement. 1he openin, para,raph
should establish a context, it should let the
reader know what the topic is in more detail
than the title. lt should inform the reader of
the writer's intentions: what are vou ,oin, to
trv to do in the paper' Oood writers use
the introduction to stimulate interest in the
essav bv indicatin, some interestin, fact about
the topic's historv or bv notin, its si,nificance
or value.
Below vou will find examples of introductorv
para,raphs for each of the most specific titles
from the list of example titles ,iven above.
Note that each example lets the reader know
the thesis and purpose of the essav.
Example 1
Would Antigone Have Been a Draftdodger!
"Anti,one" has si,nificance for the modern reader even thou,h it was written two
thousand vears a,o. 1he question of what one should do when dutv to the state conflicts
with moral dutv must still be asked. Anti,one's dilemma is the same that faced manv
voun, men durin, the Vietnam War. 1o understand her behavior in Sophocles'
masterpiece, we must understand her concept of dutv. Perhaps bv understandin,
Anti,one's values and actions, we will be able to better understand the draft resistors of
our own countrv. lor, manv of them seemed to share Anti,one's idea of a moral dutv to
obev a 'hi,her law' which conflicts with the law of the state.
Example 2
The Impossibilit, of Proving Cod xists
Whether or not the existence of Ood can be proven bv rational ar,uments has been
debated for centuries. Despite the manv ar,uments for Ood's existence, such as Anselm's
famous ontolo,ical ar,ument or St. 1homas's five proofs, l will show that it is impossible
to prove the existence of Ood.
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Example 3
The Social and Political Iunction of Religious Art
in Ancient Creece and g,pt
Example 4
Reasonable Arguments in the Abortion Controvers,
Abortion is a topic likelv to raise more violent emotions than reasoned ar,uments.
Nevertheless, there are some reasonable voices in this emotional wilderness, and it is their
ar,uments on abortion l will present and analvze. A minimum condition for bein, a
'reasonable voice' is not to expect others to accept on faith statements that are
unprovable. 1hus, anv ar,ument that would trv to enforce bv law a proposition that is
unprovable is necessarilv unreasonable, in mv view. Statements such as "Ood infuses a
soul into everv union of human ,ametes at the moment a zv,ote is formed" are
unprovable. lt mav not be unreasonable to believe such a claim in the context of one's
reli,ious faith, but it is unreasonable to require others to share vour faith. ln this essav, l
will explain whv such a demand is unreasonable, as l attempt to demonstrate what
constitutes a reasonable ar,ument on the topic of abortion.
Reli,ion and art were verv closelv connected in both ancient Oreece and l,vpt. But in
Oreece the arts affirmed human freedom and di,nitv, while in l,vpt the arts primarilv
affirmed the power of the pharaoh. Oreek art reflects a humane, non-do,matic view of the
,ods, whereas l,vptian art reflects ri,iditv and stiffness. 1he historv of Oreek art shows us
a dvnamic, chan,in, societv. 1he historv of l,vptian art shows us a static, unchan,in,
societv. 1o understand these differences in art and their relationship to differences in the
social and political structure of the two societies, it is essential to understand the
differences between the reli,ious beliefs which ,ave rise to them.
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1he example titles and introductions share the common qualitv of bein, well-focused. 1hev
indicate a writer who knows what she is about, and whv. lach title is clear and specific. lach
introductorv para,raph has a clear openin, and thesis statement. Some of the example titles and
para,raphs are more interestin, than others, but the main thin, is that each does what it is
supposed to do.
XRCIS 3 - CHCKINC TITLS AND INTRODUCTIONS
Read each of the followin, titles and introductorv para,raphs. Write a short evaluation of
each para,raph. Do the titles and introductions clearlv state the purpose and focus of the essav'
(Answers on pa,es 1O-11.)
1. Praver in School
"Whv can't freedom to acknowled,e Ood be enjoved a,ain bv children in everv schoolroom
across this land'" 1his question was asked bv President Rea,an in his State of the Union messa,e.
