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Topic sentence: Legalitiy of euthanasia has changed Belgium A. Official information Legalise euthanasia in 2002 Second country that legalise euthanasia B. Reasons of legality Free choice Unbeneficial situation C. Transformation of Belgium society Death become something common Euthanasia promoted as a beautiful and positive way to die D. Example 45-year-old deaf identical twin brothers 44-year-old woman with chronic anorexia nervosa was euthanised E. Punishment Againts the law become marginalized Follow the tradition Conclution: Decisions of making legal euthanasia have decreased morality and human being, therefore death become something cheap.

Paragraph Legality of euthanasia has (had) changed Belgium. In 2002, Belgium became the second country to legalize euthanasia after the Netherlands. Many people think with euthanasia, they can choose their own path of life. Besides, there are some unbeneficial situation such as pain or unsuffficient economy which are force them to do so. Of course using this method can impact the transformation of Belgian society. Term of death become something common and also euthanasia is being promoted as a beautiful and positive way to die not feeling guilty. As an example, 45-year-old deaf identical twin brothers who couldnt bear the thought of going blind were granted euthanasia. Doctors granted their request because they had nothing to live for.

In another case, a 44-year-old woman with chronic anorexia nervosa was euthanised. Although, there are some Belgian who do not agree with this kind of situation have became marginalized. As the result, they must follow the rules which has been legistimated. Therefore decisions of making legal euthanasia have decreased morality and human being, also death become something cheap.

reference: Mortier T. How legal euthanasia changed Belgium for ever. cited 2013 Nov 18. Avalible in URL: HYPERLINK http://www.lifesitenews.com/news/how-legal-euthanasia-changedbelgium-for-ever

EDITED Paragraph Legality of euthanasia has ( had) changed Belgium. In 2002, Belgium became the second country to legalise euthanasia after the Netherlands. Many people think that with euthanasia, they can choose their own path of life (way of death). Besides (this is because of the), there are unbeneficial (unavoidable) situation(condition) such as serious pain or unsuffficient an economy crisis,which forced someone to do so( to choose this path). Of course, using this method can have impact on the transformation of Belgian society. Term of death become something common. and also(Then,) euthanasia is being promoted as a beautiful and positive way to die without feeling any guilty (guilt). As an example, 45-year-old deaf identical twin brothers who couldnt bear the thought of going blind were granted euthanasia. Doctors granted their request because they had nothing to live for. In another case, a 44-year-old woman with chronic anorexia nervosa was euthanised. Although, there are some Belgian who do not agree (disagree) with (when) this kind of situation have became (was) marginalized. As the result (but), they must follow the rules which has (had) been legistimated. Therefore the decisions for making euthanasia a legal act have decreased morality and (in )human being. Also (and) death become something cheap and meaningless.

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