Celebration Slam Poem

TEAM:THE FOUR MUSKETEERS

IKER GARCIA: (Happy Face expression, good movement) The people that
surround me want to see me thrive and overachieve at everything I do

RAFA LANZAGORTA:It has always been a goal of mine to make my parents

proud. They have always had really high expectations for me, and having an older
sister that has perfect grades make my parents expect me to have perfect grades
as well.

SOPHIA INIGUEZ: Their should always be that voice inside my head telling me i
can do it i can do it but honestly it's non existent that pressure to be number one
at everything it can be at anything doesn't come naturally to everyone.
ALINA SANCHEZ: Ever since I was little, Ive always felt pressured to make my
parents proud. It would make me so happy to see them proud.
IKER GARCIA: (Has a mad expressions

, very puzzled) How am I supposed to do

what I want if people have certain expectations for me?The smile that they would
give me for doing something i don't like encloses me, more..more..more. There is
no way of escaping society.
Notes for First draft critique:
Mick: a lot of emotion, Wasnt very clear for the first sentence
Xander: more enthusiasm
Ms. Britt: new topic, doesnt sound like we care very much. Multi language

Poem Draft 2:

ALL:

Loud, obnoxious, rebellious, out of control, and up to no good

IKER GARCIA:
Iker par de andar con esas calmas, ya tienes 13 aos

SOPHIA INIGUEZ
Ponte las pilas sophia, ya estas muy grande para estar haciendo esta calidad de
trabajo. Ya tienes 13 aos.
SOPHIA INIGUEZ;
you wouldn't understand how much im struggling

ALINA SANCHEZ:
Alina para de siempre meter la pata que no sabes que estas son conversaciones de adultos
apenas tienes 13 aos.

RAFA LANZAGORTA:

Rafa que seria de ti si yo no estubiera aqui. Ya tienes 13 anos, tienes que cuidarte de ti mismo

SOPHIA: Me paso usandolo todo el santo dia como ustedes la gente dice, nunca salgo y ya no
convivo con mi familia ni con nadie. Que harias si no tuvieras tu telfono por una semana.

RAFA:
Back in my day we would go outside and play at the fields and read a book, but youre always
on your goddamn phone.

ALINA:
This thing that you call useless is not so you can just hit up your friends.
It is the start of a new era, an era you are far too old to be welcomed into. So sit down and read
your playboy magazine if thats what you call literature.
IKER
Red yellow.blue (2x) the bases of every color. When she goes and starts mixing up her
colors to look purple or green it isnt very attractive. Instead i want to see her. The three colors
that make up her.
RAFA: Deberas quieres q tener mi dinero, porq necesitas tener una niera detrs de nuestras
espaldas viendo todo lo q hacemos. Vengo a pasarla bien no a robar y a hacer cosas malas.
Por qu no puedo nada ms juntarme con mis amigos enves de q me estn vigilando todo el
tiempo.
I KR: I miss the old times when i could walk up and say, I am 12, and get reduced price for
meals.
coming a teen.

ALINA: But now my stomach is sad, my wallet is floppy.

ALL; But hey this is all part of being a teenager

Critique: different languages good, say something in spanish and answer in english, it sound
angry, very much longer

Poem Draft 3

IKER GARCIA:
Iker para de andar con esas calmitas, ya tienes 13 aos

SOPHIA INIGUEZ
Ponte las pilas sophia, ya estas muy grande para estar haciendo esta calidad de
trabajo. Ya tienes 13 aos.

ALINA SANCHEZ:
Alina para de siempre meter la pata que no sabes que estas son conversaciones de adultos
apenas tienes 13 aos.

RAFA LANZAGORTA:

Rafa que seria de ti si yo no estubiera aqui. Ya tienes 13 anos, tienes que cuidarte de ti mismo

SOPHIA: Me paso usandolo todo el santo dia como ustedes la gente dice, nunca salgo y ya no
convivo con mi familia. Que seria de mi si no tuviera mi telfono por una semana.

RAFA:
Back in my day we would go outside and play at the fields and read a book, but youre always
on your goddamn phone.

ALINA:
This thing that you call useless is not so you can just hit up your friends.

SOPHIA INIGUEZ:It is the start of a new era, an era you are far too old to be welcomed into. So
sit down and read your playboy magazine if thats what you call literature.

RAFA: Deberas quieres q tener mi dinero, porq necesitas tener una niera detrs de nuestras
espaldas viendo todo lo q hacemos. Vengo a pasarla bien, no a robar
SOPHIA:Por qu no puedo juntarme con mis amigos enves de que me estn vigilando todo el
tiempo.

RAFA:

Why should I be uncomfortable to go to the park and be afraid of myself.

IKER:
The impact of a sphere hitting my stomach knocking the wind out off me
is the same feeling of when i get left out of the team.
RAFA:
The feeling of the football going through his hands is like when people
mock him with a high five.
IKER (SAD
I would spend time just looking at all of my imperfections. Wearing
clothes bigger than my size just to try to look slimmer.
SOPHIA INIGUEZ:I would cut down the energy source that fueled me and what did i get?
A blackout.
IKER: this is the only way she can avoid having smudges of your jokes on her shirt, on her
skin, on her fucking face?
ALINA: For those of you who paint its not for you to change your landscape,but to smooth out
your canvas.
SOPHIA:the perfect shade of blush she gently put on shadows her natural flushed face as they
call her a clown
ALINA:the desire to lash out at someone when they say that word, as if it was a curse when
that curse has only been a blessing
SOPHIA:it's being born a leopard and put on the spot and not being able to hide your own
nature.
ALINA: see, nature has always had a way to choose which of its creatures will bare a defect

SOPHIA: and some days i wish i was a reptile so i could crawl out of my skin
IKER:
silenciosa

Porq tengo que ser ciudadano de una parte del mundo q hasta mi voz es

RAFA:
pimienta.