2. 1he Death Penaltv: Ri,ht or Wron,'
1he Death Penaltv has alwavs been a controversial issue. l will trv mv best to present both
sides on equal terms.
3. 1he Moralitv of Abortion
When speakin, of abortion it is at once a moral, medical, le,al, sociolo,ical, demo,raphic,
reli,ious and psvcholo,ical issue, amazin,lv complex and not easilv amendable to
one-dimensional thinkin,. lverv person who considers the permissibilitv of abortion will no doubt
view the issue with varvin, perspectives. When an issue becomes so overwhelmin,lv complex an
individual tends to associate an individual premise of the issue with the issue as a whole. 1his is a
defensive mechanism which makes the issue easier to deal with.
1. llat Rate 1axes
nce scoffed at as an idealistic fool's dream, the modified flat rate income tax is now ,ainin,
serious supporters. 1his is not surprisin, when the merits of the flat tax are compared to the
complexities and apparent inequities of the current pro,ressive income tax. However, if vou look
a little deeper it can be seen that the flat tax is, at best, a step in the ri,ht direction.
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5. Bilin,ual lducation: Shatterin, the lin,uistic Barrier
Children learn better when tau,ht in their native ton,ue. Children learn better when cultural
disparities are concurrentlv addressed. Children need careful and conscientious trainin, in
learnin,, understandin, and speakin, ln,lish as a second lan,ua,e before learnin, to read and
write it. Meanwhile, children need their curriculum tau,ht in their first lan,ua,e so that their
conceptual development does not suffer. 1herefore, bilin,ual/bicultural instruction in our schools
is an educational asset that should be properlv exercised to ensure the most advanta,eous
learnin, possible.
6. Hand,un Control
Durin, the last decade we have experienced the ,reatest increase of crime in our historv.
lach vear more than 17O,OOO people are killed bv a hand,un. |1] Sales of hand,uns in California
rose 3 percent over last vear and are expected to reach 5 million sales bv the vear 19o7.|2]
Somethin, must be done to stop the violence in our countrv.
7. Ar,ument lavorin, Mandatorv Seat Belt le,islation
1he United States has one of the lowest vehicular fatalitv rates, per miles driven, in the
world. Deaths per 1OO million miles have steadilv declined from 11.2 in 1915 to 3.1 in 1977.
Despite this seemin,lv admirable claim, 15,OOO persons died on U.S. freewavs in 19o2 as a result
of vehicular trauma. 1he problem of road related trauma accounts for more than 9O per cent of
all transport fatalities and is the fourth leadin, public health problem in the United States. lor
voun, adults, ran,in, in a,e from 15 to 21, this is the leadin, cause of death. With the number of
fatalities the United States is now experiencin,, it would be relativelv easv to acquire the
necessarv number of names to fill a memorial wall similar to that of the Vietnam War Memorial
in Washin,ton, D.C.
o. 1he Ri,ht to Die
lt has been estimated that the medical advances of the last 1O vears exceed all medical
pro,ress of the precedin, 1OO vears. 1odav, countless doctors are able to perform life-savin,
miracles on their patients. However, this new technolo,v has also confronted us with a dilemma
we never had to consider before.
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9. 1he lmmoralitv of Capital Punishment for Murderers
Some proponents of capital punishment justifv the death penaltv on the ,round that it not
onlv deters an executed murderer from committin, anv more murders, but also deters others from
committin, murders, too. 1he first claim is certainlv true: dead men can't commit murders. And
the second part mav verv well be true to some extent, thou,h how si,nificant the deterrent effect
of the death penaltv is remains uncertain. lven so, the central issue re,ardin, the justification of
the death penaltv is not the si,nificance of its deterrent effect. 1he main issue is a moral one, and
deterrence is irrelevant to the moral justification of the death penaltv. lf premeditated killin, bv
the state could be morallv justified solelv bv its consequences, then theoreticallv there can be no
limit to the kinds of actions that the state could justifiablv punish bv death. 1he death penaltv
cannot be morallv justified bv its consequences. lf the premeditated killin, of a convicted criminal
bv the state can be justified, it will have to be on the ,rounds that the criminal deserves such a
punishment because of the nature of his crime. However, l will demonstrate that there is no
crime that deserves death, and thus that capital punishment is immoral.
