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IELTS Writing Samples PDF
Task
What are the benefits of taking part in sport at school and should it be compulsory? Discuss
yourviewsonthistopic.
Answer
Nutrition and fitness are becoming more and more important in our life. Mostpeople believe , that
sport can be significantly beneficial. There are various physical activities, so every person can find
somethingsuitable regardlessofhisability.Inthisessay I willbrieflydiscussthebenefitsofsports
activities.
Firstly,thereisnodoubtthatfitnessandhealtharetremendouslyimportant.Manyexpertsagreethat
participating in sport activities can definitely keep our fitness on a high level. Statistics show that
more and more children are overweight and obese resently, so we should promote the physical
activitiesatschoolandtoengageallstudents.
Comment: (notneeded)
Comment: Recentstatistics
Comment: (notneededhere)
Comment: sothatallstudentsengage
inthem.
Moreover,throughtheseactivities,childrencanimprovetheireducationaloutcomesanddevelopin
differentareas.Ithasbeenproven,thattakingpartinsporthelpstobuildcharacterandpersonality
especially during school years. Physical education assists in developing of discipline, precision,
balanceandcoordination.
Sport can also be very helpful in dealing with children who persistently misbehaviour during and
after school. Wee often observe how a child can transform from a difficult teenager to a great
sportsman. Lastly, I believe that sport is one of the best ways of interacting with other people.
Children learn how to cooperate and respect other peoples decisions. Even though most sport
disciplinsarevery competitivethey teachchildrenabout team valuesandrespecting other players.
Moreoverstudentslearnhowtolosewithgraceandhowtogetupandtryagain.
Takingallthispointsintoconsideration,Ibelievethatsportisveryimportantinourlifeandshould
playasignificantpartineveryschoolscirruculum.Inmyopinionphysicaleducationisasnecessary
asnumeracyandliteracyandshouldbecompulsoryinprimaryandsecondaryschool.Manypeople
wouldagreethatawellfunctioningstudentisonewholooksafterbothmindandbody.
Comment: misbehave
Comment: We
Comment: troublesome
Comment: disciplines
Comment: ,
Comment: curriculum
Work on spelling mistakes. The best way to improve spelling is to write several times
and learn by heart.
Keep the maximum word limit in mind while writing the essay; otherwise you are
likely to make more grammatical and spelling errors.
Essay#2
Task
Insomecountrieschildrenhaveverystrictrulesofbehavior,inothercountriesthey
areallowedtodoalmostanythingtheywant.Towhatextentshouldchildrenhaveto
followrules?
Answer
Peoplefromdifferentcountriesbehavedifferently.Thesedifferencesappearinseveral
aspects.Oneoftheseaspectsistherestrictiononchildrensbehavior.Childrenfromsome
countriesintheworld,suchasChinaorJapan,areexpectedtofollowrulessetbytheir
parents;whilechildrencomefromcountrieslikeAmericalivefreely.Inmyopinion,
controllingchildrensbehavioratanearlyagebenefitstheminthefuture.
Somepeoplemayarguethatrulesofbehaviordestroychildrenscreativity.Iftheyonly
knowhowtofollowrules,therearenotmanydifferencesbetweenhumanandmanmade
machines.
Ontheotherhand,therearesignificantbenefitswhichresultfromchildrenhaving
restrictions.Firstly,atayoungage,childrenlackwisdomandlifeexperience,whereas,
theirparentshaveexperiencedalotintherealworld.Therestrictionstheysetareto
protecttheyoungstersfromunknowndangerous.Furthermore,whenpeopleareyoung,
theyarecuriousabouteverysinglethingexposedtothem.Forinstance,ifachildiscurious
atthetasteofcigarettes,heorshemightbecomeaddictedafterattemptedtocigarettes
whichinturnresultinahighchanceofsufferingfromlungcancer.Infact,theageofpeople
addictedtocigarettesisgettingyoungerandyounger,especiallyincountrieswhere
childrencandowhatevertheywantto.
