Clockwork Lies Proofreading Test v2 Instructions: Please highlight whatever you have changed in RED, canceled part(s) should

be marked with strikes and proofreaders notes should be written below the problematic sentence in Green or brown. Kindly note that the errors can be in spelling, sentence structure, word usage, expression etc. You can ignore the page number written above each set of dialogue. Enjoy the test

Page 19 Man: Let me try to ask if you can have one and take it back to your country as souvenir. SFX: Hahaha! Text: .. What is this silly man trying to tell me with that smiles on his face?

Lucius: Is he mocking at the fat fact that the world-fame Romans dont even have the skill to make something like this!? Lucius:

Man: Ive known the owner of this place since I am young. Im sure that hed be generous to give one to you! Man: Come! Lucius:

Lucius: Mocking the Romans even though hes just a slave..

Page 20 Owner: Ah, Sada-chan, welcome Sada: Good afternoon. Sada: The weather is hot today.

Lucius: What!

Man: Obachan*, I have something to ask of you. *T/N: Old lady/Maam+

Page 21 Text: Such an advanced civilization.. Lucius: Su such a large piece of mirror!?

Lucius: The drawings on those advent notices are perfect! I didnt know that professionals with such skills exist..

Text: These slaves really surprise others Lucius: Ohh clothes will be put inside this basket, huh? Lucius: Its possible to duplicate this thing with the skills that we hold

Text: we can definitely make use of Text: This slaves bathhouse.

Text (right): Compared to those big and grand bathhouses, although this place is much simpler it has much more functions Text (middle): There are also wall paintings of Mt. Vesuvius and the Bay of Apples in the Tepidarium*. [T/N: Tepidarium was the warm (tepidus) bathroom of the Roman baths.] Text: Rome is seeking novelty and arent these things fits ting the hill perfectly!!

Man: Hmm? Whats wrong, mister? Dont tell me that you cant find your clothes? Lucius: I really hope that I can tell Marcus about this idea as soon as possible.

Page 22 Lucius: Ducere Amicum Meum Possum?*

[T/N: Is it alright for me to bring my friend along?] Man: Ehh!? Man: No. I dont know where your clothes are..

Man: Obachan, obachan!! Man: This foreigner-san cant find his clothes! Lucius: ? Man: Do you know where they are ?

Text: He became so troubled and nervous even though Im merely asked ing if I can bring a friend along. Such flustered reaction Text: Maybe, hes upset that the style of the bathhouse will be copied!?

Owner: Thats indeed troublesome. I just changed shift with my husband, so I dont know where your clothes are~~ My husband has gone to play panchinko*. [T/N: Japanese Pinball] Man: This is troubling!

Text: I can understand the feelings of those flat-faced people to treasure their bathing cultures Text: However, since theyre part of Rome, its their duty to know and abide to the fact that we, the Romanians have the rights to assimilate their culture into our own!

Page 23 Man: AH!? Man: Mister, where are you going!?

Man: You cant go out when youre naked! Text: You can shout all you want, slaves

Text: I need to find Marcus soon Man: Dont be harsh, mister!

Text: I need to take actions before anyone else finds this place. I will definitely make the studio that fired me regret with their whole heart! Lucius: Placing sunshade cloth at the entrance I will be stealing this idea too!

Text: I have to strike while the iron is warm!!

Page 25 Man: Uwaa! Mister, are you alright!? Owner: What happened?! Man: Foreigner-san is feeling well? Text: Its the first time Ive breathed in such air. It feels sick and I feel like throwing up

Text: Its impossible for Romans streets to be invaded by these flat-faced tribes in such a short amount of time. Bubble (below text): Whats wrong? Whats wrong? Bubble (middle): Hes feeling dizzy! Bubble (left): Is it because his clothes got stolen!? Text: . Since its impossible for that to happen, the problem must wil stay with me instead

Man: I guess, there must be other important items other than his clothes? Man2: Look at how sad he is. I feel sorry for him

Text: What exactly should I carry out do Text: If I cant return from here any more!? Man: Mister, mister!!