2.2.3 BODY PARACRAPHS
A satisfactor, introduction informs the
reader of the topic and purpose of the essa,.
1he bodv of the essav should consist of main
points and their support. 1he bodv para,raphs
should fulfill the promise of the introduction.
Refer to section 2.2.2, above. ln
lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 9)--"Would Anti,one
Have Been a Draftdod,er'"--the bodv
para,raphs should explain Anti,one's concept
of dutv and applv it to draft resistors durin,
the Vietnam war. ln lXAMPll 2 (pa,e
9)--"1he lmpossibilitv of Provin, Ood
lxists"--the bodv para,raphs should show how
the standard ar,uments for the existence of
Ood fail and explain whv all such ar,uments
must fail. ln lXAMPll 3 (pa,e 1O)--"1he
Social and Political lunction of Reli,ious Art
in Ancient Oreece and l,vpt"--the bodv
para,raphs should explain the main differences
in reli,ious beliefs between the ancient
l,vptians and Oreeks and show how those
reli,ious differences were expressed in art. lt
should also
demonstrate a connection between the
different arts and the different social and
political institutions in the two societies. ln
lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 1O)--"Reasonable
Ar,uments in the Abortion Controversv"--the
bodv para,raphs should explain whv it is
unreasonable to expect others to accept
unprovable statements which vou take on
faith. lt should also establish criteria for what
constitutes a reasonable ar,ument. linallv, it
should present and analvze some reasonable
ar,uments on abortion.
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The support for main or subsidiar,
points should consist of
A. BACKORUND MA1lRlAl
and/or
B. lllUS1RA1lNS, lXAMPllS,
QU1A1lNS and/or
C. RlASNS
Background material should be given to
support the understanding of the material.
lts main function is to clarifv the meanin,,
function or si,nificance of the material. How
much and what kind of back,round material
ou,ht to be presented depends upon the
nature of the audience and the purpose of the
writin,. lor example, a paper for an
introductorv philosophv course on Plato's
ar,ument re,ardin, the difference between
knowled,e and opinion should not consist of
several pa,es of bio,raphical information.
Such information would be unnecessarv
because it would not help the reader (vour
teacher) determine whether or not vou
understand Plato's ar,ument. But, anv
concepts peculiar to ancient Oreek societv
which bear upon understandin, Plato's
ar,ument should be presented.
How much back,round information would
be needed for essavs on the topics in the
examples above' lor lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 9),
enou,h information should be ,iven so that
the reader knows who Anti,one is, what
situation exists in the plav that leads to her
moral dilemma, and what she does in response
to her situation. Bio,raphical information on
Sophocles, information on other plavs bv
Sophocles, the ori,ins of Oreek drama, etc.,
are unnecessarv.
lor lXAMPll 2 (pa,e 9), verv little, if
anv, back,round information need be ,iven.
Some information on the purpose of
ar,uments for Ood's existence mi,ht be ,iven.
ther back,round information mi,ht liven up
the essav some, but it is doubtful that it would
clarifv the ar,uments to be presented.
lor lXAMPll 3 (pa,e 1O), back,round
information should be spread throu,hout the
essav as needed to clarifv the specific works of
art, and the reli,ious, social and political
practices and beliefs that are mentioned.
lor lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 1O), verv little, if
anv back,round information is needed. Most
people are aware of the abortion controversv
and of the hi,hlv emotional nature of the
public debate on the issue.
Illustrations, examples and quotations
are given not onl, to clarif, points but to
support general claims. How manv
illustrations, examples or quotations should be
,iven depends on the nature and purpose of
the essav. An essav on a topic such as that in
lXAMPll 3 (pa,e 1O) should contain manv
examples of works of art from both l,vpt and
Oreece. An essav on a topic such as that in
lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 9) would not require manv
illustrations or examples. Several quotations
should be ,iven in lXAMPllS 2 and 1.