Envs de ser simple y planos como ellos mi voz est cubierta con sal y

SOPHIA:
Hay una S que es dividida por una lnea. Divide a los que estn
ms limitados que a los que tienen todo.
The s that is divided by a lne. The rich, The ones that are limited.
RAFA: (mad and loud)
Yo me estoy dando cuenta que nada es gratis en esta
vida.
ALINA:
would be rich.

If I were to get a quarter for every time this phrase has been said i

IKER: (angry)
Si no tienes algo de dinero ya eres nadie en la vida. Este mundo
gira por el dinero. Es lo q estoy viendo

RAFA:
SOPHIA:

Porque no me puedo encabronar?

Trato de no alzar la voz, pero es algo natural.

RAFA:

No nada ms alz la voz porque si.

IKER:

Trato de defenderme.

RAFA:

Why should i get pushed by an adult?

ALINA:

I can follow directions.

RAFA:

That doesnt strip me from saying what is wrong

IKER:

Teens are dumbasses,

ALL:we don't know anything.

Poem Draft 4
IKER GARCIA:
Iker para de andar con esas calmitas, ya tienes 13 aos

ALINA SANCHEZ:
Iker stop being lazy. Youe 13 years old,
RAFA and IKER start being responsible.
SOPHIA INIGUEZ
Ponte las pilas sophia, ya estas muy grande para estar haciendo esta calidad de
trabajo. Ya tienes 13 aos.
ALINA SANCHEZ: Recharge yourself sophia,
IKER:you should be producing better work.
ALINA AND IKER:Youe 13 years old.

ALINA SANCHEZ:
Alina para de siempre meter la pata, que no sabes que estas son conversaciones de adultos
apenas tienes 13 aos.
IKER GARCIA: Alina stop butting into adult conversations.
SOPHIA: Youre barely 13 years old

RAFA LANZAGORTA:

Rafa que seria de ti si yo no estubiera aqui. Ya tienes 13 anos, tienes que cuidarte de ti mismo
IKER GARCIA: What would you do if I wasn't here. Youe 13 years old,
SOPHIA:you should start taking care of yourself.

SOPHIA: como ustedes dicen Me paso usandolo todo el santo dia , nunca salgo y ya no
convivo con mi familia.
ALINA SOPHIA IKER:
Que seria de mi si no tuviera mi telfono por una semana.

RAFA:
Back in my day we would go outside and play at the fields and read a book, but youre always
on your goddamn phone.

ALINA & IKER

This thing that you call useless is not so you can just hit up your friends.
SOPHIA INIGUEZ:It is the start of a new era, an era you are far too old to be welcomed into. So
sit down and read your playboy magazine if thats what you call literature.

RAFA: Deberas quieres q tener mi dinero, porq necesitas tener una niera detrs de nuestras
espaldas viendo todo lo q hacemos.
RAFA & IKER Vengo a pasarla bien, no a robar
SOPHIA:Por qu no puedo juntarme con mis amigos enves de que me estn vigilando todo el
tiempo.

RAFA:

Why should I be uncomfortable to go to the park and be afraid of myself.

IKER:
The impact of a sphere hitting my stomach knocking the wind out off me
is the same feeling of when i get left out of the team.
RAFA:
The feeling of the football going through his hands is like when people
mock him with a high five.
IKER (SAD
I would spend time just looking at all of my imperfections. Wearing
clothes bigger than my size just to try to look slimmer.
SOPHIA INIGUEZ:I would cut down the energy source that fueled me and what did he get?
SOPHIA AND IKER :A blackout.
IKER AND RAFA : Is this is the only way she can avoid having smudges of your jokes
IKER on her shirt.
RAFA Of her skin,
IKER off her fucking mind.
ALINA: For those of you who paint its not for you to change your landscape,but to smooth out
your canvas.
SOPHIA:the perfect shade of blush she gently put on shadows her naturally flushed face
SOPHIA IKER as they call her a clown
ALINA:the desire to lash out at someone when they say that word, as if it was a curse when
that curse has only been a blessing
SOPHIA:it's being born a leopard and put on the spot and not being able to hide your own
nature.
ALINA: see, nature has always had a way to choose which of its creatures will bare a defect
IKER : and some days i wish i was a reptile
SOPHIA: so i could crawl out of my skin
IKER:
silenciosa

Porq tengo que ser ciudadano de una parte del mundo q hasta mi voz es

RAFA:

Envs de ser simple y planos como ellos mi voz est cubierta con

ALL

sal y pimienta.

IKER: My words are coated with salt and pepper.

SOPHIA:
Hay una S que es dividida por una lnea. Divide a los que estn
ms limitados que a los que tienen todo.
IKER AND ALINA The s that is divided by a line. The rich, The ones that are limited.
RAFA: (mad and loud)
vida.
ALINA:
be rich.
IKER: (angry)

Yo me estoy dando cuenta que nada es gratis en esta

If I were to get a quarter for every time this phrase has been said i would

Si no tienes algo de dinero ya eres nadie en la vida.

ALINA IKER Este mundo gira por el dinero.

RAFA:
SOPHIA ALINA:

Porque no me puedo encabronar?

Trato de no alzar la voz, pero es algo natural.

RAFA:

No nada ms alz la voz porque si.

IKER:

Trato de defenderme.

RAFA:

Why should i get pushed by an adult?

ALINA:

I can follow directions.

RAFA:

That doesnt strip me from saying what is wrong

IKER:

Teens are dumbasses,

ALL:

we don't know anything.