Spencer Finkel

ENC20135

Professor Doran

30 April 2017

Revision Explanations

My revision to project two comes as an additional part to be inserted

after the seventh paragraph. The section explains the program cuts the

Trump administration is planning on making to shrink the federal debt.

Instead of reducing the already too high military budget, the cuts will be

made to five programs dedicated to environmental protection. The

paragraph makes it clear that a lack of environmental policy is detrimental

to private business and the rest of the economy. My paper is about why

we cannot reduce environmental policy to stimulate the economy. The

answer to that is because the health of our environment is pertinent to

the growth of our economy. I added this paragraph to answer my thesis.

I revised my bibliography to simply get a better grade. My original

document lacked in its MLA formatting and included sources that were

never used in my paper. I also did not have the seven scholarly sources

needed to fulfil the requirement on the syllabus. My revising added

additional scholarly sources and editing of previous source explanations.

Previously, I missed points for incorrect citations with scholarly sources. In

this revision, I fixed the citations to correctly reflect the MLA 8 format. In

my new bibliography, you will find ten sources, seven scholarly articles,

and three web articles, all properly cited.