Reasons will generall, be statements of
purpose, statements in support of
conclusions, or explanator, statements.
Statements of purpose are reasons whv
someone has done (or will do) somethin,,
includin, whv the author has written what she
did.
Reasons ,iven to support conclusions are
called premises, thev are ,iven to support the
truth or reasonable certaintv of their
conclusions.
Reasons whv some event happened or
some action was taken are ,iven to explain
events or positions.
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lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 9) would require an
ar,ument to justifv Anti,one's actions and an
explanation of how her situation is like that of
the draft resistor. lXAMPll 2 (pa,e 9)
should present the kinds of reasons ,iven in
traditional ar,uments to support the
conclusion that Ood exists. 1he author must
also present her own reasons in support of her
conclusion that it is impossible to prove Ood
exists.
1he author of the essav in lXAMPll 3
(pa,e 1O) must support the several claims
made in the openin, para,raph re,ardin, both
the relationship of art to reli,ion and the
relationship of art and reli,ion to the social
and political structure of ancient Oreek and
l,vptian societies. 1he author of the essav in
lXAMPll 1 (pa,e 1O) must provide the
demonstration promised in the openin,
para,raph.
XRCIS 4 - CHCKINC POINTS AND
SUPPORT
Read the followin, ar,umentative essav in
support of mandatorv seat belt le,islation.
1. ls the main point of each para,raph
clear' lf it is, paraphrase it in a sin,le
sentence. lf it is not, trv to specifv how it needs
to be improved.
2. lndicate support statements with letters
above them: M or S for Main or Subsidiarv
point, B for Back,round material, l for
lxample or lllustration and R for Reason.
3. lf a support statement is a Reason,
indicate in the mar,in next to it whether it
states a purpose, premise or explanation.
(Answers on pa,es 11-15.)
Argument Iavoring Mandator, Seat Belt Legislation
1he United States has one of the lowest vehicular fatalitv rates, per miles driven, in the
world. Deaths per 1OO million miles have steadilv declined from 11.2 in 1915 to 3.1 in 1977.
Despite this seemin,lv admirable claim, 15,OOO persons died on U.S. freewavs in 19o2 as a result
of vehicular trauma. 1he problem of road related trauma accounts for more than 9O per cent of
all transport fatalities and is the fourth leadin, public health problem in the United States. lor
voun, adults, ran,in, in a,e from 15 to 21, this is the leadin, cause of death. With the number of
fatalities the United States is now experiencin,, it would be relativelv easv to acquire the
necessarv number of names to fill a memorial wall similar to that of the Vietnam War Memorial
in Washin,ton, D.C.
But there is still a lar,er problem that has to be dealt with after the dead are buried. 1he costs
to societv, in terms of medical and rehabilitation costs, insurance premiums, and lost productivitv
to emplovers far exceed the actual economic burdens imposed bv deaths. 1his problem is due to
the sheer number of non-fatal injuries, which is currentlv estimated at 1 million annuallv. lor
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instance, in medical cases where the costs to the patient or familv amounted to at least $1OO,OOO,
5O per cent had suffered brain and/or spinal cord dama,e. Road trauma produces more new
paraple,ics and quadriple,ics each vear in the United States than anv other form of accident. lt is
also the leadin, cause of epilepsv. Additionallv, on-the-job costs from road trauma directlv and
indirectlv cost U.S. emplovers an avera,e of approximatelv $12O,OOO per victim as a result of
medical insurance, workers compensation, unemplovment taxes, lost workdavs and
administrative costs. 1he total annual price ta, for automobile deaths and injuries is approachin,
57 billion dollars' Yet, we could si,nificantlv reduce this cost bv enactin, mandatorv seat belt
le,islation. ver 11 countries have enacted some form of seat belt le,islation, and 21 of those
forei,n laws have been studied bv the U.S. Department of 1ransportation. 1he focus of the
evaluation was the historv of the laws, implementation, specification of each law, compliance of
seat belt usa,e and the overall effectiveness of each law with respect to reducin, injuries and
deaths. 1he studv found that attitudes about seat belt use and laws did not correlate with
observed behavior. Moreover, enforcement bv police--which in most cases was limited to a small
fine and non-selective enforcement--was si,nificant in equatin, compliance and enactment of
le,islation. All countries saw an immediate 2OO-3OO per cent increase in compliance upon
enactment. Moreover, the avera,e reduction in fatalities and injuries was from 15-3O per cent.