Allinall,Ibelievethestrictrulesofbehaviorinchildrenarenecessarybecausetheyareset
todirectandprotecttheyoungergeneration.However,therulesshouldbeabletorelease
stepbystepalongwithchildrensgrowth.
Word Count 260
Teacher's comments:
Essay starts with good introduction. However, candidate started making mistakes
which were mainly related to formation of sentences. One or two sentences
seemed irrelevant. Use of vocabulary is good. Grammatical mistakes could have
been avoided. Task completion is fine with sufficient arguments and good essay
format.
Estimated Band Score 7.0
Do not forget to proof read your essay to weed out clerical errors.
Practice indirect speech to fine-tune your sentence formation skills.
Comment: thentheremayremainno
differencebetweenhumansand
machines.
Comment: Dangers.
Comment: aboutthe
Comment: tothem.
Comment: becoming
Comment: eased
Essay#3
Task
Nowadayshistoricbuildingsarebeingdestroyedtobuildnewconstructions,is
thisapositivedevelopment?Explainyourpointofview?
Answer
Somecountriesarepreservingtheirhistoricalbuildings,whilesomeareinvestingon
theirrenovationstogeteconomicbenefit.Ontheotherhand,somecountriesare
demolishingancientstructurestogivewayfornewconstructions.Thisessaywill
describesomeofthepositiveaspectsanddrawbacksofdestroyinghistoricbuildingsin
thefollowingpassages.
Mostofthehistoricbuildingshavetheirownstoryandshouldnotbedestroyedinthe
nameofmodernization.Thesestructurescanberenovatedinordertostrengthen
nationaleconomy.WecanconsiderIndiasTajMahalasaparagon.Itattractsmillionsof
touristseachyearanditisoneofthemajorsourcesofincomeinIndia.Italsoprovides
jobtothousandsoflocalpeople.Ourancestorshadspentafortunetoconstruct
splendidstructuretopassitovertofuturegeneration.Todestroythosemeansshowing
disrespectandwastingalltheirtime,moneyandeffort.
Demolishingoldandfragilehistoricalconstructionstomakenewbuildingsisagood
decisionespeciallyifmaintenanceofthesebuildingsdemandsagreatdealoftimeand
money.Sometimes,leavingthemwithoutmaintenanceordestroyingmayleadtotheir
collapseclaimingpeopleslifeandcancreatedisaster.Wecanhearnewsaboutthe
accidentsoccurredduetocollapseoftheoldbuildings.Thustopreventsuchdisaster,
governmentsshouldreplacethembynewstructure.
AsfarasIamconcerned,Ibelieve,countriesmustsavetheiroldandhistorical
structuresastheycanmakethemeconomicallyandculturallyrich.Ifincase,itisnot
possible,itshouldbedestroyedbutonlyfortheconstructionoflandmarksorpublic
properties.
Comment: revenuefor
Comment: employment
Comment: generations
Comment: whichoccur
Essay#4
Task:
Today,highsalesofpopularconsumergoodsreflectthepowerofadvertisingandnotthe
realneedsofthesocietyinwhichtheyaresold.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree.
Givereasonsforyouranswerandincluderelevantexamplesfromyourownexperience.
Answer:
Itisafactthatmanufacturingcompaniesspendahugeamountofmoneyinordertoadvertise
theirproducts.Althoughmanypeoplebelievethatconsumerspurchasevariousproducts
becauseoftheinfluenceofadvertisements,someothersargueagainstit.Thisessaywilldiscuss
botharguments.
Todaysadvertisementsarestrongenoughtoattractanykindofpeople.Mostofthe
advertisementsareoverexaggeratedrepresentationoftherealproduct.Vulnerablepeopleoften
fellinthistrapandpurchaselowqualitymaterialsunnecessarily.Moreover,advertisements
sometimestargetcertainagegroups,suchasschoolchildrenandadolescents.Inordertoattract
suchimmaturepopulation,advertisingcompaniesmakeuseofprominentsingersoractors.
Sinceadolescentshaveatendencytoimitatetheirfavoriteicons,theypurchasetheproduct.
