Blog

Sun
2015/07/22
There are many kinds of blog such as travel, technology news, music and sports. If
I were a blogger, my blog would be about technology news. I will upgrade iti once
every two to one dayii. There will be some categoryiii of my article. For example, there
will be software, apps and information news. In my article, I will write something
about my experience of using software, how to optimize your system or the important
news about technology, of course, I will add some personal opinion of the news.
Furthermore, in my article, I will give the hyperlinks of where to download the
software and where I learn this news to visitorsiv.
The layout of my blog would be very simple. On the top, there will be a logo of
my blog. Right side of itv, there will be a category list, searching tool and music
player. The rest of the area will be my article. I will put the most popular article on the
top of the article list and the others will be listed following the time I wrote themvi. I
will not put any display ads in my blog even though I can make money []vii. The ads
will annoy visitors and make the layout of my blog become chaosviii.
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The pronoun it used here is not very clear. You could use the blog to give your reader a better
sense of indication, which will make your sentence much more concrete and clear.

ii The proper expression for the idea of frequency that you want to express here is every day or at
least every other day.

iii The word category here should be in the plural form. Since you use some as an adjective
modification of the following noun category and some indicates an idea of plurality, you should
use categories instead of category.

iv The indirect object to visitors of the verb give should be moved forward and placed right
after the verb give because the direct object of the verb is too long, which will cause some
misunderstanding while reading the sentence.

v On the right side of the blog or on the right side of the logo?

vi You could use according to the chronological order or according to the time that I publish
them.

vii A piece of information is somehow lost in this sentence. You could add a prepositional phrase to
make the information complete such as from the ads display.

viii appear chaotic might be a better choice for you.