f course, it is difficult to predict if the United States would experience similar success if
mandatorv seat belt le,islation were to be enacted here. But, Canada--a countrv much like our
own in manv relevant respects--witnessed an increase in seat belt usa,e from 17 percent to 76.o
percent when thev enacted their seat belt law. Also, after three vears of livin, with the new law,
Canadians have seen the automobile death and injurv rate drop bv 13 per cent, the number of
hospitalized victims drop bv 16 per cent, the cost of treatment drop bv 1O per cent and the
avera,e cost of rehabilitation drop bv 6.5 per cent. Some of these effects, thou,h, can be
attributed to the fact that speed limits were reduced durin, this same period.
pponents to mandatorv seat belt le,islation ar,ue that the state has no ri,ht to limit their
libertv unless their behavior is harmful to others. 1he truth is that it is not onlv the person who
does not wear a seat belt who is harmed when an accident occurs. 1he rest of us are harmed, too,
bv increasin, our automobile and hospitalization insurance costs and bv increasin, our tax
burden as we are forced to support more and more victims and their families with state monies.
People who used to contribute to the economv and the communitv now become financial
burdens to the communitv. 1he mandatorv seat belt law is no more an unreasonable limitation of
libertv than are traffic laws. Consequentlv, Con,ress or the states ou,ht to enact mandatorv seat
belt le,islation as soon as possible.
2.2.4 TRANSITIONS
While each para,raph has its own
structure, it must be connected to the other
para,raphs to ,ive the whole bodv of the essav
its coherence. 1o indicate a shift from
para,raph to para,raph, or a shift from a main
point to a subsidiarv one, or a shift from one
supportin, point to another supportin, or
contrastin, point, writers use transitional
expressions. 1hese expressions not onlv mark
shifts in ideas, thev also relate ideas. 1hev
connect what comes before them with what
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comes after them. Usin, transitional
expressions will help vou write coherentlv, for,
it will help vou focus on the relationships of
the various parts of the essav vou are writin,.
Below, vou will find a list of relations and
transitional expressions used to establish them.
ln vour own writin,
1. ldentifv what relationship vou want to
establish between two ideas, then use an
appropriate transitional expression to connect
the ideas.
2. Be careful not to link numerous ideas in a
sin,le sentence.
3. When be,innin, a new line of thou,ht
indicate this bv startin, a new para,raph.
RLATIONSHIPS AND TRANSITIONAL XPRSSIONS
RllA1lNSHlP 1RANSl1lNAl lXPRlSSlN
ADDl1lN and, also, a,ain, besides, moreover,
too, furthermore, in addition, firstlv,
SlQUlNCl next, then, first, last, second, finallv,
soon, since, shortlv
CMPARlSN similarlv, likewise, bv comparison,
in the same (or like) wav (or manner)
CN1RAS1 on the other hand, but, vet, nevertheless,
still, however, on the contrarv, in contrast,
otherwise, despite
lllUMlNA1lN for example, that is, in fact, for instance,
specificallv, particularlv, to clarifv
lXPlANA1lN, for this reason, because, since,
PRl or for, in order to, to this end
AROUMlN1 (premise)
AROUMlN1 (conclusion) therefore, in conclusion, so, thus,
consequentlv, as a result, it follows that
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XRCIS 5 - CHCKINC TRANSITIONS
Oo throu,h the essav of lxercise 1 and circle anv transitional expressions. Where vou think
there should be a transitional expression but there is none, write 'tr'. (Answers on p. 15.)