Apartfromthis,manypeoplegrabthenewlylaunchedproductsinordertoincreasetheirpride
inthesociety.
Comment: fall
Ontheotherhand,manypeoplepurchaseproductsbywatchingtheadvertisement,iftheyare
likelytoimprovetheirlifestyle.Forinstance,ifabusypersoncomestoseeanadvertisement
aboutanewtimesavinghomeappliance,heorsheismorelikelytopurchasethatitem.In
addition,iftheproductisgoodinqualityandreallymeatstheexpectationofthebuyer,itwillget
mouthpublicity.Thiswillsurelyimprovethesalesoftheparticularproduct.Furthermore,there
aremanypeoplewhoarekeenonadvancedtechnologies.Suchpeopleoftenbuylatestproducts
bythinkingthattheysimplifytheirlife.
Toconclude,Ithinkadvertisementplayanimportantroleinimprovingthesalesofaproduct.
Despitethefactthatadvertisementsarenotreal,anincreasingnumberofpeoplestillfallintheir
trap.
Word count: 280
Teacher's comments:
Well done! There are minor mistakes, which can be improved by proof reading the
essay after writing it. Other wise there is proper cohesion and coherence. Appropriate
vocabulary has been used.
Estimated Band Score: 7.5
Comment: advertisements
Essay#5
Task:
On the other hand, there are certain downsides to being a working mother. To
begin with, young children whose parents both work outside the home are
believed to be alienated from their parents. They can not enjoy a balancing
family life. They are often sent to nursing school. This may be advantageous in
termsoftheprofessionalcaretheyreceive butisfarfromconstructivetotheir
psychologicalwellbeing.Moreover,workingmothersattimesfinditdifficultto
work due to discrimination in workplaces. And this leads to a deepened
homesickness.
Inconclusion,thequestiondiscussedisrathercomplexasbothsideshavemerit.
However,animportantissuehereismotherwhodecidestoworkneedstomake
sureworklifeequilibriumisachieved.
Comment: become
Comment: become
Report#1
Task
ThegraphbelowshowsthewaypeopleofSomecountryinvestedtheirmoneyduringthe
years20012006.Writeareportforauniversitytutordescribingtheinformationshown.
Youshouldwriteatleast150words.
Answer
Thebargraphcomparesthewaypeopleinvestedtheremoneyinstockmarketinsome
countriesduringtheyears2001to2006.Thereisanincreasingamountofmoneyinvested
instocksandbondeveryyear.
Comment: their
Itcanbeclearlyseenthatpeopleinsomecountryinvesttheirmoneyonstocks.Thereisa
gradualincreasedintheamountofmoneyinvestedinthestocksduringtheyearsof2001
to2003(210,216and227billiondollarsrespectively).In2004,asuddenincreaseof
moneywasinvestedinastockwhichis289billiondollarsrespectively.Itwasfollowedby
anincreaseintheyearof2005to2006(297and311billiondollars).Thehigheststockwas
311billionintheyear2006.
Comment: Somecountry
Theamountofmoneyinvestedinbondsissmallerascomparedtostocks(100versus210
billiondollars).Althoughbondhaslessinvestment,thetrendofitsinvestmentisincreasing
fromalmost1030billiondollarseveryyear.From100billionitwentupto188in2006.
Inconclusion,peopleinsomecountryinvesttheirmoneymoreinstocksthaninbonds.
Comment: Investedmorethroughout
thegivenperiod.
Comment: Increaseorrise(anounis
required)
Comment: In2001
Comment: Somecountry
Comment: invested
Report#2
Task
Thetablebelowdescribesthepercentagesofhomeschooledstudentsin
SomeCountryin19992004.Writeareportforauniversitylecturerdescribingthe
informationshown.Youshouldwriteatleast150words.
Answer:
Thetableshowsthepercentageofstudentsstudyingathomeinsomecountryin
19992004.Itcanbeclearlyseenthatthekindergartenareconsistentlyhighinpercentage
ofstudentsstudyingathome(2.4to2.9respectively).
