M E M O RAN D U M

TO: Riley Mosby

Student Writer, ENGW 105 018

THROUGH: Shayla Atkins, M.A.

Lecturer, Department of English

FROM: Jibri Muhammad

Student Reviewer, ENGW 105 018

DATE: February 27, 2017

SUBJECT: First Essay Reviewers Comments

I write to address your essay Beowulf Essay that you submitted on February 11. There
were few areas where you could make improvements.

The first issue I noticed was the title of the essay. The title of the essay could have been
more interesting instead of just Beowulf Essay. An effective way to come up with an attention
grabbing title is by presenting it as a question or a shocking statement. When you start with a
captivating title, the rest of your essay seems more appealing to the reader.

There were few grammatical errors that could have been avoided by proofreading more
thoroughly or having others proofread the work.

In addition, it would be beneficial to the reader if you put the prompt for the essay, so we
understand the purpose of the essay. I also noticed there was no works cited page, so I wasnt
able to determine where your quotes came from.

Overall, this essay was well written and captivating to me. I was able to envision parts of
the story taking place. It was difficult to revise the essay because there werent many errors.
Taking these comments into consideration could make the essay even better.