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PHN TCH C TH CC BC VIT BI IELTS WRITING TASK 2

THI NGY 9.7.2016
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chnh thc: Studies have suggested that children watch much more television than they did in the
past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons and what measures should
be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?

CC BC C TH VIT BI
I. INTRODUCTION
Introduction ca IELTS WRITING TASK 2 thng c 2 cu:
+ Introducing the topic (Bng cch Paraphrase the keywords ca bi)
+ Answer the questions in general (Tr li yu cu ca bi)
ny l thuc dng Causes and Solutions, cho nn cc phn c th ta i theo hng sau:
M BI
Cu 1: Paraphrase li cu ca bi Studies have suggested that children watch much more
television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. (Cc nghin cu
ch ra rng tr em xem ti vi nhiu hn trc v dnh t thi gian cho nhng th mang tnh nng ng,
sng to)
Chuyn thnh: Based on scientific research results, children are more exposed to TV
programs than they used to be, while they invest a smaller amount of time in participating
in creative and active activities.
y, thy p dng cch paraphrase bng cch thay i nhng cm t c sn bng nhng cm t c
ngha tng ng. Cc em c k thy cch thy thay c loi t, c cu trc cu, kiu cu mt cch
rt kho v linh hot, qua rt ra kinh nghim cho ring mnh nh.

Studies have suggested that = Based on scientific research results

Watch much more television = Be more exposed to TV programs
They did in the past = They used to
Spend less time on = Invest a smaller amount of time in partticipating in

Cu 2: Tr li cu hi ca bi bi: What are the reasons and what measures should be taken
to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?
Tr li cu hi 1 - What are the reasons?
There are various reasons for this situation.
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Tr li cu hi 2 - What measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active
or creative things? (Nhng bin php no c th p dng gip khuyn khch tr em dnh thi gian cho
nhng th mang tnh sng to v nng ng?)
Nevertheless, numerous solutions can be applied to tackle this problem.
Cu tr li ca thy s dng cu there are some reasons ... gii thiu chung l c mt s l do cho
vic ny. S dng t Nonetheless, ni 2 cu li, th hin tuy vn ang xy ra do mt s
nguyn nhn NHNG vn c cc gii php cho vn ny. y, thy tip tc paraphrase measures
should be taken = solution can be applied

II. BODY PARAGRAPHS

Thn bi thy s vit thnh 2 kh h tr cho nu ra m bi
+ 1 on tr li cho cu hi WHY
+ 1 on tr li cho cu hi HOW
Nhng t c nhc n trong s phi s dng rt nhiu ln trong bi, thy dng a dng cc
cch khc nhau paraphrase gip trnh lp t v nng im lecxical resoure. Cc em hy th t rt ra
trong bi trc, sau xem phn nhng cm t gip nng band im thy tng hp cui bi xem
trng khp vi cc cm em tm c khng nh.
1.

2.

BODY 1
This habit can become prevalent for several reasons. A wide range of parents regard TV as a beneficial
source of entertainment and education without having a knowledge of the potential dangers of
excessive exposure to TV. Therefore, they allow their offspring to spend hours a day immersing
themselves in TV programs. Additionally, a large number of parents do not have sufficient financial
conditions to pay the fees for extra-curricular activities or programs like sport activities, arts clubs or
science clubs, which stimulate childrens initiative and creativity. Therefore, allowing their descendants
to watch much TV is their priority. This habit takes children a great deal of their leisure time, followed
by their less attention to other beneficial programs.
BODY 2
However, a diversity of measures should be taken to handle this problem. Parents are advised to raise
their own awareness of the hidden hazards of childrens excessive TV exposure as well as the values of
permitting children to take part in initiative and creativity stimulation activities so that they will prevent
children from utilizing their time for being glued to TV too much. Another solution is that the
governmental leaders should construct free recreational areas for children and youth unions or other
organizations hold free arts clubs, sports events or science clubs for children at all ages to join.