Adeclineinpercentageofhomeschooledstudentswasnotedamonggrades12to
grades78fromyear19992001.Thelowestpercentagewasinyear2000amongstudents
ofgrades12whichisonly1.2%.Anincreasingnumberofstudentsdoingthehome
schooledstudywerenotedintheyear2002to2003amonggrades34togrades78.
Studentfromgrades18remainedbelow2%fromyear1999to2001.Intheyear2004,the
highestnumberofpercentageof2.9wasnotedamongkindergartenstudents.Italso
noticedinthesameyearthatstudentsfromgrade18increasedithomeschooledstudyas
comparedfromtheyear1992003.
Comment: Variationinthe
Comment: Somecountry
Comment: was
Comment: from
Comment: notneeded
Comment: wasalso
Comment: their
Comment: to
Tosumup,thekindergartenremainsthehighestpercentageofstudentsfrom1999
2004.
Comment: had
Report#3
Task
Thegraphbelowshowshowpricesof"hightechgadgets"changedovertimein
Somecountry.Writeareportforauniversitytutordescribingtheinformation
shown.Youshouldwriteatleast150words.
Answer
ThegraphcomparesthepricesofnavigationsystemsandsmartphonesinSomecountry
betweenJuly2004andDecember2006.Asitshowsclear,althoughatfirstnavigation
systemshavebeenmuchmoreexpensive,overtheyearspricesfornavigationsystems
andsmartphonesbecameidentical.
In2004anavigationsystemcostalmost4000USD.Inthefirsthalfof2005theprice
dropedto3200USDdecliningsteadilyto3000USDinthesecondhalfof2005.Inthe
followingyear,2006,itfirstcametoanincreaseupto3500USDbetweenJanuaryand
JunebutfromJulytoDecember2006priceswentdownevenunderthelevelof2005
andreached2750USD.
Asitisshownsmartphoneshavebeencheapercomparedtonavigationsystemsduring
thewholeperiod.Startingat3000USDinthesecondhalfof2004thepriceforasmart
phonedeclinedsteadilydownto2750USDduringJanuarytoJune2005.Afterasmall
increaseto2900USDattheendofthesameyearthepricewentdownby300USDto
2600USDmaintainingstabilitythroughout2006.
Althoughtherewasabigdifferenceinthepricesfornavigationsystemsandsmart
phonesin2004andthefirsthalfof2006therewasnodifferenceattheendoftheshown
period.
Comment: ,
Comment: dropped
Comment: ,
Comment: cheaper as compared to
Comment: in
Letter#1
Task
Youarerentinganapartmentandtheneighboursaredisturbingyou.Writea
lettertoyourlandlordexplainingwhattheproblemis,whatdoyoudotosolve
theproblemandwhatactionyouwanttheownertotake.
Answer
DearSir!
Iamwritingyoutocomplainaboutournoisyandobstinateneighboursinadjacent
apartment.
Theynormallybangtheirdoorsinsteadofgentlyclosingthem.Itmakesaloudsound
whichisverydisturbinganddistractsmefrommystudies.Theythrowapartyalmost
everyweekendnightsandplaydeafeningmusicwhichsometimesendsatnextearly
morning.Becauseofthiswecannotsleepinpeaceduringweekendnightswhichmakes
mesleepyonmyworkonfirstdayofweek.
Werequestedthemanumberoftimestoclosethedoorsoftlyandtokeepvolumedown
duringpartiesbuttheygaveusadeafear.Willyoupleasecomehereandtalktothem
personally.Hopefully,theywilllistentoyou.Iftheystilldonotbehavethemselveswe
mayhavetosendacomplainlettertotherealestateagentandrequesttotakeaction
againstthem.
Comment: Missingcomma
Comment: the
Comment: night
Comment: (Avoidstartinganew
sentencewithBecauseorBut)
Comment: feelsleepyatworkonthe
firstdayoftheweek.
Comment: the
Comment: Irequestyoutocomeand
talktothempersonally.
Lookingforwardtohearingfromyou.
