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Brief description of your piece.

What did you think you needed to change and why? We used basic medium shots and basic long angles shots throughout the video so there was a lack of diversity. The shots we had filmed were inconsistent so we had to re film in a set time to ensure we had consistency with the setting

What changes did you make and why?

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We started off with a single story line. Of a girl who felt insecure about her looks, Which led to depression and then her death. We have 3 diverse story lines that happen one after the other and we showed how they both lead to their downfall .

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Summarise any audience feedback you received (positive and negatives). Lacks originality And the story line was to clich . But they said that the narrative was easy to follow.

Based on audience feedback, what further changes will you make? Introduced more story lines which were more original and less clich .

Any additional comments.

We decided that we were going to make the whole video black and white.

We had to re film shots.

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We reversed the sequence of the music video and placed the deaths within the front to add to suspense and then carried on how each of the characters lead to their downfall We now have an introduction of a 3 split screen and a Segue further adding

We needed to incorporate the main artist into our music video to give the audience a glimpse of who he is.

We added more shots of the artist.

The parts we filmed became confusing to the audience and it was detracting away from a music video and more of a soap opera. However, it was more entertaining . Certain shots of the artist were out of sync to the backing track and editing was at a basic level.

We filmed each of us with post it notes to add to the narrative and further tell to the story.

We are going to intertwine the story lines.

Our media teacher was keen on us rotating shots of our artist.

We want to use more complex editing skills we plan to go on a video editing class at Hertford regional college.

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Easy to follow and a more original updated hip hop video.

to our story, Further focusing on the conventions of hip hop and then we continued with the 3 combining stories. Draft 5 Draft 6 Draft 7 Final Draft

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