Written by Nguyn Ti Din

Phone number 0975 184 959
Email: Taidienqv1@gmail.com

Commented [HNT1]: Topic sentence gii thiu 2 th:

+ topic: This habit
+ controlling idea: ph bin v 1 s l do
Commented [HNT2]: Support idea 1: Nhiu ph huynh
coi ti vi nh mt cng c gii tr v gio dc hu ch m
khng nhn thc c nhng tc hi tim n khi xem ti
vi qu nhiu.
Commented [HNT3]: Idea 1: Do b m cho php con
ci xem ti vi nhiu gi mi ngy.
Commented [HNT4]: Support idea 2: nhiu bc ph
huynh khng c iu kin ti chnh tr ph cho
con ci tham gia cc hot ng ngoi kha nh th
thao, ngh thut, khoa hc,.. ci m kch thch tr sng
to ca tr
Commented [HNT5]: Idea 2: Do nhiu bc ph huynh
u tin vic con ci xem ti vi hn vic khc.
Commented [HNT6]: Topic sentence
Commented [HNT7]: Measure 1: B m phi t nng
cao nhn thc ca mnh v mi nguy hi tim n khi tr
con xem ti vi qu nhiu cng nh nhng gi tr ca ca
vic cho php con ci tham gia cc hot ng kch thich
tr sng to v ch ng ngn cn vic chng dnh
hng gi dn mt vo v tuyn.
Commented [HNT8]: Measure 2: Chnh ph nn xy
dng nhng khu vui chi gii tr min ph cho tr em v
cc t chc khc nn t chc nhng s kin th thao
hay cu lc b khoa hc ph hp cho mi la tui.

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III. CONCLUSION
Cch vit Conclusion l paraphrase li phn 2 ca m bi l ok
Introduction
Based on scientific research results, children are more exposed to TV programs than they used to be,
while they invest a smaller amount of time in participating in creative and active activities. There are
various reasons for this situation. Nevertheless, numerous solutions can be applied to tackle this
problem.
Conclusion
In conclusion, while there are a wide range of reasons why this trend gains more popularity, various
solutions can be found to address this matter.
Full essay (written Nguyn Ti Din)
Based on scientific research results, children are more exposed to TV programs than they used to be,
while they invest a smaller amount of time in participating in creative and active activities. There are
various reasons for this situation. Nevertheless, numerous solutions can be applied to tackle this
problem.
This habit can become prevalent for several reasons. A wide range of parents regard TV as a beneficial
source of entertainment and education without having a knowledge of the potential dangers of excessive
exposure to TV. Therefore, they allow their offspring to spend hours a day immersing themselves in TV
programs. Additionally, a large number of parents do not have sufficient financial conditions to pay the
fees for extra-curricular activities or programs like sport activities, arts clubs or science clubs, which
stimulate childrens initiative and creativity. Therefore, allowing their descendants to watch much TV is
their priority. This habit takes children a great deal of their leisure time, followed by their less attention
to other beneficial programs.
However, a diversity of measures should be taken to handle this problem. Parents are advised to raise
their own awareness of the hidden hazards of childrens excessive TV exposure as well as the values of
permitting children to take part in initiative and creativity stimulation activities so that they will prevent
children from utilizing their time for being glued to TV too much. Another solution is that the
governmental leaders should construct free recreational areas for children and youth unions or other
organizations hold free arts clubs, sports events or science clubs for children at all ages to join.
In conclusion, while there are a wide range of reasons why this trend gains more popularity, various
solutions can be found to address this matter.
(290 words)

Written by Nguyn Ti Din

Phone number 0975 184 959
Email: Taidienqv1@gmail.com

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NHNG CM T GIP NNG BAND IM BI VIT NGY 9.7.2016

1

Based on scientific research results

Studies have suggested that

To watch television
To be exposed to TV programs
To be glued to TV
To immerse themselves in TV programs

To become more prevalent

To gain more popularity

An amount of + Uncountable noun

A great deal of + Uncountable noun
A large number of + Plural noun
A wide range of + Plural noun
A diversity of + Plural noun
Numerous + Plural noun
Offspring
Descendant
~ Children

Da trn nhng kt qu nghin cu

khoa hc

Xem ti vi

Tr nn ph bin hn

Nhiu

Con ci

To have a knowledge of

C hiu bit v

The potential dangers

The hidden hazards

Cc mi nguy c tim n

Excessive exposure to TV
Excessive TV exposure

Vic xem ti vi qu nhiu

To have sufficient financial conditions

C iu kin ti chnh

10 To stimulate childrens initiative and creativity

Kch thch s ch ng v sng to

11 To raise their own awareness of something

Nng cao nhn thc v ci g

12 To take part in initiative and creativity stimulation

activities

Tham gia vo cc hot ng kch thch

s ch ng v sng to

13 To construct free recreational areas

Xy dng cc khu vui chi gii tr min

ph

14 To tackle the problem

To handle the problem
To address the matter

Gii quyt vn

Written by Nguyn Ti Din

Phone number 0975 184 959
Email: Taidienqv1@gmail.com