Comment: YoursSincerely,
Jackson
-Do not ask questions in a Semiformal letter. Write a request (refer comment
[c5]).
-Always add a comma after the salutation (and not an exclamation mark),(refer
comment [c1])
-Always end your letter with appropriate sign off phrase (refer comment [c6]).
Letter#2
Task
Youmovedtoanewplace.Writetoyourfriendtoinformheraboutyourmoveto
anewplace.Writeherwhyyoumovedanddescribeaboutthenewplaceand
invitehertovisityou.
Answer
DearSmita,
IamwritingtoletyouknowthatImovedfromKensingtontoStratifiedaweekago.I
feelsorelievedtogetagoodunitnearmyoffice.
Asyouknow,Ihadtospendabout3hourseachdayintravellingtoandfromthework.
IrregularityofbusservicesinKensingtonwasagreatproblemforme.Iusuallyusedto
getlateforworkthoughIleavefromhomeearly.Itcausednegativeimpressionand
createdriskforlosingmyjob.So,Idecidedtomove.
FromStratified,ittakesmeonly30minutestomywork.Shoppingcomplexisnearby
andmyunitisabout5minuteswalkfromthestation.Soitisasaferplaceforustolive
incomparisontothatofKensingtonwhereIhadtowalkforabout15minutesfrombus
stop.
Comment: havemoved
Comment: usedtoleave
Comment: inthemindofmy
employer
Comment: reach
Iwouldlovetoshowyoumynewapartment.Whydontyoucomehereforlunchon
comingweekendandspendawholedayhere?
Lookingforwardtohearingfromyou.
Comment: missingcomma
Withlove
Word Count: 177 words
Teacher's comments:
The essay is quite good. It has been well arranged with good ideas. Student
has clearly displayed the understanding of writing informal letters. However,
better vocabulary use and more structured sentences could have helped in
getting higher bands.
Estimated Band Score 6.5
Suggestions:
Use more vocabulary in your sentences. e.g. (commuting to office place had
been a big hazard for me. / My new accommodation is in proximity to my
office.) Proof read the letter in order to eliminate mistakes.
Letter#3
Task
Youhaveapenfriendlivinginanothercountryandhe/sheiscurioustolearn
aboutthemajornewsitemsinyourcountry.
Answer
DearSam,
Iamsorry,ihavntbeenwritingyouforsuchalongtime.Irememberinyourlastletter
youhavementionedcurrentaffairsandmanyothergossipsaboutyourcountry.Nowits
myturn.
AsyouknowthatIndiaisoneofthehottestcountry,andsummersaregoingonthese
days.Manyofthepoorpeoplewithoutshelteraredyingbecauseofextremelyhot
atmosphere.Recessionseemstobeacalamityinthecountryandleadstoaterrible
blowonpeoplesjobsaswellaspropertyrates.MybusinessisgoingdownasimaReal
Estateagent.Anyway,Thereisaclamourofpoliticiansontheroads,theyarebeingso
nicethesedays,inordertogetthevotesfromthepublic.
IndianteamsnameresoundedallovertheworldregardingitsvictoryonEnglandinthe
worldcup.Governmenthasmadestrictlegislatesagainstthedisparitybetween
religionsandcasts.Togetridofheavypollution,especiallyinmetrocities,manyofthe
carswhichrunonbatteriesareavailableinthemarket.Guesswhat?Iboughtone.
DoletmeknowifyouplantovisitIndiainyouupcomingholidays.Takegoodcareof
yourself,beintouch.GivemygreetingstoUncleandAunty.
Withlove,
InderGrewal.
Word Count 214
Teacher's comments:
Letter is well written. Student has displayed a good understanding of writing
informal letters. Use of vocabulary is fine. Grammatical knowledge is good.
However, coherence and cohesion could have been improved by using
connectives.
Estimated Band Score 7.0
Do not forget to proof read your Task after finishing it.
Avoid using (dont , havent) and use (do not, have not)
Comment: I
Comment: havenot
Comment: Iam
Comment: there
Comment: religionandcaste