2.2.5 CONCLUDINC PARACRAPH
1he conclusion of an essav should explicitlv tie to,ether the several points made in the bodv
of the essav to the thesis statement made in the introduction. A conclusion should summarize
what an essav has attempted to do and what it has accomplished. You should not include vour
own evaluation of vour work in vour conclusion. let the reader decide on the merits of vour
essav.
XRCIS 6 - CHCKINC CONCLUSIONS
Read the followin, conclusions of essavs. Do thev seem to tie to,ether several points or
summarize what the essav tried to do or accomplish' ln ,eneral terms, what is ,ood or bad about
these conclusions' (Without readin, the entire essav vour comments on a conclusion must be in
verv ,eneral terms.)
(Answers on pa,es 15-16.)
lxercise 6 - Concludin, Para,raphs
1. ln all of the world, there is no place where freedom of reli,ion is more prevalent than in the
United States. 1he opportunitv to worship is available anv time. r,anized voluntarv praver in
the public schools is not necessarv and it is undesirable. 1he certain adverse consequences of
so-called voluntarv praver far outwei,h the uncertain benefits. Children who do not join in the
majoritv's reli,ious activitv will be made to feel persecuted for their reli,ious beliefs. And, if
centuries of pravin, in places of worship have not led to the development of ,ood character and
moral behavior, it bo,,les the mind to think that a few seconds of pravin, to,ether in a profane
place will suddenlv cure all our moral ills.
2. However, l a,ree with his solution and despite some rather disturbin, material, l found his
ar,ument to be much more sound and reasonable.
3. 1hrou,hout the breath of this paper, l have been ,rantin, that the fetus is a person as abortion
opponents su,,est. l have concentrated on questionin, whether their conclusions, abortion is
impermissible for varied reasons, follows their ar,ument with necessitv. l think it does not. l feel
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that so lon, as a woman has not consciouslv ,iven another person permission to use her bodv, the
other person has no ri,ht to demand use or continued use of her bodv. l view a persons 'ri,ht to
life' as no more than a statement that people should not be killed unjustlv. ln essence, l believe
that a woman has everv ri,ht to decide what happens in and to her own bodv in most cases. All
the premises l've offered to support mv opinion lead me to feel that ,iven the correct motives,
abortion mav be considered morallv permissible. |N1l: leel free to correct anv basic writin,
errors in this para,raph.]
1. lor these reasons and those stated earlier, chan,es toward a flat rate tax, despite the inequities
and problems that mav occur, is an improvement over the existin, svstem.
5. ln re,ardin, the most advanta,eous learnin, environment for the non-ln,lish speakin, child,
evidence concernin, bilin,ual/bicultural education clearlv supports the implementation of such.
A 1979 statement issued bv the New York based Carne,ie Corporation concluded that
"re,ardless of the current debate, the fact remains that there are millions of children in the U.S.
schools who speak little or no ln,lish. Since neither quick immersion nor lSl alone has worked
well with children from low-income, non-ln,lish speakin, back,rounds," reasoned Alan Pifer,
foundation president, "teachin, such voun,sters in their first lan,ua,e while thev are learnin,
ln,lish would appear to be a sensible alternative."
6. Somethin, must be done soon, before another 17O,OOO people are killed this vear.
7. Because l feel mv premises are sound and l have ar,ued and analvzed the opposition, l feel l am
justified in savin, doctors should have a ri,ht to discontinue treatment to terminallv ill patients.
2.2.6 WRITINC SSAYS - A CHCKLIST
Before turnin, in an essav, ,o throu,h the followin, checklist.
