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Brianna Faig Ms. Caruso ENGL 1103 1 October 2012 Toddlers and Tiaras: Where Does The Innocence Go? Growing up in this world today, we as human beings are pressured into

looking and acting certain ways. Television shows, magazines, and pop culture affect us so much that we let it influence our day-to-day schedule and how we look at ourselves. As parents, they always want the best for their children, some look at it as putting them into sports and getting them into group activities, for others, its beauty pageants. As Goldstein stated, Beauty pageants started in the 1920s in Atlantic City. The business owners needed a way to keep tourists there past Labor Day so they introduced pageantry (Goldstein 1). Today, beauty pageants are so much more than a way to keep tourists busy. A childs beauty pageant consists of children from the young age of just a couple days old to the teenage years, both girls and boys, parading around a stage, flaunting their stage personality, all dolled up in costumes and make up. The show Toddlers and Tiaras gives us a brief look into the children beauty pageant world, and as TLC says, On any given weekend, on stages across the country, little girls and boys parade around wearing makeup, false eyelashes, spray tans and fake hair to be judged on their beauty, personality, and costumes (TLC par. 1). Toddlers and Tiaras goes behind the scenes to families, mainly the mothers who put their children into
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these pageants, and lets the public see what it is really like when children are put into disguises that make them look years older than they actually are. The amount of attention that these children are being place under in
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pageants is a numerous amount. At the young age of their toddler years, they already have a name in the pageant world. Not only do the pageants make them well known, but also the fact that these children are put on television shows makes them known worldwide, which could be detrimental in the long run. For example, a young girl by the name of Alana Thompson, is a well known child pageant star due to her debut on the hit show Toddlers & Tiaras, not because of her success in pageants, but because of the entertainment and diversity that her family provides. A more familiar name that seven-year-old Alana goes by is Honey Boo Boo. Many viewers of this show have mixed reaction. It is good entertainment, but is all of this attention and publicity going to affect how Alana grows up, as well as her safety? This question relates back to JonBenet Ramsey, who was found in the basement of her parents home in Boulder, Colo., the day after Christmas, worked hard at winning beauty contests (Adler 1). Although Honey Boo Boo and JonBenet Ramsey are not directly related, it is the fact that these children are being put into the spotlight at such a young age and revealing their bodies. You truly never know what kind of people are out there and what they are capable of doing, and by putting young, nave children in the spotlight it can truly be harmful to them. Due to all of this attention these little girls and even boys are getting as well as having to walk the ramp to showcase her looks, poise, and confidence in different types of costumes; formal wear, sport wear and casual wear (Goldstein 3) can truly affect how these children grow up. Not only is having their tiny innocent

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bodies exposed harmful to their safety, but also harmful to their child-like behaviors. A big issue due to children being in beauty pageants is the affect on their innocence. A childs innocence is stolen by fake plastic smiles, false eyelashes and a polished appearance (Goldstein 3). By having their bodies exposed, it gives them the idea that it is okay for them to reveal themselves and each time they will have people applauding them for it. Also, by the childrens parents cheering them on and telling them to have more attitude when youre on the stage and having these skin- tight costumes on with make up caked on their soft-skin faces can cause major development issues. A child is supposed to be playing games on the playground, having play-dates, and being silly, but when they are exposing their bodies on a stage where hundreds of people can see them, their innocence is revealed, making them more grown up (psychologically) than a teenager. Great use of source Great use of source information and quotes within sentences. Some parts are either redundant or awkward or use an incorrect tense.

Could possibly consider spreading out the use of information from different Sources since it may come off to a reader that you only researched your topic from the Goldstein source. Add a works cited. Try to tie your paper with a conclusion that references all the idea that you have brought up