Caroline Jolley Ms.

Caruso English 1102 5 April 2012 Proposal

4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Reviewed by Keri :) More ideas for the paper and an ending.

A Fight For Freedom is about how a family of slaves becomes separated when their owner auctions off the three children but decides to keep their mother, Justice. This cruel act leads to the rebellion of the slaves making this book a heart-felt suspense. Although, there are many books and movies out there about slavery, none seem to be relatable. In A Fight For Freedom the family aspect immediately intrigues the reader because the situation of children being taken from their mother often arouses peoples emotions with anger and sorrow. This book will be popular among a variety of people, but more so with teachers and the education system. It will not only be a wrenching suspense of an escaping slave family but also an informative piece on how slaves were treated and the specific time period. In addition, this book has meaning; it is derived from the mistreating of our own human beings. Even though the concept developed from a period in history that does no longer exist it still should not go unrecognized. It is well known that in the late 1700s slaves were abused for petty acts. African Americans had it hard enough being owned and having to do the white peoples dirty work all day long. On top of that they had to live in fear. No one ever knew if and when they could be sold from their loved ones, get beaten, or even be killed. If seeing this kind of cruel act among our own people does not get one worked up, nothing should. This book will touch the hearts of many because it is not just a story being told. Instead, it is a real life
4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:08 AM Explain more of who this book might touch. Maybe a certain group of people... 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 9:56 AM Could explain a little more of why none of the other books and movies about slavery seem relatable. 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 9:58 AM Why will this book be more popular with teachers and in the education system? Give a little detail of what this book gives that they would want. 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:00 AM You could add why teachers and educators would use a book like this for their students. 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:05 AM Explain more on why it should not go unrecognized.

event being retold. This issue is not one that is sugarcoated; it is blunt and somewhat disturbing. This being said, it is just what readers want, a true story straight to the point. A Fight For Freedom will begin at a slave auction where a slave mother, Justice, has to watch her three children be auctioned away from her. While undergoing the traumatic experience of watching her kids being taken away from her, Justice becomes raged and runs out, screaming, begging for her owner not to sale them without her. A whole lot blood and tears will be shed during this part of the story. Having this at the very start of the book immediately grabs the reader allowing them to become lost in the story early off. After the auction Justice decides that she will not bow down to the white people anymore and starts scheming a plan to be with her children once again. Justice acts immediately and tries to escape. Of course, she gets caught and receives the usually punishment of thirty lashes to the back. During the time it takes her to recover from the punishment of trying to escape she has had enough time to develop a plan that will be successful. Slaves are not usually allowed to talk to one another from different plantations. Therefore, Justice had to learn how to communicate with her kids through quilts. This is no easy task for anyone, much less a woman who has to work all day long. The struggle of communication shows just how smart slaves were and how much the white people underestimated them. Now that Justice has explained the whole escape route to her children through quilts it is finally time to escape. This will be the scariest part for Justice and her children. They will have to escape and spend 3 nights and 4 days out on the run not knowing if they will be caught or not. In order to do this they will need the help of others. Now the Underground Railroad comes into play. The Underground Railroad is a secret escape route developed to help runaway slaves just like Justice and her family. Justice and her children will use this program to help them find their way to each other and even after they are together to stay
4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:10 AM Elaborate more on how this real life event being retold will interest readers.

in hiding for a while longer. Once they have made it to the end of their journey they will be living together in a free state where know one can ever separate them again. These characters are very unique characters. The story does not talk about many people, therefore, Justice and the children have to be above and beyond the ordinary. Justice is the main character. Being a single mother of three, she will exemplify independence, strength, and courage. She has a strong love for her family and is not willing to let anything or anyone get in the way of that. Isaiah is Justices oldest son. The thirteen-year-old boy plays the role of his mothers sidekick and somewhat of the father figure in the family. Since Isaiah has grown up in this way of life he has had to mature much faster than the other kids his age. Isaiah carries the same ambition that his mother does and is a great help when escaping.
4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:17 AM Im guessing you are going to intoduce Justices other two children and giving information on why they are unique. 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:18 AM As far as an ending, I would bring everything together and sum up what you have said. I would also inculde again some information on why this would be a good book. You could also include the purpose of the book in the ending. 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:13 AM I think this paragraph giving a summary of your story is just enough. It seems like you give the main points of the story but not too much. 4/10/12 10:21 AM Comment: Keri Flowe Apr 10, '12, 10:14 AM Maybe begin this paragraph with a more interesing start.