1. ClARl1Y
1.1 ls anv expression ambi,uous, too va,ue, or obscure'
1.2 Are definitions ,iven where needed'
1.3 ls the thesis and purpose of the essav clear'
1.1 Are there examples, illustrations and quotations where needed'
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2. CHlRlNCl
2.1 ls each sentence clearlv related to those before and after it'
2.2 ls each para,raph clearlv related to those before and after it'
2.3 Are appropriate transition words used to indicate how vour sentences
and para,raphs are related'
2.1 Do statements which need support have sufficient reasons, facts or details to
back them up'
3. lCUS
3.1 Do vou state in the first para,raph vour purpose and focus'
3.2 Does each sentence in a para,raph clearlv relate to the other sentences in
that para,raph'
3.3 Does each para,raph clearlv relate to the other para,raphs'
3.1 Does vour conclusion tie to,ether vour thesis and support'
2.3 A MTHOD IOR WRITINC SSAYS
ritin, will be easier if it is
svstematic and methodical.
1here is no recipe for ,reat
writin,, but there are several
methods for writin,
satisfactorilv.
ne of the more successful methods for
be,innin, essav writers is known as the
SlWlR method. 1he method introduced
here is a variation on that method, it mi,ht be
called the SlWlR method. SlWlR is
an acronvm for
Select a topic.
List vour ideas.
Or,anize vour ideas.
Outline vour essav.
Write vour first draft.
dit vour first draft.
Rewrite vour essav.
1. SLCTINC TH TOPIC. Before
selectin, a topic, consider how much time vou
have to write the essav. Select a topic vou can
fit easilv into vour schedule. Be,in bv drawin,
up a list of possible topics. When makin, up
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vour list, trv to come up with specIIIc topics
rather than verv ,eneral ones. But even verv
,eneral topics are better than none at all. You
can alwavs narrow down vour topic after vou
have listed vour ideas and before vou be,in
vour outline.
Base vour list on topics su,,ested bv vour
teacher or discussed in class or the text book.
Use the subject index of vour text to ,ive vou
some ideas. lf necessarv, ,o to the librarv and
use the subject catalo,ue index to look up
titles of books, one mi,ht provide vou with a
topic. While makin, vour list of topics, do not
evaluate them. Be,in the selectin, process
onlv after vou have several topics on vour list.
When selectin, a topic, consider what
interests vou and what vour knowled,e of the
potential topics is. lf possible, select a topic
related to vour experience and not too
technical for vou to handle. You do not want
to do more research than is necessarv.
Research takes time.
lf vou have difficultv in selectin, a topic
from vour list, use the process of elimination to
arrive at vour topic. Reject first the topic vou
least want to write about. Repeat this
procedure until vou are left with one topic.
2. MAK A LIST OI IDAS. Use vour
memorv, notes, and studv cards |See
Student Success GuIde - Study
SkIlls, section 6.] to help vou make up a list
of ideas related to vour topic. Your list should
include anvthin, vou can think of that has
anvthin, at all to do with vour topic. Don't be
critical when makin, up the list. 1he point of
this activitv is to list ideas, not to select the
ones vou will include in vour paper. 1hat
comes later.
An example of listin, ideas is ,iven on the
followin, pa,e. 1he topic selected is "Reli,ious
Art in Ancient Oreece and Ancient l,vpt."
look over the list before ,oin, on. (1he list is
copied in lxercise 7. Use the copv as vou read
the next section on or,anizin, vour ideas.)
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XAMPL LISTINC OI IDAS
Religious Art in Ancient Creece and Ancient g,pt
reli,ion
the Parthenon
moderation
art
temple of Athena Nike
ostentatious
Oreece
temple of Karnak
individualism
l,vpt
pvramids
wealth c luxurv
temples
columns/pillars
povertv
hardship
sculptures
pvlons
statues
poems
Horus
tombs
paintin,s
Athena
li,htness
vases
animals
heaviness
lliad
fate
ri,iditv
architecture
life after death
softness
philosophv
mass
,ods
friezes
colossal size
chan,e
metopes
stvlized
stabilitv
capitals
realism
,oddesses
music
idealism
Sophocles
tra,edies
power
sufferin,
edipus Rex
restraint
pharaoh
hubris
order
democracv
autocracv
freedom
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